Spiritual Work
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "An Answered Prayer"Poems and Essays
13 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
Teri,
This a wonderful and heartwarming story of love and romance with God as the guide. He is our divine matchmaker for he created us and knows who it is we are to become one with. Your story brought tears to my eyes as I read it because it reminded me of how I met my wife, which happened similar fashion but under different circumstances.
As you are one of my favorite reviewers, I think it only fair that I begin reviewing your writings as well. I must say though that it is difficult sometimes to keep up with answering all of the writers here on FanStory who review my work. Any tips you may offer on doing so will be greatly appreciated. I am down to 45 left out of over 80.
I am currently working on a short story that will reveal our Christian romance story for entry in the next contest.
God Bless,
Eugene
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
  |
Teri,
This a wonderful and heartwarming story of love and romance with God as the guide. He is our divine matchmaker for he created us and knows who it is we are to become one with. Your story brought tears to my eyes as I read it because it reminded me of how I met my wife, which happened similar fashion but under different circumstances.
As you are one of my favorite reviewers, I think it only fair that I begin reviewing your writings as well. I must say though that it is difficult sometimes to keep up with answering all of the writers here on FanStory who review my work. Any tips you may offer on doing so will be greatly appreciated. I am down to 45 left out of over 80.
I am currently working on a short story that will reveal our Christian romance story for entry in the next contest.
God Bless,
Eugene
Comment Written 10-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
-
Thank you my friend. There is no set way to review to be honest. I just ask for help from above when I write and review. Thanks, Teri
Comment from foxangie123
I had read this before today and I think it is an awesome piece of witnessing through writing. It is excellent and truly shows the love Christ as He wanted us to have. Keep them coming please.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
|
I had read this before today and I think it is an awesome piece of witnessing through writing. It is excellent and truly shows the love Christ as He wanted us to have. Keep them coming please.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
-
Thank you my friend for the encouraging review. hugs, Teri
Comment from Sankey
Awww, this sounds nice. Looking forward to here it is going. I know the Christians in here will be supportive of you in this endeavour. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
|
Awww, this sounds nice. Looking forward to here it is going. I know the Christians in here will be supportive of you in this endeavour. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
-
Thank you for the nice review. Teri
Comment from jlsavell
Teri7, this will do very well in the contest.It is evident you have great faith and I know what you have been through. Best wishes... Jimi
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
Teri7, this will do very well in the contest.It is evident you have great faith and I know what you have been through. Best wishes... Jimi
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Thank you Jimi. hugs, Teri
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Teri
= This is a wonderful story for the prompt.
= Nice and light-hearted.
= And the guy gets the girl, as does the girl get the guy. (*<*)
= Good luck in the contest, my friend.
* * A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down * *
Cheers â?¦ Jacqueline / Jax
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
Hi, Teri
= This is a wonderful story for the prompt.
= Nice and light-hearted.
= And the guy gets the girl, as does the girl get the guy. (*<*)
= Good luck in the contest, my friend.
* * A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down * *
Cheers â?¦ Jacqueline / Jax
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Thank you for the review. hugs, Teri
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Teri what a nice Christina romance story to read. How interesting there are two Johns in your life
I noticed this part of you story that I have a question
about--
John, I think that would be a great idea.
((We are neither one children.))
is this what you meant to say?
Gert
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
Hello Teri what a nice Christina romance story to read. How interesting there are two Johns in your life
I noticed this part of you story that I have a question
about--
John, I think that would be a great idea.
((We are neither one children.))
is this what you meant to say?
Gert
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Gert, I guess I say things a little different than others at times. Just the way I talk. Thanks for the review. Teri
-
You are welcome Teri The best to you in this contest.
Smiles
Gert
Comment from AnnaLinda
Teri,
Your romance story was written very well and kept me interested the entire
time I was reading it. I like how you begin this with introducing your character
and set a nice visual scene. When you wrote the following line, I was not clear on
the fact that "left" meant that he died:
"He had *left her only due to injuries sustained in battle"
Perhaps stating that he was deceased would help clarify that, especially since his name is the same name as her new flame...John:) You could just write something like, 'he was no longer in her life, because he died in battle.' or had died...
