My Ten Minute Marriage
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Comment from Dustybones
Marriage isn't for everyone. I wonder if youever got hooked up? LOL. I don't know why you're so defensive about ten months. It's better sooner than later. IMHO.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Marriage isn't for everyone. I wonder if youever got hooked up? LOL. I don't know why you're so defensive about ten months. It's better sooner than later. IMHO.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hi Boyd,
Thanks for your review. No more hookups, I'm an independent gal! lol
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Hi, I am writing this to support you in your true story. I had a two month marriage. What you say is correct, those who love us understand and the rest of the people -- it really doesn't matter what they think.
I like the way you wrote you story, so up close and personal.
Good for you. Well done, Coach.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Hi, I am writing this to support you in your true story. I had a two month marriage. What you say is correct, those who love us understand and the rest of the people -- it really doesn't matter what they think.
I like the way you wrote you story, so up close and personal.
Good for you. Well done, Coach.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much, Nancy, for this high rating and encouraging review! :-)
Comment from I am Cat
Karen,
What an awesome moment of triumph! Sometimes we go roaring into a 'place' in our lives where we just don't belong... and having the sense to back out slowly... or turn around and bolt, is the best thing we can do for ourselves, and the people around us. Well done, I truly enjoyed this peek into Karen, KK, Boxergirl! Thank you for sharing and congrats on your third place win in the contest! Well done! A lovely tale of triumph and new beginnings!
I feel honored to have read this!
Cat
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Karen,
What an awesome moment of triumph! Sometimes we go roaring into a 'place' in our lives where we just don't belong... and having the sense to back out slowly... or turn around and bolt, is the best thing we can do for ourselves, and the people around us. Well done, I truly enjoyed this peek into Karen, KK, Boxergirl! Thank you for sharing and congrats on your third place win in the contest! Well done! A lovely tale of triumph and new beginnings!
I feel honored to have read this!
Cat
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much for your kind and encouraging review, my friend. I let go of it a long time ago but hadn't put a pen to it. My muse or my alter ego, Karina (you haven't met her yet), said it was time to share and I don't argue with either one of them! lol
Hugs always 8-)
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Well, she was obviously right! Go with what she says unless she picks up an uzi, then we may need to have someone talk to her. ;) Hugs
Comment from Emily George
Well written and a good read.
Brave and Befitting, Boxer girl. Love that cake, says it all, really!
Emily George, I have been a way far to long. Hi !
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Well written and a good read.
Brave and Befitting, Boxer girl. Love that cake, says it all, really!
Emily George, I have been a way far to long. Hi !
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Thanks so much, Emily. I appreciate your high review and kind comments. Glad you are back!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is such a well written and engaging piece of writing. It is so easy to get caught up in everything and then having to deal with the aftermath is difficult. Good advice given here to.
Good technically too.
All the best and good luck in the competition.
GMG
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Hi there,
This is such a well written and engaging piece of writing. It is so easy to get caught up in everything and then having to deal with the aftermath is difficult. Good advice given here to.
Good technically too.
All the best and good luck in the competition.
GMG
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and kind comments. They mean a lot!
Karen 8-)
Comment from rama devi
Second review
thanks for letting me know you made edits, dear.
First review (FOUR Stars)
Glad you escaped a loveless marriage! I'm an independent type too. Never been defined by a relationship. In fact, in my alternative lifestyle here in India, I'm a nun...so not a 'spinster'. LOL
This is told with conversational, authentic voicing and fine pacing. Draws the reader in. Quite a few spag nits (noted below) and so I give four stars, as it needs tweaking and fine tuning, especially relating to commas. Happy to upgrade if spag is fixed. Some optional suggestions are noted below as well.
NOTES
* and(,) honestly, I had always enjoyed my "me" time.
* maybe I should say every hour of it because(,) if you know anything about coaching, you know that it's not a nine to five job.
* But I learned to ignore all the voices or(,) at least(,) that's what I thought.
*After all, I was content with my life(,) and life was good.
*Heck, I was even proud that I wasn't like some of my single girlfriends(,) who whined constantly
Well put, LOL:
Before I could blink twice, a decade had passed.
* I actually became somewhat enamored, maybe even a little envious, with their family life.
Spaggy. Suggets:
I actually became somewhat enamored with, maybe even a little envious of, their family life.
* Meanwhile, I started dating Don, a new guy that(WHOM) I had met at church.
*One Saturday(,) he stopped by for lunch;(.) w(W)hen we finished eating our sandwiches,
*"Why don't you just wear it for awhile and think about it.(?)"
* Their enthusiatic reaction
enthusiastic (check spelling)
* But(,) in my defense, who could deny the fun parties and the awesome gifts?
* and(,) if pictures don't lie,
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cheer chants like(,) I'll be fine. I can do this!
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After our PG13 honeymoon, it didn't take long for me to realize,(no ,) I couldn't do it.
*The fun part was over(,) and reality checked in.
* And(,) in reality, he didn't Iove (love) me either.
*So(,) night after night, I
*optional suggestion for dramatic pause effect:
After the divorce, I was so ashamed to go anywhere,(--) especially back to work.
Thanks for sharing your story-!
Love and smiles!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Second review
thanks for letting me know you made edits, dear.
First review (FOUR Stars)
Glad you escaped a loveless marriage! I'm an independent type too. Never been defined by a relationship. In fact, in my alternative lifestyle here in India, I'm a nun...so not a 'spinster'. LOL
This is told with conversational, authentic voicing and fine pacing. Draws the reader in. Quite a few spag nits (noted below) and so I give four stars, as it needs tweaking and fine tuning, especially relating to commas. Happy to upgrade if spag is fixed. Some optional suggestions are noted below as well.
