From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Passion's Field"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from Ricky1024
Sir greenest found by few so true in today's world according my seven laws of judication based on 7 Deadly Sins the first being of course addictions and alcoholism the second being the tobacco industry the Serbian oil industry the force be in the banking industry V being telecommunication industry the 6 p.m. lack of monopolization of course the very last most important like a relationship thanks for just well-written piece happy New Year dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Sir greenest found by few so true in today's world according my seven laws of judication based on 7 Deadly Sins the first being of course addictions and alcoholism the second being the tobacco industry the Serbian oil industry the force be in the banking industry V being telecommunication industry the 6 p.m. lack of monopolization of course the very last most important like a relationship thanks for just well-written piece happy New Year dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thanks Ricky, for your gracious and kind review and stars. I APPRECIATE BOTH VERY MUCH! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from mermaids
The images of nature ad to the emotion and feeling of your words. I admire your use of rhyming words and your smooth flow of lines. "For love exists in gratitude" is a wonderful use of words that is so true and adds to the strength of your words.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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The images of nature ad to the emotion and feeling of your words. I admire your use of rhyming words and your smooth flow of lines. "For love exists in gratitude" is a wonderful use of words that is so true and adds to the strength of your words.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you sincerely mermaids, for your lovely review and stars, all of which are greatly appreciated! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent work. I love the flow and balance of your words and will re-read it and savor the meanings again and again. Just lovely! Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Excellent work. I love the flow and balance of your words and will re-read it and savor the meanings again and again. Just lovely! Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Glad to meet you Sugarray77 and thanks so much for the gracious stars and lovely review! Please stay tuned! HIS GRAYESS: Vance
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Gratitude is the key of a happy life. When we are grateful for what we have, we cannot feel unhappy with what we don't have. A passion for God and life itself is all we really need.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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A very well-written poem. Gratitude is the key of a happy life. When we are grateful for what we have, we cannot feel unhappy with what we don't have. A passion for God and life itself is all we really need.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much Sandra, for your lovely review and stars. I knew that if anyone would GET MY INTENDED MESSAGE, IT WOULD BE YOU! LOVE AND GRATITUDE ALWAYS: Vance
Comment from Jm4805
Love the sentiment; nothing more holy than a moment alone outside, contemplating the force of nature; life, death, and everything beyond. Something about the way the wind blows or the tree smells; reminds me of how much more there is out there.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Love the sentiment; nothing more holy than a moment alone outside, contemplating the force of nature; life, death, and everything beyond. Something about the way the wind blows or the tree smells; reminds me of how much more there is out there.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you sincerely Jm 4805 for this wonderful and uplifting review and stars..so much appreciated! hia grayness: Vance
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Anytime
Comment from rama devi
INDEED< dear Vance, this does bring a light of joy and comfort deeply within me as I read it, because it is so lucidly clear that the poems stems from that very sanctuary in your own heart, so it resonates in the reader's inner sanctum too.
I love the tone and tenor of this, the voicing, imagery and long-flowing-lines. Love the theme and POV pus all the masterful phonetics woven with finesse.
A few comma suggestions:
My eyes reach out to seek a place where I might,(no ,) but a calm and soothing sonnet yield(,)
And yet the wafting steam of desire brings only fixed attention to this tangled mind(,) now sealed
Yet now it cleanses deep, my heart and eager mind(,) and shines, alas(,) my mission bright and clear
Reflect(,) with all the strength of will my heart and mind may generate, to offer what I believe is true
*optional hyphen:
And pray these lines of deeply(-)pondered thought may bring a light of joy and comfort deeply within you
The closing line is powerful and well voiced:
For Love exists in GRATITUDE and therein shall yield a bond with GOD that's so very sadly found by few
Fine alliteration of G and F and S etc.
Bravo
Blessings and Best Smiles,
rd
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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INDEED< dear Vance, this does bring a light of joy and comfort deeply within me as I read it, because it is so lucidly clear that the poems stems from that very sanctuary in your own heart, so it resonates in the reader's inner sanctum too.
I love the tone and tenor of this, the voicing, imagery and long-flowing-lines. Love the theme and POV pus all the masterful phonetics woven with finesse.
A few comma suggestions:
My eyes reach out to seek a place where I might,(no ,) but a calm and soothing sonnet yield(,)
And yet the wafting steam of desire brings only fixed attention to this tangled mind(,) now sealed
Yet now it cleanses deep, my heart and eager mind(,) and shines, alas(,) my mission bright and clear
Reflect(,) with all the strength of will my heart and mind may generate, to offer what I believe is true
*optional hyphen:
And pray these lines of deeply(-)pondered thought may bring a light of joy and comfort deeply within you
The closing line is powerful and well voiced:
For Love exists in GRATITUDE and therein shall yield a bond with GOD that's so very sadly found by few
Fine alliteration of G and F and S etc.
Bravo
Blessings and Best Smiles,
rd
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you sincerely and deeply with all my heart, for this very thoughtful and wise review, as always, meant to be a gift of your heart and mind! Blessings and love always! Vance: ))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
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Aw, thanks for your graciousness, always, dear Vance. Love and blessings, rd
Comment from royowen
I really like the fact that your words are incomparingly encouraging and have taken an upward trajectory Vance. I love this post Vance, it's articulate, it's revelationery and an uplifting exhortation, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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I really like the fact that your words are incomparingly encouraging and have taken an upward trajectory Vance. I love this post Vance, it's articulate, it's revelationery and an uplifting exhortation, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much Roy, for your encouraging and uplifting review! your words are always precious to me! Vance
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My pleasure Vance
Comment from DonandVicki
I like the way that you developed this poem into prose. It is very convincing and passionate. The photograph complements the theme of your work about passion.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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I like the way that you developed this poem into prose. It is very convincing and passionate. The photograph complements the theme of your work about passion.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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How nice to hear from you DonandVicki! It's a pleasure to meet you and I hope to see you again soon. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from lyenochka
Great thoughts here in this poem, Vance! Great metaphors used here with the steaming rocks of passion (anger?) is cooled and cleansed by the rains of Gratitude. If only everyone could be blessed by the love, joy and comfort through gratitude to God. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Great thoughts here in this poem, Vance! Great metaphors used here with the steaming rocks of passion (anger?) is cooled and cleansed by the rains of Gratitude. If only everyone could be blessed by the love, joy and comfort through gratitude to God. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much lyenochka, for your generous and uplifting review. I've recently allowed myself to be 'captured' by anger and rage over the political insanity going on in AMERICA so I needed to remind myself of my passion for GRATITUDE and get back to work on my mission of sponsoring it to the goodwill of everyone who reads my works. Thanks so much an please forgive my recent rants! Blessings always. Vance
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Such descriptive wise words and I was hanging on every one of them throughout your lovely rhyming poem, great flow and atmospheric too, best regards, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Such descriptive wise words and I was hanging on every one of them throughout your lovely rhyming poem, great flow and atmospheric too, best regards, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Thank you sincerely Dolly, for your lovely and uplifting review and stars!! It is always a joy to hear from you in all you do! Blessings always! Vance
