The spider and Miss Wigglebottom
Older woman gets fed up with younger one32 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
lol This is an excellent story. I enjoyed reading it. Your entire presentation is good. You use descriptive words that draw in a reader. Your dialogue is authentic and creative. Funny ending. Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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lol This is an excellent story. I enjoyed reading it. Your entire presentation is good. You use descriptive words that draw in a reader. Your dialogue is authentic and creative. Funny ending. Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thanks fir this. This was fun to write. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
Cute story. It is's too bad it was a repost. It would have been a good one for the contest about the last words before someone dies. I think Miss Wigglebottoom wan't be leaving any time soon.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Cute story. It is's too bad it was a repost. It would have been a good one for the contest about the last words before someone dies. I think Miss Wigglebottoom wan't be leaving any time soon.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Lol. It was a fun piece to read. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Lol, that was funny, but I'll never go into any room that has got one spider in it!! I can't stand them. This was cleverly done, Gretchen, and the girl now gets a rise and possible a rich husband!! Loved it, my friend. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Lol, that was funny, but I'll never go into any room that has got one spider in it!! I can't stand them. This was cleverly done, Gretchen, and the girl now gets a rise and possible a rich husband!! Loved it, my friend. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Caroline really wasn't as dumb as Edna thought. Lol. I'm glad you could enjoy this. Gretchen
Comment from w.j.debi
Now, that was an unexpected ending. I realize this is an older post. Too bad as it would have been perfect for that 'last words' contest. It would have had my vote. I'm still laughing. I say give Caroline the raise.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Now, that was an unexpected ending. I realize this is an older post. Too bad as it would have been perfect for that 'last words' contest. It would have had my vote. I'm still laughing. I say give Caroline the raise.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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I'm betting Caroline gets a hefty raise. Lol. Thanks for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's great to wake up to humor and start my day off with a good hearty laugh. I might even start carrying spikers around in my pockets for whenever I might need one. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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It's great to wake up to humor and start my day off with a good hearty laugh. I might even start carrying spikers around in my pockets for whenever I might need one. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Could be a new business venture for you. Lol. Glad you enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
Hilarious. Worthy of six stars but, well you know, it's the end of the week. Great characters, lovely dialogue and beautifully structured, leading the reader to your excellent ending. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Hilarious. Worthy of six stars but, well you know, it's the end of the week. Great characters, lovely dialogue and beautifully structured, leading the reader to your excellent ending. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Glad you got a kick out of it. Thank you for this . Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
If you didn't get a bunch of sixes on this the first time, you should have. Really good story with an O. Henry ending. Have you ever gone to Ralan.com? He has lots of markets at his site that might be of interest to you. He was there around Christmas, but he has had some health problems over the years.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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If you didn't get a bunch of sixes on this the first time, you should have. Really good story with an O. Henry ending. Have you ever gone to Ralan.com? He has lots of markets at his site that might be of interest to you. He was there around Christmas, but he has had some health problems over the years.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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I'm not familiar with hissing. I will check it out. Thanks for this. Gretchen
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I don't know what you are referencing when you say hissing.
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Type error. His site. I'm not familiar with his site. Lol.
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It is interesting to look at markets.
Comment from Wendy G
A fun story although I wasn't expecting the ending with the demise of the wife! So a good twist at the end. Wendy
Typos: Paragraph 1
Bona fidewaste (need to add a space)
Wore clothes that we entirely inappropriate (were)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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A fun story although I wasn't expecting the ending with the demise of the wife! So a good twist at the end. Wendy
Typos: Paragraph 1
Bona fidewaste (need to add a space)
Wore clothes that we entirely inappropriate (were)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I wrote this silliness in 2016. I hadn't quite figured out proof reading, apparently. Lol. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from jmdg1954
This is a humorous repost. I was not on FanStory at that time so I'm glad yo have read it the second time around.
Nicely done , Gretchen,
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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This is a humorous repost. I was not on FanStory at that time so I'm glad yo have read it the second time around.
Nicely done , Gretchen,
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love this flash fiction Gretchen, wish I have a six for you, justice prevails here as the old woman was jealous of Caroline and her ample bosom. That spider was a bit scary though, a fun post and it should have been in a contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I love this flash fiction Gretchen, wish I have a six for you, justice prevails here as the old woman was jealous of Caroline and her ample bosom. That spider was a bit scary though, a fun post and it should have been in a contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Lol. I think poor Edna underestimated Caroline. Thanks for the virtual six. Gretchen
