Of Sea Shells and Shanty Tales
Short Story21 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
The sea can affect the mind and the body
Salt is a great preserver
but not a life preserver
You may need gills
on your mermaid rendezvous
Or sea sickness pills
seems to me there was a fair amount of grog
consumed in those la, la, la's
which explains a great about living in shells
and being washed out to sea
or the open air, sputtering for breath
Or perhaps it's just the ticking of the clock
and those mysterious chimes
that one never hears
Or maybe it's just the hopes of a dreamer
who has earned better dreams
than reality supplies
Well done, very well done
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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The sea can affect the mind and the body
Salt is a great preserver
but not a life preserver
You may need gills
on your mermaid rendezvous
Or sea sickness pills
seems to me there was a fair amount of grog
consumed in those la, la, la's
which explains a great about living in shells
and being washed out to sea
or the open air, sputtering for breath
Or perhaps it's just the ticking of the clock
and those mysterious chimes
that one never hears
Or maybe it's just the hopes of a dreamer
who has earned better dreams
than reality supplies
Well done, very well done
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Hahaha! I LOVE your comments. I'm afraid to tell you that there wasn't an ounce of grog involved. Yep, this is my sober mind. Well, I'm thrilled you enjoyed this. It's very me and I loved writing it. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation.
-A very interesting tale.
-Good introduction, as you long for adventure out to sea.
-I like this line very much: "Such is hope for the dreamer when reality just won't do."
-The paragraph of the mermaid responding like your third grade teacher is very good. The reader can even hear the teacher voice come through.
-Very good last line.
-I enjoyed the story; thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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-Good artwork and presentation.
-A very interesting tale.
-Good introduction, as you long for adventure out to sea.
-I like this line very much: "Such is hope for the dreamer when reality just won't do."
-The paragraph of the mermaid responding like your third grade teacher is very good. The reader can even hear the teacher voice come through.
-Very good last line.
-I enjoyed the story; thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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So cool. I'm delighted with what you highlighted. Something different. I'm pleased you enjoyed. Thanks so much, mike
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You are very welcome. Glad you liked the highlighted line; I like to do that to show appreciation of what I think is good, creative, etc. Thank you for your comments, as well. I enjoyed this story.
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Mikey
What a great story written with wit and playful humour. I burst out laughing at the ending of your story. I don't think I'll ever hear that song the same way again. LOL Great tale. All ends well with a happy pirate setting out for a continued adventure. LOL
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Hi, Mikey
What a great story written with wit and playful humour. I burst out laughing at the ending of your story. I don't think I'll ever hear that song the same way again. LOL Great tale. All ends well with a happy pirate setting out for a continued adventure. LOL
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Hi, Rosalyne
Wow, that's just the reaction I was hoping for. I'm so pleased. Thanks a million. mike :)))
Comment from Gloria ....
OMG, don't tell me! You are Jack Sparrow?! I knew it and there you are brandishing your long sword on the beach.
Yes indeed fathers can be capable of amazing miracles such as building snowmen in the sun, if they but live only within our imaginations.
And there you are responding to the beautiful mermaid. She must be delighted as evidence by her high-pitched ? squeal. LOL. That's fun.
Haaaaaaa very funny ending. Blow the man down!! For sure.
Wonderfully witty and entertaining tale, Mikey. You write em up real good. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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OMG, don't tell me! You are Jack Sparrow?! I knew it and there you are brandishing your long sword on the beach.
Yes indeed fathers can be capable of amazing miracles such as building snowmen in the sun, if they but live only within our imaginations.
And there you are responding to the beautiful mermaid. She must be delighted as evidence by her high-pitched ? squeal. LOL. That's fun.
Haaaaaaa very funny ending. Blow the man down!! For sure.
Wonderfully witty and entertaining tale, Mikey. You write em up real good. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Nooo, It is Mr. Sparrow who dreams of being me, when he isn't dreaming of being Keith Richards. It's complicated. A swashbuckling thing. I think it may have been the search for non-existent anatomy that may have set her off. Yes, fun for me though.
