Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Well done. Congrats of placing in the contest.

Yes, we do have to be careful to whom we choose to listen or things can go very wrong. Politicians and preachers especially.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016

Thank you so much for the congrats and for taking the time to review.

reply by dragonpoet on 07-Mar-2016

Any time.

dragonpoet

Comment from Judvan2

Excellent

Very good, I like the hidden meaning in it. I love poetry that has that flavor to it. Not so obvious. Good luck in the contest. I'll check it out.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016

Thank you so much for the great review.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired the lesson in your Rispetto and your good use of rhymes and meter. You also added the perfect artwork. Cheers and best wishes in the contest. -Joan

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Wonderful poetry, Dawn and I have no doubt you will be in the winner's circle with this fine rispetto.

"Be cautious with your worldly view;
don't let the fiery one break through
defenses that disintegrate
when tales are spun to captivate."

Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016

Don't know about the winner's circle but I was proud of that one, thanks so much for the grand review.

Comment from fimarie78

Excellent

You followed the rispetto form well. This would sit nicely in a poetry anthology. I think the word o'er adds character to your poem. I wondered if the second stanza referred to the Devil as the 'fiery one'. Nice alliteration in defences that disintegrate.

Good luck in the contest
Fiona

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016

Yep it does, you understood that well. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Really well written with a dark warning that sent a powerful message. The art went really well with the poem. Great read.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016

Thanks so much, I really appreciate the review.

Comment from MacMhuirich

Excellent

I love dragon tales. This is a poem with good rhyme and form and very enjoyable to read. Your wording is clever, the poem can be read different ways, indeed dragons may not only be beasts of myth. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016

Indeed they might not. Great review. thanks.

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I love the dragon in the picture and the words fit well with his image. Just one thing, the poem's background and writing are both dark making it hard to read. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016

I will look into that thanks for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

I can't comment on its rispetto credentials, as I'm not sure of the rules, Dawn. Maybe add an explanatory 'author note'?

Indeed - beware of the silver-tongued con-man, OR woman. ;-)

Hey, Dawn, you special, irresistible, beautiful, talented, intelligent, sophisticated angelic lady...any chance of a loan til I get back on my feet? Hahaha.

Best wishes, Ray xx

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016

hahaha, hey I thought I put those rules in the Author's note. I love this review. Thanks so much darlin

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Outstanding, dear. Striking imagery and intensity in tone (and fine presentation to match the tenor of your theme). Superb rhyming (especially last two) and flawless flow. The fluidity in phrasing and fine phonetics are outstanding. Reading this aloud is like tongue candy!

The consonance of L and S in first stanza and the alliteration of D and C in the second as well as consonance of T are subtly superb.
I especially like the last three lines.

Just one suggestion:

Be cautious with your worldly view, (; or --)
don't let the fiery one break through

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016

Hello sweet friend. I will change that, grammar has never been my strong point. So good to hear from you.

reply by rama devi on 21-Jan-2016

:-)))