Once Upon A Fairy Tale
Acrostic47 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
But I want a unicorn, Steve LOL
A delightful acrostic full of magical events and happenings and I was so damned enraptured and enchanted I forgot where I was and listened to exactly the tale you spun me.
I like the symmetry in this rhyming acrostic, so many don't bother to think up something with the right amount of lines to balance it out.
You crammed the whole shebang into this baby, from the gypsy man's tune, to Nimbus and Co. incorporated and the prized loot of rubies, emeralds, silver and all importantly gold, this bounced along beautifully.
No sixers left dammit. This would have been worth one.
Sorry I'm out
Really well penned as always, meter is faultless and you kept me fully engaged throughout, until you pulled the rug out and told me it was all in my little old imagination haha
Hugs P
reply by the author on 10-May-2016
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But I want a unicorn, Steve LOL
A delightful acrostic full of magical events and happenings and I was so damned enraptured and enchanted I forgot where I was and listened to exactly the tale you spun me.
I like the symmetry in this rhyming acrostic, so many don't bother to think up something with the right amount of lines to balance it out.
You crammed the whole shebang into this baby, from the gypsy man's tune, to Nimbus and Co. incorporated and the prized loot of rubies, emeralds, silver and all importantly gold, this bounced along beautifully.
No sixers left dammit. This would have been worth one.
Sorry I'm out
Really well penned as always, meter is faultless and you kept me fully engaged throughout, until you pulled the rug out and told me it was all in my little old imagination haha
Hugs P
Comment Written 10-May-2016
reply by the author on 10-May-2016
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Thanks, P
I was pretty happy with this, especially since my first attempt was as gloomy as Hell. Sorry no unicorns available - I ren out of letters and had ti finish the story off in a heartbeat.
Steve
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Well stuff you, over the unicorn!
I really wanted one.
Great tale though and I'm not really into the fantasy writes. Well, the fairytale ones haha
Super work, my friend and I'm glad you didn't take the depressing route. There is so much of that here...
Comment from MariMc
I'm impressed by everything in this delightful acrostic: the rhyme, rhythm, imagery, and especially the enchanting imaginary world it evokes. The artwork is a nice choice, too. The award for this is well-deserved.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I'm impressed by everything in this delightful acrostic: the rhyme, rhythm, imagery, and especially the enchanting imaginary world it evokes. The artwork is a nice choice, too. The award for this is well-deserved.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Thanks so much for the great review and the glittering stars!
Steve
Comment from Leineco
In MHO you were robbed! Of the top three winners
I'd vote for this one every time (more if I could!)
The word choices and flow went so well with the
concept of "telling a tale" and you painted exactly
what you wanted us to see. For me, these three
lines stood out as enchanting -
Early or earlier, never too soon
Nimbus awaits with his magical team
Light as a thistle-down's shimmering thread
-Sorry it's so late in the week :-(
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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In MHO you were robbed! Of the top three winners
I'd vote for this one every time (more if I could!)
The word choices and flow went so well with the
concept of "telling a tale" and you painted exactly
what you wanted us to see. For me, these three
lines stood out as enchanting -
Early or earlier, never too soon
Nimbus awaits with his magical team
Light as a thistle-down's shimmering thread
-Sorry it's so late in the week :-(
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Thank you.
Jyoti's winning piece was wonderful, and I don't mind losing to something of that quality. I am a little grumpy about being placed behind the other poem, though. I'm getting used to it. I haven't won a thing for months, and I've felt that I was in with a good shot in every site poetry contest.
That's enough sour grapes for now! I appreciate your kind words.