I'm glad you liked this. This is actually how I write if I'm left to my own devices. :))
You are too kind. You do realize this encourages me, right?
mikey
Comment from robyn corum
Mikey, Mikey, Mikey...
You can take the child out of the sandbox, but... tsk, tsk, tsk!
But, okay, okay! Yes, you did get me to smirk (merely smirk!) a couple of times. And I suppose I might have sniggered once. But ONLY once, and entirely by accident. It won't happen again.
ahem...
gotta go.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Mikey, Mikey, Mikey...
You can take the child out of the sandbox, but... tsk, tsk, tsk!
But, okay, okay! Yes, you did get me to smirk (merely smirk!) a couple of times. And I suppose I might have sniggered once. But ONLY once, and entirely by accident. It won't happen again.
ahem...
gotta go.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Oh, time for one more reply. Must rest up for the doctor tomorrow. Seems I have a sandbox inside of me.
This was my best attempt to elicit the rare trifecta, a smirk, snigger and sandbox reference.
You have made my night a success!
Accidents do happen, or so the midwife told my mother on the back of the bandwagon as all jumped on. mikey
Comment from busses
You are my Hero! I enjoyed this! The pulling and pushing of the sea. The notion of living within the shells, a moving sprit of sorts, then being washed to sea on adventures unknown. The interpretative visuals here are numerous, and the beauty of this piece is not one person will read it the same. You are a talent sir Mike! TY for the read
John
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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You are my Hero! I enjoyed this! The pulling and pushing of the sea. The notion of living within the shells, a moving sprit of sorts, then being washed to sea on adventures unknown. The interpretative visuals here are numerous, and the beauty of this piece is not one person will read it the same. You are a talent sir Mike! TY for the read
John
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Wow, John, This makes my day. I believe every word of it too. Hahaha! Cool, it is meant to let the reader come up with their own explanation. I'm not even set on one myself. So pleased you liked this. It was fun to write actually. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from Rubylou
this is a nice mix of fantasy and adventure. I think the best way I can describe how I feel is anticipation. I kept wondering what was going to happen in the next paragraph.
The second paragraph was a little more sobering but still left me wondering as did the ending as you head out to sea for adventure.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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this is a nice mix of fantasy and adventure. I think the best way I can describe how I feel is anticipation. I kept wondering what was going to happen in the next paragraph.
The second paragraph was a little more sobering but still left me wondering as did the ending as you head out to sea for adventure.
Rubylou
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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That's so great to hear that you were engaged and looking forward to the next part. I couldn't ask for more. Big smiles. Thanks a million. mike
Comment from doggymad
What delicious mix of fantasy and reality. I can picture a child dreaming about the pirate tale he just read, while his teacher struggles to gain his attention
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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What delicious mix of fantasy and reality. I can picture a child dreaming about the pirate tale he just read, while his teacher struggles to gain his attention
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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I love that image! Yeah, most cool to look at it that way.
Thanks a million,, mike
Comment from Ric Myworld
Oh, yes, lather up those scales with an extra squeal or three, then blow the man down, sweat fishy babe who is the love of me. Now this fine piece of yours should be fun for everyone. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Oh, yes, lather up those scales with an extra squeal or three, then blow the man down, sweat fishy babe who is the love of me. Now this fine piece of yours should be fun for everyone. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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I can see I'm definitely going to have to take you with me on whatever excursions occur to me. Yep, the sea is mysterious and can get fun. Just watch out for jellyfish. mike
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I've had two bouts with jelly fish. I didn't win either. And no, piss didn't stop them from burning either. :-)
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mikey,
I cannot pretend that I know what it is your talking about but I was captivated by the flow of your writing.
Brenda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi Mikey,
I cannot pretend that I know what it is your talking about but I was captivated by the flow of your writing.
Brenda
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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That works out well for us, Breanda. I can't pretend I know what I'm talking about either!!
I'm pleased you enjoyed this. A kind of thoughts flowing out of my head thing. Hopefully it stimulates the same. mike
