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The Rape of Sandy's Lock

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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello :)

A very interesting interpretation of Pope's poem in the form of a 70s movie called Grease and the characters in that movie-Danny and Sandy. Solid iambic pentameter and features rhyming couplets. Good job!
Gypsy

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
    Many thanks, Gypsy. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Annette Gulliver
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Hi Mark - clever you ... associating Pope's mega long 794 line poem with one of my favourite movies "Grease". Loved Danny and Sandy, but alas the rape of Sandy's locks was a shock. Poor Sandy, and Danny misses out on getting the girl. ha ha -
Annette

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
    I seemed to have accidentally linked two classics that people know. I thought many would be lost but people like you have given me lots to smile about with this piece. Thank you so much for your lovely feedback.
reply by Annette Gulliver on 03-Nov-2015
    You never cease to surprise me with your unusual themes, Mark.
Comment from ciliverde
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I have to confess, while I enjoyed this poem for it's humorous content, I'm glad it's not 794 lines long! Did you read the whole of Pope's poem?
It's an enjoyable "modern" version of Pope's story (as you describe, because I don't know it). It is interesting to contemplate the "virgin's dross" - may I ask what you mean by that exactly?
There are some great lines here, such as the bit about Danny's hair and "only ducktails ever offer peace". Oh for those simple days!
"The sylphs are warning ruin best they can" - nice. Fortunately for Sandy (or for her virginity, as the case may be) he decides she's being cold and goes for the snip!
I wonder how much he took off? Hopefully just a few strands :)
Carol

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
    Dross is a rarely word used word. It comes from the mining industry and refers to the left over slag and waste after processing minerals. It's gone on to mean the things of life that weigh you down, that represent the heavy load of life. I read a large part of it; studied it recently, but the poem bored me in its length and pomposity. Pope wrote a shorter version in 1712 and then added many more stanzas in 1714 because he thought he needed to explain himself more. I doubt anyone on FS has the stomach for more than I actually wrote. Glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate the detail and interest you include in this great review.
reply by ciliverde on 03-Nov-2015
    Ah, okay, now that you explain the newer meaning it makes perfect sense. It's an interesting take on the idea of virginity :)
    Good job for making it through MOST of Pope's long, pompous poem.
    I have the stomach for pretty long, laborious works, but I agree that most people may not. You have to be willing to jump in for the long haul. Melville's Mardi is a perfect example.
    Can I pester you to take a quick look at my pantoum, The Specter? I'd love to get your review.
Comment from padumachitta
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Hey...fun, fun, fun,...the movie, thanks eh, now I have an ear worm of songs in my head:-)
Well done...a great poetry parady...and the dang pentameter...how do you do that and still get a peom that reads so smooth and not forced...?
padumachitta

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2015
    I get that pentameter by tearing my hair out and repairing it till it sounds right. No easy solution. There's probably errors in there too. Glad you like my parody. It was fun to do. Thanks for the great review, p.
reply by padumachitta on 02-Nov-2015
    ...my hair is too short:-) I can do lymerics...hey ho...me, i got me losts o class...it is just all stearage:-)
    padumachitta
Comment from LIJ Red
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I never read Pope's 794 lines, and assumed from indices that the lock had a key and went clink. Neither did I ever watch Grease, and thought Travolta's best effort was The General's Daughter. I don't know if that is good or bad, since I judge the poem by style, meter, rhymes and a story new to me, and think it is excellent.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
    The lock in both Pope's and this refer to the lock of hair. In the original, the guy stole a lock just as Danny does here. Thank you very much for this very kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
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Mark, your creative courage always astounds me. If Pope rolled over in his grave it was to get into a position to pop up and guffaw at your marvelous, unpompous contribution to his legacy. You've outdone yourself here. You've taken a contemporary pop musical, turned the characters upside down and made this a farcical moral victory. Thank you for posting this, Mark. You've made a lovely warm Sunday, even warmer and lovelier.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
    When I embarked on this I was very keen and lost my way half way through the third stanza. Then the old 'I'm not worthy' line got stuck in my head for awhile, so I stepped back. On resumption the final half proved quite easy and I was happy to post it. I'm very taken by how people have reacted, and very surprised. Your sixer and most encouraging comments give me great confidence. Many thanks for this wonderful affirmation.
Comment from S. Pumpkin
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I loved the movie Grease and this poem is a clever, unique and engaging spin. Marvelous work with this and awesomely creative too. I enjoyed this very much and thank you so much for sharing it with us.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
    I'm pleased you stuck with it. It's a long one. Your response is very encouraging and I thank you sincerely for the excellent feedback.
Comment from misscookie
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Due to my stroke I don't remember the movies or the play Grease.
Just reading your poem it must have been a very exciting full of fun, loving show.
Thank you for giving me peek into yesterday.
Cookie

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
    The original poem was long and pompous. The film was fresh and original. Glad you took something positive from reading my strange marriage of poem and movie. Thanks for the appreciative review.
reply by misscookie on 03-Nov-2015
    Until next time, have a blessed day.
    Cookie
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
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Well I wasn't bored or annoyed at all. I found this piece to be very engaging. You have put a lot of work into this and I enjoyed it so much. What a creative approach! I have watched Grease more times than I can count, so I know these characters, but the spin you put on it is great. Thank you for sharing. Thank you for the author notes as well. Good luck and happy writing!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
    It isn't exactly to script but it was fun giving the characters a different spin. Many thanks for this detailed and positive response to the poem.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
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Thank goodness I have a pocketful of fresh sixers, Mark. I read your author's notes first. Appreciate the helpful background information.

I totally enjoyed this hilarious poem. Your blend of humor and sarcasm is perfect.
I remember being obsessed about my hair in high school, so this really resonated with me. Alas, I didn't have a swinging pony tail, but I really wanted one!

My favorite parts:
Say, 'Look at me, my pony tail has bounce.' (I'm so jealous!)

Preferably, he'd like them as a pair. (Utterly hilarious!)

But, Sandy's felt the rape of golden lock.
He's tarnished her virginity with shock.
Her days of loving bad boys without sample,
are gone through Danny's tasteless hair example. (More hilarity.)

You've outdone yourself with this one, Mark. Bravo!

3.5 Over and Out

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2015
    From hair to hands to shoes. You have worked your way around the human globe with these obsessions. LOL.
    It's wonderful to read your enthusiastic response to poetry especially such a long, involved piece. I can tell you really engaged with the theme and the details. Thank you for your great rating. It always puts a shine in my pocket. I'm sure I've promoted you way over 3.5, so you are now 3.9 and no arguments.
reply by Green Lake Girl on 02-Nov-2015
    3.9 remains humble and quietly proud.
    (I'm still a bit obsessed with my hair. It's always been a problem.)