Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

I was pleased to read this limerick, as it takes the serious life and death aspects of domestic abuse and pokes fun by the tongue and cheek use of frivolous reasons to extreme ends, the lighter side of husbands and wives battling for the upper hand. Sane rational people don't kill their spouses because of remote mishandlings. Thereby the amusement that two lives are over because of something so seemingly minor, yet recognizably a type of thing that drives loving spouses a little crazy.

And with the liberty of exaggeration, as husbands and wives go, the remote is an idiom of control, you don't touch a man's remote! that's a given. And if it's playoff season? March Madness? Football frenzy? Instant justifiable homicide. (not really, but there in lies the amusement via the absurdity)

A pleasing mix of absurdity and seriousness. As If I was going to over-examine the serious dynamics of husbands, wives, remotes as an aspect patriarchal control and justifiable homicide, women can easily find themselves on the short hand of the stick when attempting to take away an aspect of a man's control. I used to watch a lot of those forensic type shows... or what I tended to start calling it... the "how and why did the husband/boyfriend kill his wife/girlfriend" show

But back to the absurdity and the softer, more loving nature of husband and wife, the constant back and fourth tug of war for subtle dominance, all centered around controlling what's on the TV...

Wondered to myself... why down the sink instead of 'in' the sink? Probably wondered because drains typically aren't big enough to eat a remote.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

There you go, spoiling a perfectly good piece by introducing reality into the picture!

To be honest, if I was to "off" my partner, it would be more likely for using the last shred of toilet paper on the roll, and not getting a new one, or leaving "scraps" of wool, paper, or whatever in coffee cups that I have to collect and wash.

Thanks for a fun review :)

reply by --Turtle. on 29-Apr-2016

: D

That reminds me of a sing-song I've heard... somewhere:
-- When your going to the John and the toilet paper's gone... be a man, use a hand. ; )

Then find some rope as somebody's gonna get it.

My husband gets that killing rage in his eyes when I don't tighten lids proper and then stack them precariously in the fridge. He opens the door ... and oops.

Comment from Judvan2

Excellent

I'm at the number 3 spot in the contest so far. Thought mine was good. Then, I read yours out loud to my husband and he burst out laughing. Very good. Yours is funny... much funnier than mine...Good luck!

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Well, I just checked yours (I'll review it later, I just got up) - and I think it's funny. There's all different sorts of humour, and I don't think anyone can predict in these contests who'll get the nod. I think there's still a fair bit of voting time left, so who knows how it will end up. Good luck to you too, and thanks for the lovely comments :)

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Now that is really serious! I like the humor and subtle meaning here. You have rhymed this well and presented it in an appropriate way. Good job!

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thank you for the kind words :)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

The wife should know a man and his remote can not be separated. He will find another button to press with consequences. He will have to go to jail now.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Maybe they will have a remote there :)

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Poet...

I don't think you'll get off as justifiable homicide even for having perfect rhyme and meter in your limerick. Seek a good lawyer, I hear the judges are tough around here. Wait... was there a hockey game on? That might have been justifiable!

Good luck in the contest!

Kim

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Exactly - how can I watch the hockey without the remote? I rest my case. Thanks for the fun review and good wishes.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I guess that I am very lucky, my wife never goes near the kitchen, let alone the sink. A very satirical limerick and a statement that women should be more careful.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2016

Thanks for the review, much appreciated.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your poem is in good form. The picture is perfect.

Good job on the rhyme.

I know the contest rules say to make something serious viewed in a funny way.

But . . .I have to disagree although you met the criteria. It is not your fault at all. The prompt was bizarre.

[I hope you don't get mad. I am just sharing my opinion like you did with your poem].

Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

I'm not mad, I'm just not sure what you mean. Do you mean death/murder isn't serious, or the poem's not funny? Or both?

Thanks for the kind review :)

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

Good one and so very clever my friend. A great entry on the contest prompt tat put a huge smile on my face. Way to go and see you at voting.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks for the lovely review, see you there :)

Comment from bob cullen

Excellent

I don't think I've ever read a more worthy case for justifiable homicide.
Surely your lawyer argued it wasn't murder; you were just trying to assist her in her efforts to retrieve the remote as you pushed her headfirst after the remote.

A very nice, but tragic limerick. Tragic in the sense you lost the remote

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Losing the remote isn't the only tragedy here. I think it's also messed up the garbage disposal. Thanks for the fun review :)

Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

The nature of the limerick is humor and you have certainly struck a humorous ending. Exaggeration is a great tool of the comic and you have used it well in this poem.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks, Mary, for the lovely review.