Musings Of My Muddled Mind
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Shush!"NaPoWriMo April 2016
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Comment from evilynne
Yep, interfering relatives can be a pain and bring you down. Your poem is well written and certainly makes its point well. I am enjoying following the book, although I am way behind in my reviewing chores. Evi
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Yep, interfering relatives can be a pain and bring you down. Your poem is well written and certainly makes its point well. I am enjoying following the book, although I am way behind in my reviewing chores. Evi
Comment Written 19-Apr-2016
Comment from krys123
Hello Debra;
-I guess is telling her just how you feel about her interfering.
- the patriot very appropriate and relative to the concept and theme of your writing and a great choice for this poem.
- your rhyming words were contingent and supported to the meaning and concept of each of your lines none of your rhyming words were forced or labored which was helpful in the rhythmic flow of your writing.
-the made meter is mixed and variable however the cadence, timing and tempo well boy making the reading clear, though it is very easy.
-thank you for sharing and posting and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
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Hello Debra;
-I guess is telling her just how you feel about her interfering.
- the patriot very appropriate and relative to the concept and theme of your writing and a great choice for this poem.
- your rhyming words were contingent and supported to the meaning and concept of each of your lines none of your rhyming words were forced or labored which was helpful in the rhythmic flow of your writing.
-the made meter is mixed and variable however the cadence, timing and tempo well boy making the reading clear, though it is very easy.
-thank you for sharing and posting and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from frogbook
And sometimes that is a beauty of writing. Your frustrations are well expressed in this well written, nicely rhymed poem. The picture goes very well with the theme.
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And sometimes that is a beauty of writing. Your frustrations are well expressed in this well written, nicely rhymed poem. The picture goes very well with the theme.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from MelB
Did you write this about my in-laws? LOL The picture goes well with this. Very nice poem with good abab rhyme. It made me laugh!
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Did you write this about my in-laws? LOL The picture goes well with this. Very nice poem with good abab rhyme. It made me laugh!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from Domino 2
This has the flavour of a loving but interfering grandma/mother-in-law, Debs. ;-) They usually mean well but can be very annoying at times, and can even undermine rules we set down for our kids, and you infer that in last stanza very well.
Not your usual smooth meter throughout, but still very enjoyable and true to life.
Cheers, Ray xx
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This has the flavour of a loving but interfering grandma/mother-in-law, Debs. ;-) They usually mean well but can be very annoying at times, and can even undermine rules we set down for our kids, and you infer that in last stanza very well.
Not your usual smooth meter throughout, but still very enjoyable and true to life.
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Debra!
You should read Janny's selection, "Poets and Volcanos" from her NaPoWriMo post today. Your poem illustrates hers perfectly :) I'm glad you were able to 'blow off some steam' through your poem. We all need to do that from time to time!
Have a great day!
Kim
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Hi Debra!
You should read Janny's selection, "Poets and Volcanos" from her NaPoWriMo post today. Your poem illustrates hers perfectly :) I'm glad you were able to 'blow off some steam' through your poem. We all need to do that from time to time!
Have a great day!
Kim
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from Word Junkie
Hi Debra,
Great poem, and I'm sure you do feel better, LOL. This is short poem says it all when it comes to interferring inlaws.
Shouldn't "fed up of" be 'fed up with?'
Excellent word choice throughout. Thanks for sharing!
Lana
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Hi Debra,
Great poem, and I'm sure you do feel better, LOL. This is short poem says it all when it comes to interferring inlaws.
Shouldn't "fed up of" be 'fed up with?'
Excellent word choice throughout. Thanks for sharing!
Lana
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Perhaps you should leave this poem on the coffee table next time that particular relative comes. I had one of those, and I used to get so angry, but didn't have the courage to say anything. I would now, though! Too late, my kids have grown up to be wonderful men and fathers. I wonder how I managed that??? LOL. Excellent poem my friend. You are not alone. xsx Sandra
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Perhaps you should leave this poem on the coffee table next time that particular relative comes. I had one of those, and I used to get so angry, but didn't have the courage to say anything. I would now, though! Too late, my kids have grown up to be wonderful men and fathers. I wonder how I managed that??? LOL. Excellent poem my friend. You are not alone. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from LIJ Red
You shouldn't talk to your mother in law like that. Oh. I see. Best not let one of your kids go to school with a bruise, then. Everybody has a license to meddle. Well said, well written.
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You shouldn't talk to your mother in law like that. Oh. I see. Best not let one of your kids go to school with a bruise, then. Everybody has a license to meddle. Well said, well written.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2016
Comment from judiverse
I'm sure this reflects the feelings of parents who feel that relatives (usually grandparents) interfere too much. The parents are, after all, the ones who have the responsibility. Excellent rhyme and flow in this. There are probably many parents who feel that way. Grandparents shouldn't interfere. (Given that their children know what they're doing. Excellent treatment of the subject. judi
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I'm sure this reflects the feelings of parents who feel that relatives (usually grandparents) interfere too much. The parents are, after all, the ones who have the responsibility. Excellent rhyme and flow in this. There are probably many parents who feel that way. Grandparents shouldn't interfere. (Given that their children know what they're doing. Excellent treatment of the subject. judi
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