NOTES
* and(,) honestly, I had always enjoyed my "me" time.
* maybe I should say every hour of it because(,) if you know anything about coaching, you know that it's not a nine to five job.
* But I learned to ignore all the voices or(,) at least(,) that's what I thought.
*After all, I was content with my life(,) and life was good.
*Heck, I was even proud that I wasn't like some of my single girlfriends(,) who whined constantly
Well put, LOL:
Before I could blink twice, a decade had passed.
* I actually became somewhat enamored, maybe even a little envious, with their family life.
Spaggy. Suggets:
I actually became somewhat enamored with, maybe even a little envious of, their family life.
* Meanwhile, I started dating Don, a new guy that(WHOM) I had met at church.
*One Saturday(,) he stopped by for lunch;(.) w(W)hen we finished eating our sandwiches,
*"Why don't you just wear it for awhile and think about it.(?)"
* Their enthusiatic reaction
enthusiastic (check spelling)
* But(,) in my defense, who could deny the fun parties and the awesome gifts?
* and(,) if pictures don't lie,
*
cheer chants like(,) I'll be fine. I can do this!
*
After our PG13 honeymoon, it didn't take long for me to realize,(no ,) I couldn't do it.
*The fun part was over(,) and reality checked in.
* And(,) in reality, he didn't Iove (love) me either.
*So(,) night after night, I
*optional suggestion for dramatic pause effect:
After the divorce, I was so ashamed to go anywhere,(--) especially back to work.
Thanks for sharing your story-!
Love and smiles!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Hi there, my friend,
Thanks so much for your review and kind comments. I'm never worried about a four when they are accompanied by all the great spag catches that you took time to so graciously correct. It looks a lot better now.
Blessings,
Karen 8-)
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Thanks, dear Karen...Glad to hear you found it helpful and edited...and now I can upgrade. Yay! Blessings, rd
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Thanks, dear Karen...Glad to hear you found it helpful and edited...and now I can upgrade. Yay! Blessings, rd
Comment from Annette Gulliver
I love this story. You fitted the mold of so many girls way back then, as in, keeping up appearances, and trying to do what they thought society expected of them. It's hard, but sometimes we just have to stop, take a breath, listen to the niggling doubts that float in and out of our minds, and to follow our gut feelings. With age comes wisdom. So glad you came out of it okay.
Good luck in the contest,
Annette
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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I love this story. You fitted the mold of so many girls way back then, as in, keeping up appearances, and trying to do what they thought society expected of them. It's hard, but sometimes we just have to stop, take a breath, listen to the niggling doubts that float in and out of our minds, and to follow our gut feelings. With age comes wisdom. So glad you came out of it okay.
Good luck in the contest,
Annette
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thanks so much, Annette. I appreciate your review and kind comments. They mean a lot!
Blessings,
Karen 8-)
Comment from Kareau
This is a great story, I like your unique voice. I hope you don't mind me comparing myself to you but this is the way I write and have been told I write, like I'm actually speaking to someone. You have a lot of great sentences such as:
...please do me a favor and read the rest of my story.
...always wear the "old maid" albatross around their neck.
...chewing on these thoughts like a cow's cud
I have been married (second marriage) for 19 years, no children, at least not the two legged kind but I need my "me time" too. Congratulations on your poetry book, I'll check it out on Amazon.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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This is a great story, I like your unique voice. I hope you don't mind me comparing myself to you but this is the way I write and have been told I write, like I'm actually speaking to someone. You have a lot of great sentences such as:
...please do me a favor and read the rest of my story.
...always wear the "old maid" albatross around their neck.
...chewing on these thoughts like a cow's cud
I have been married (second marriage) for 19 years, no children, at least not the two legged kind but I need my "me time" too. Congratulations on your poetry book, I'll check it out on Amazon.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thanks so much, Kareau. I appreciate your review and kind comments. They mean a lot!
Blessings,
Karen 8-)
Comment from RKS2015
Excellent writing! Some biographical stories become tedious but you've kept this alive & moved it forward at a fast pace. Your writing comes from a place of truth & honesty. I appreciate that & relate to your experience having had one of my own earlier in my life. Kudos for your note "...those of you who love me, still will and those of you who don't, don't matter."
Congrats on the release of your first poetry book. I hope it's doing well.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2016
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Excellent writing! Some biographical stories become tedious but you've kept this alive & moved it forward at a fast pace. Your writing comes from a place of truth & honesty. I appreciate that & relate to your experience having had one of my own earlier in my life. Kudos for your note "...those of you who love me, still will and those of you who don't, don't matter."
Congrats on the release of your first poetry book. I hope it's doing well.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2016
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Thanks so much, RKS.
I appreciate your review and kind comments. We are not alone in our experiences. Many have responded with the same message.
Blessings,
Karen :-)
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You're welcome, Karen.
Comment from chasennov
a big mess. My Ten Minute Marriage.' Well, now that I've read the whole story in a nutshell I must say that I enjoyed it. I thought it had good structure and the formulation was also solid enough. Very well done.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2016
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a big mess. My Ten Minute Marriage.' Well, now that I've read the whole story in a nutshell I must say that I enjoyed it. I thought it had good structure and the formulation was also solid enough. Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Chasen. I appreciate your review and encouraging comments. :-)
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You are most welcome.