Steve
Comment from sage17611
Very good descriptive fairy tale, very well written using the acrostic writing style. I like the picture with the fairy tale carriage and horses flying through the air, very colorful and imaginative. You did a good with this poem, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Very good descriptive fairy tale, very well written using the acrostic writing style. I like the picture with the fairy tale carriage and horses flying through the air, very colorful and imaginative. You did a good with this poem, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is an excellent entry for the Acrostic contest, Steve! I absolutely loved the flow of it, and to me it had a quality to it much akin to 'The Night Before Christmas'. Fave line: "Earlier, or earlier, never to soon". (Good humour here) :) Great imagery created for your reader. I loved the humour in your closing line: "Enraptured, enchanted -- it's all in your head!".
Great job on this, Steve! Best wishes for the contest!
Connie
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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This is an excellent entry for the Acrostic contest, Steve! I absolutely loved the flow of it, and to me it had a quality to it much akin to 'The Night Before Christmas'. Fave line: "Earlier, or earlier, never to soon". (Good humour here) :) Great imagery created for your reader. I loved the humour in your closing line: "Enraptured, enchanted -- it's all in your head!".
Great job on this, Steve! Best wishes for the contest!
Connie
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Connie.
I ad actually started on a very depressing piece for this contest. I'm glad I switched to this which was much more fun to write!
Steve
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Hey ... I'm all for more humour ... wherever I can find it! :)
Comment from creativepenname
Wow! This has definitely become one of my favourite poems to have read on this site. I've never been good at writing acrostic poems so reading a good one makes me pretty jealous. Lovely job!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Wow! This has definitely become one of my favourite poems to have read on this site. I've never been good at writing acrostic poems so reading a good one makes me pretty jealous. Lovely job!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much for the kind words. I am glad you enjoyed my piece of fun.
Steve
Comment from Joan E.
I especially enjoyed your storytelling and the prancing "unicorns". Thank you for highlighting the initial letters of the lines so that I did not miss the acrostic form. Adding the pure rhymes is brilliant and your imagery, like the "thistle-down's shimmering thread" is quite effective. You selected a very reinforcing picture as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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I especially enjoyed your storytelling and the prancing "unicorns". Thank you for highlighting the initial letters of the lines so that I did not miss the acrostic form. Adding the pure rhymes is brilliant and your imagery, like the "thistle-down's shimmering thread" is quite effective. You selected a very reinforcing picture as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thanks, Joan, for the wonderful review and the six shiny stars. Let's hope the judges like unicorns!
Steve
Comment from Oatmeal
kiwisteveh,
Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive. Nicely effective and impressive. Very well reflected thoughts and expressions. Exceptional. Telling things very plainly and comprehensibly. Cute, cute- my favorite style.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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kiwisteveh,
Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive. Nicely effective and impressive. Very well reflected thoughts and expressions. Exceptional. Telling things very plainly and comprehensibly. Cute, cute- my favorite style.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Oatmeal. Haven't seen you around in a while...
Steve
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, this poem hits the mark in every way - it is exceptional and a classic representative of great fairy tales - children of all ages will love it, and parents will enjoy reading it to them time and again...
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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In my opinion, this poem hits the mark in every way - it is exceptional and a classic representative of great fairy tales - children of all ages will love it, and parents will enjoy reading it to them time and again...
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for the appreciative review and the six stars.
Steve
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You are most welcome...
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and good presentation of your poem.
-I like your topic choice, the imagery, meter, and rhyme, and alliteration:
* "Over the mountains so far, far away,
Nearby the woods where the fairy-folk play"
* "Rubies and emeralds, silver and gold"
* "Across Heaven's highway, they dazzle and dance"
-Very good last line that captures the spirit of the fairy tale:
"Enraptured, enchanted -- it's all in your head!"
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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-Very nice image and good presentation of your poem.
-I like your topic choice, the imagery, meter, and rhyme, and alliteration:
* "Over the mountains so far, far away,
Nearby the woods where the fairy-folk play"
* "Rubies and emeralds, silver and gold"
* "Across Heaven's highway, they dazzle and dance"
-Very good last line that captures the spirit of the fairy tale:
"Enraptured, enchanted -- it's all in your head!"
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you for the great review and the six star rating!
Steve
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You are very welcome. You have a very good poem.
