The Belt Buckle
You Got To Be Kidding!4 total reviews
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This is a fine entry into the "Use These Words" contest. You have used your words well. The storyline is very interesting....I love anything Western! I this a chapter from a book you are writing or only for the contest? You have left me hanging here wanting to know more about Gale. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
This is a fine entry into the "Use These Words" contest. You have used your words well. The storyline is very interesting....I love anything Western! I this a chapter from a book you are writing or only for the contest? You have left me hanging here wanting to know more about Gale. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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do not fret will be more forth coming in the future
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That's great to hear! Look forward to further chapters...God bless and hugs, Susanne
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THANKS AND KEEP LOOKIGN IT WILL BE THERE WHEN YEA LEAST EXPECT IT
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lol...I shall keep looking for the next part of this. God bless and hugs, Susanne
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IF YOU GO BACK THROUGH THE PAST FEW YEARS OF MY WORK YOU WILL FIND QUITE A FEW WESTERNS TO KEEP YOU COMPANY ON A RAINY NIGHT
Comment from Jay Squires
This has the potential to be a very entertaining story. It's a shame you didn't spend any time editing it before you posted. I had to deduct a star for the nits, but it's only temporary. As soon as you make the corrections, I'll return the star. Just let me know.
No one knew for sure when the rangers were going to get there only soon. [Comma, Em dash (--) or ellipsis (...) needed after "there"]
Mike and Jack were up to the challenge {,}just waiting for the day to come.
The Black Smith said, "We best waste no time chatting." [The "blacksmith" said,...]
Saddling up they continued onto the sheriffs office. [Saddling up {,} they continued (onto ?--perhaps "toward" the SHERIFF'S office >> possessive]
"It's not like either of you can cook." Bart said [ ... you can cook," (comma not period) + you need a period at end of sentence.]
As they walked into the sheriffs office, [again, SHERIFF'S office (possessive)]
A silly grin crossed their faces [One grin was shared by all the faces?]
what mischief have you all been up to?" He inquired, [Don't capitalize "he" before inquired. It's a speech tag]
tear the town up." The judge won't be here till the first of next week. [You are continuing on the quote, so you need the quote mark at the end of "week," instead.]
also a Texas Rangers Star pinned to her chest. [...a Texas RANGERS' star (possessive and "star" not capitalized.]
Well I too am sorry, but they will have to wait it out for the judge. [No quote marks used.
will go easy on the with a few words from me and the boys. [... go easy on the (???) with a few words...]
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Here you go my friend. Thanks for letting me know. It's hard to sit down with that star in my pocket.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
This has the potential to be a very entertaining story. It's a shame you didn't spend any time editing it before you posted. I had to deduct a star for the nits, but it's only temporary. As soon as you make the corrections, I'll return the star. Just let me know.
No one knew for sure when the rangers were going to get there only soon. [Comma, Em dash (--) or ellipsis (...) needed after "there"]
Mike and Jack were up to the challenge {,}just waiting for the day to come.
The Black Smith said, "We best waste no time chatting." [The "blacksmith" said,...]
Saddling up they continued onto the sheriffs office. [Saddling up {,} they continued (onto ?--perhaps "toward" the SHERIFF'S office >> possessive]
"It's not like either of you can cook." Bart said [ ... you can cook," (comma not period) + you need a period at end of sentence.]
As they walked into the sheriffs office, [again, SHERIFF'S office (possessive)]
A silly grin crossed their faces [One grin was shared by all the faces?]
what mischief have you all been up to?" He inquired, [Don't capitalize "he" before inquired. It's a speech tag]
tear the town up." The judge won't be here till the first of next week. [You are continuing on the quote, so you need the quote mark at the end of "week," instead.]
also a Texas Rangers Star pinned to her chest. [...a Texas RANGERS' star (possessive and "star" not capitalized.]
Well I too am sorry, but they will have to wait it out for the judge. [No quote marks used.
will go easy on the with a few words from me and the boys. [... go easy on the (???) with a few words...]
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Here you go my friend. Thanks for letting me know. It's hard to sit down with that star in my pocket.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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THINK I GOT IT THIS TIME AROUND SURE APPRECIATE THE HELP
Comment from zekeziemann
I got a kick out ot your tale. Shouldn't ranger be capitalized? The tale leads to more and you might want to think about episode two. Love Westerns.
Zeke
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
I got a kick out ot your tale. Shouldn't ranger be capitalized? The tale leads to more and you might want to think about episode two. Love Westerns.
Zeke
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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started on it as we speak
Comment from candyfink
The introduction of the story helps the reader to connect to it................ good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing....................
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
The introduction of the story helps the reader to connect to it................ good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing....................
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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thank you for your kindness