I think your story is a really good match for the contest: Christian Romance
Story. I like the fact that they had somewhat known each other prior to them agreeing to date formally...and that John knew her character and faith. I hope she has good enough knowledge about him too...
I know some of those pharmacists are addicts...lol
Below are just a few minor typos and a few suggestions:
This sentence has an extra word (on) - You could also replace "things" to 'items.'
"Hopping in her car she headed to the grocery store for some nonperishable *things to make do *(on) for now"
Here you have "begin" instead of began
Mary's heart *{begin} to flutter as she heard his words."
I suggest a comma in the following line where indicated:
"Here she was in front of his eyes(,) even more beautiful than ever.
I suggest a different arrangement for your thoughts below.
"We are neither one children."
Suggestion:
'Neither one of us are children'
Your last line should have a comma as indicated below:
"With that conversation behind them(,) it started a whole new outlook on life for both of them."
Well, I really did enjoy this and I like its purity and nice energy and your writing
style. I hope you don't mind me offering those suggestions. We want this to win after all. :)
Linda
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
Teri,
Your romance story was written very well and kept me interested the entire
time I was reading it. I like how you begin this with introducing your character
and set a nice visual scene. When you wrote the following line, I was not clear on
the fact that "left" meant that he died:
"He had *left her only due to injuries sustained in battle"
Perhaps stating that he was deceased would help clarify that, especially since his name is the same name as her new flame...John:) You could just write something like, 'he was no longer in her life, because he died in battle.' or had died...
I think your story is a really good match for the contest: Christian Romance
Story. I like the fact that they had somewhat known each other prior to them agreeing to date formally...and that John knew her character and faith. I hope she has good enough knowledge about him too...
I know some of those pharmacists are addicts...lol
Below are just a few minor typos and a few suggestions:
This sentence has an extra word (on) - You could also replace "things" to 'items.'
"Hopping in her car she headed to the grocery store for some nonperishable *things to make do *(on) for now"
Here you have "begin" instead of began
Mary's heart *{begin} to flutter as she heard his words."
I suggest a comma in the following line where indicated:
"Here she was in front of his eyes(,) even more beautiful than ever.
I suggest a different arrangement for your thoughts below.
"We are neither one children."
Suggestion:
'Neither one of us are children'
Your last line should have a comma as indicated below:
"With that conversation behind them(,) it started a whole new outlook on life for both of them."
Well, I really did enjoy this and I like its purity and nice energy and your writing
style. I hope you don't mind me offering those suggestions. We want this to win after all. :)
Linda
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Thank you for your help. I always appreciate your help my friend. hugs, Teri
-
;)
-
Thank you always. Teri
-
Welcome:)
-
Thank you always. Teri
Comment from damommy
This is a very uplifting story, one that has a happy ending after the girl had so much unhappiness.
It flowed well and was easy to read, keeping my attention.
There are several places where a comma is needed, such as "Reaching down," and "Getting dressed,:
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
This is a very uplifting story, one that has a happy ending after the girl had so much unhappiness.
It flowed well and was easy to read, keeping my attention.
There are several places where a comma is needed, such as "Reaching down," and "Getting dressed,:
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Thank you for the review. I will go back and fix that. hugs, Teri
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm a real sucker for happy endings, especially those in nice stories. Although, the ugly truth is, we never really know anyone, and few are ever the person we see out every day. I'm sad to say. But it's always nice to wish and hope for that one in a million. Thanks for another enjoyable read. :-)
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
I'm a real sucker for happy endings, especially those in nice stories. Although, the ugly truth is, we never really know anyone, and few are ever the person we see out every day. I'm sad to say. But it's always nice to wish and hope for that one in a million. Thanks for another enjoyable read. :-)
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Thank you for the nice review. Teri
Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed reading this upbeat short story. God puts in front of us the right people at the right time. Just what we need at the moment. Good entry into the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
I enjoyed reading this upbeat short story. God puts in front of us the right people at the right time. Just what we need at the moment. Good entry into the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Thank you Marilyn. hugs, Teri
