Comment from poetbear

Excellent

Rainbows come and go as a great writer said .
Thanks for your beautifully crafted and written reminder of that.
Reads well and makes sense.
Great artwork

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2016

Thank you.

Steve

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This gives a clear but whimiscal picture of a winter lake. You are seeking past the clouds and mists on the lake, maybe to look for the return of Spring or maybe a new life or new knowledge.

Congrats on your honorable mention.

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks, Joan.

Yes, I like to leave questions like that up to the reader's own imagination. Maybe I was just looking for my way home! :O)

Steve

reply by dragonpoet on 02-Jul-2016

You're welcome, Steve. Good poems should always leave questions.

Joan

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Etheree. Coming through the mist down from a mountain it feels like you are walking in the clouds but you still can't touch the rainbows.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

Thanks, Sandra. There are a couple of places where I see this and it's always breathtaking.

Steve

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi Steve,
this was a great descriptive poem that described the beauty and serenity f your words. Very relaxing to read.
I hope you do well in the contest. Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

And thanks again. One of my favourite scenes in nature.

Steve

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

This is quietly beautiful. I'll lay odds it's the winner. The traveler moves from a valley, through mists and a boundless lake seeking elusive truth and wisdom. For some reason, happiness eludes him.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016

You can lay odds, but I wouldn't be taking them. I haven't had a win all year, and I doubt it will happen with this.

But thanks for the fine review and the confidence - I need some!

Steve

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Sigh.... This is a beautiful touch with life in the clouds. Not many Etherees can take us there, but this one does. It reminds me of Gungalo and her cloud-tripping experiences. You paint a beautiful scene of what the world looks like from the other side of the rainbow.
Great work here, Steve.
Best of luck in the contest.
Rose.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016

Thanks, Rose. I must admit I was never a big fan of Gungalo, but she certainly had some gorgeous imagery. I struggled with this - I had the scene clearly in my head, but I re-worked the middle and ending a number of times...

Steve

reply by Just2Write on 26-Jun-2016

Well, your efforts paid off. This turned out well. R.

Comment from Ima L. Ami

Excellent

This is awesome and gives the reader the feeling of floating on the clouds with you as you speak... like actually hearing your voice. The message is subtle but true and meaningful. Perfect flow and rhythm as well. Great work!

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thanks for the lovely review.

Steve

reply by Ima L. Ami on 26-Jun-2016

You're quite welcome!

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Seems like everyone is on the etheree kick. It is a neat form and fun to do. the challange is to make it flow and not jump from line to line. You did just that. Very good.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thanks, barb - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from cterp

Excellent

Very nice. I like the poetic contradictions you worked in. Snowy mist, shimmering lake, traversing a cloud. I wonder why you capitalized "Can't" in the next-to-last line. It's the only non-standard punctuation in the piece.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thank you!

The capital was a simple mistake, so thanks for spotting it. Truth to tell, I re-worked the ending so many times, it's a wonder there weren't more errors.

Steve

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is a lovely theme for the etheree contest. I think you have two lines with 5 syllables. I like your use of enjambment. You are a story teller, and that ups the bar in all your contest entries. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

Thanks, Joy.

Blessed are the syllable-counters, for they shall have their names pronounced correctly in heaven.

Steve