The Board Room Meeting
Resentment26 total reviews
Comment from trailblazer101
The drinks machine begged, and she stopped to grab a much needed caffeine boost. She approached the door to the meeting room and after a slight hesitation opened the door.
Colorful and sets the stage for what is to follow.
And this completes the write!
This is the twenty-first century, so wake up. Women in business are here to stay. We're as well-educated as you are or perhaps even better so. Ditto to you Paul. All you are is a nodding puppy. I've had enough, and I'll walk out right now. The Directors will decide what is to happen with me, but at least there are two women on that board."
Well said.
Ready for publication although it's not my genre.
It's a fiver
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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The drinks machine begged, and she stopped to grab a much needed caffeine boost. She approached the door to the meeting room and after a slight hesitation opened the door.
Colorful and sets the stage for what is to follow.
And this completes the write!
This is the twenty-first century, so wake up. Women in business are here to stay. We're as well-educated as you are or perhaps even better so. Ditto to you Paul. All you are is a nodding puppy. I've had enough, and I'll walk out right now. The Directors will decide what is to happen with me, but at least there are two women on that board."
Well said.
Ready for publication although it's not my genre.
It's a fiver
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for this great review. Much appreciated. All best. Ulla:)
Comment from Mary Wakeford
A story with a great build, and a feel for the ordinary as described in the opening wake up call and relationship between Charlie and her husband, who remained nameless, but is likely going to be pivotal as the story builds. My only suggestion would be to get that name out there for continued character build and buy in by the reader. Looking forward to future installments.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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A story with a great build, and a feel for the ordinary as described in the opening wake up call and relationship between Charlie and her husband, who remained nameless, but is likely going to be pivotal as the story builds. My only suggestion would be to get that name out there for continued character build and buy in by the reader. Looking forward to future installments.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Hi Mary, thanks so much for this great review. I'm so pleased. It has occurred to me to take the story further, and I may just do that. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah yes, the old bad boss who in this case happens to be male, taking credit for the work of an underling. It's about the lowest thing a person in a leadership can do, but it does happen with alarming frequency and from both sexes.
Is this a chapter from a novel Ulla? it seems to be a short story.
Anyway great job. I think this premise goes over well in the 21st century. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Ah yes, the old bad boss who in this case happens to be male, taking credit for the work of an underling. It's about the lowest thing a person in a leadership can do, but it does happen with alarming frequency and from both sexes.
Is this a chapter from a novel Ulla? it seems to be a short story.
Anyway great job. I think this premise goes over well in the 21st century. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Hi Gloria, Thanks for your great review. No, it is or was just a short story, but I may build on it, as I think I could expand on the story line. I'm thinking about it at the moment. Thanks again. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from nehasri
Good job! I couldn't control my smirk from becoming an ear-to-ear smile and then a sinister laugh! I'm not against men, I believe we need each other to balance things out. But, I certainly detest the kind who think women belong in the home. Nothing wrong with the woman belonging in the home, but let it be her choice, not yours! A very fitting end to the story!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Good job! I couldn't control my smirk from becoming an ear-to-ear smile and then a sinister laugh! I'm not against men, I believe we need each other to balance things out. But, I certainly detest the kind who think women belong in the home. Nothing wrong with the woman belonging in the home, but let it be her choice, not yours! A very fitting end to the story!
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thanks very much and I totally agree with your comments. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment from jpduck
I'm not sure this quite works. I think the problem lies with the changing POVs. It would help a lot, I think, if you insert another spacer (<><><><><>) after 'so he'd had to hire the pompous bitch.'
Typos/SPAGs. (* * indicates suggested insertions):
'Thinking of whom, had to be woken up' (This doesn't really work. I think the least you can get away with would be 'Thinking of whom reminded her he had to be woken up').
'and *he* couldn't*,* for his life*,* see that a woman had any business in a job'
Adrian
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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I'm not sure this quite works. I think the problem lies with the changing POVs. It would help a lot, I think, if you insert another spacer (<><><><><>) after 'so he'd had to hire the pompous bitch.'
Typos/SPAGs. (* * indicates suggested insertions):
'Thinking of whom, had to be woken up' (This doesn't really work. I think the least you can get away with would be 'Thinking of whom reminded her he had to be woken up').
'and *he* couldn't*,* for his life*,* see that a woman had any business in a job'
Adrian
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Hi Adrian, thanks so much, and as always thanks for your great help. I've made the changes. You have taught me so much. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Gone but not forgotten
You go girl!! How many times have we all wanted to do just this? I was in upper management through my career and oh my god, the incompetence in the level directly above me (to which I had to report) was astounding. I just kept moving on, breaking all the rules about "not job hopping" and hopped my way to Vice President. Then found that my boss, the head honcho, was an IDIOT! A narcissistic idiot to boot. So I've been an entrepreneur ever since. (PS - after I left, I did work with the one board member I felt any confidence in...and my former boss was gone in less than a year.) OH, and that board member? My first and best client ever since! I LOVE this story!
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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You go girl!! How many times have we all wanted to do just this? I was in upper management through my career and oh my god, the incompetence in the level directly above me (to which I had to report) was astounding. I just kept moving on, breaking all the rules about "not job hopping" and hopped my way to Vice President. Then found that my boss, the head honcho, was an IDIOT! A narcissistic idiot to boot. So I've been an entrepreneur ever since. (PS - after I left, I did work with the one board member I felt any confidence in...and my former boss was gone in less than a year.) OH, and that board member? My first and best client ever since! I LOVE this story!
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Oh, thank you you so much for this great review, and it is great that you can identify with it so much, having been close to the same situation. That's really interesting. All the best.Ulla:)))
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Very close to the situation. I actually got fired and the board (most of them anyway) didn't know it was going to happen. BUT I've been a happy entrepreneur for more than two decades because of it, so win/win!
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What can I say, other than , good for you!!
Ulla:)))
Comment from Serendipity!
You might be able to eliminate one of the she's like this: (After waking early in the morning, and realising that it would be half an hour before the alarm would go off,
You definitely got your point across although I certainly wouldn't have had that kind of courage.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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You might be able to eliminate one of the she's like this: (After waking early in the morning, and realising that it would be half an hour before the alarm would go off,
You definitely got your point across although I certainly wouldn't have had that kind of courage.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank ou so much for the great review. I'm looking into your suggestion. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from create4christ
Excellent RESENTMENT ROOM entry. Good luck with your contest. Your characters are well thought out and I can see each of them in my mind's eye. You have pulled me, your reader, into your story and have made me want to hear more. I hope you're going to take it farther.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Excellent RESENTMENT ROOM entry. Good luck with your contest. Your characters are well thought out and I can see each of them in my mind's eye. You have pulled me, your reader, into your story and have made me want to hear more. I hope you're going to take it farther.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you ever so much. Glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from c_lucas
Women are here to stay. Some hold the CEO position. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Women are here to stay. Some hold the CEO position. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you so very much. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Kooky Clown
I have given this a six as when I finished reading it I really enjoyed it and the message it portrayed I thought good for you Charlie then I read the writing prompt and I understood it more and raised my rating, it was really clever, well done.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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I have given this a six as when I finished reading it I really enjoyed it and the message it portrayed I thought good for you Charlie then I read the writing prompt and I understood it more and raised my rating, it was really clever, well done.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Oh, Kooky how lovely is this. Not only am I thrilled with the six, but so happy that you liked it. Thanks again. All the best. Ulla:)))
