SPIRIT BASKET
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Scene 5: Coming of America"270 Years of an Alaska Family
9 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
As always, your account of Alaskan life in the early years is totally captivating and intriguing. I am very much enjoying these scripts based on the Spirit Basket stories. It is so easy to visualize this as a movie or screen presentation of some sort. I keep hoping you will submit this to someone in Hollywood who would be interested in producing it.
A couple of tiny nits to correct (unless I'm mistaken) follow:
***DIRT STREETS CROWED (crowded?) WITH SOLDIERS AND THE PUBLIC - AFTERNOON
***Russians (Russian) soldiers hold out the rope to use for descending the flag.
A most enjoyable read, Miss Alaska. I love it.
  |
As always, your account of Alaskan life in the early years is totally captivating and intriguing. I am very much enjoying these scripts based on the Spirit Basket stories. It is so easy to visualize this as a movie or screen presentation of some sort. I keep hoping you will submit this to someone in Hollywood who would be interested in producing it.
A couple of tiny nits to correct (unless I'm mistaken) follow:
***DIRT STREETS CROWED (crowded?) WITH SOLDIERS AND THE PUBLIC - AFTERNOON
***Russians (Russian) soldiers hold out the rope to use for descending the flag.
A most enjoyable read, Miss Alaska. I love it.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
Comment from c_lucas
The Indians pondered over the Americans desire for land. They viewed the land as belonging to everyone. The differences of the two cultures will bring ill winds to the Indians.
Error
Father, is that massive log the cedar tree you told (??) about?
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
The Indians pondered over the Americans desire for land. They viewed the land as belonging to everyone. The differences of the two cultures will bring ill winds to the Indians.
Error
Father, is that massive log the cedar tree you told (??) about?
Comment Written 31-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
Thanks so much for reviewing this scene and for catching an error. Marie
-
You're welcome, A. Charlie
Comment from Zue65
I learned form past history here in this post. Although I am not really that kind of person that will harbor ill feelings form the past mistakes of my ancestors. I believe in moving on and will not punish the new generation with the mistakes of the past. You have only one land, America and division is not the answer. God bless. By the way, I am an Asian but I learned to love your country.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
I learned form past history here in this post. Although I am not really that kind of person that will harbor ill feelings form the past mistakes of my ancestors. I believe in moving on and will not punish the new generation with the mistakes of the past. You have only one land, America and division is not the answer. God bless. By the way, I am an Asian but I learned to love your country.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
I appreciate your comments. Thanks so much for taking time to review this. Marie
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Marie. How arre you, my friend? "The Spirit Basket" must be an informative history and I would no doubt enjoyn reading it sometime.
You have strong descriptive passages thjroughout this chapter for instance:
"Over 200 American soldiers trail two Generals and come to a stop before the flagpole. Russians soldiers hold out the rope to use for descending the flag. A sudden BOOM fractures the air. Cannon fire from Ossipee, an American ship in the harbor. Russian cannon fire on shore answers. The flag begins to edge down.
And:
"A couple hundred sailed out of here for Russia on the high tide. Too bad because the American congress granted them land if they stayed."
Bravo! My friend. Good account and writing. Bob
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
Hi, Marie. How arre you, my friend? "The Spirit Basket" must be an informative history and I would no doubt enjoyn reading it sometime.
You have strong descriptive passages thjroughout this chapter for instance:
"Over 200 American soldiers trail two Generals and come to a stop before the flagpole. Russians soldiers hold out the rope to use for descending the flag. A sudden BOOM fractures the air. Cannon fire from Ossipee, an American ship in the harbor. Russian cannon fire on shore answers. The flag begins to edge down.
And:
"A couple hundred sailed out of here for Russia on the high tide. Too bad because the American congress granted them land if they stayed."
Bravo! My friend. Good account and writing. Bob
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
Thanks a million for reviewing, Bob. It is encouraging to know when someone takes the time to read this, especially when I know scripts lack so much in perceiving the setting. Marie
-
You are very welcome, Marie. Bob
Comment from Sasha
This is another excellent chapter. You certainly have done tremendous research for this. I enjoyed reading this very much. I found one small spag:
At the end of the school day a few student file out the classroom ... you need an 's' at the end of the word 'student' ...
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
This is another excellent chapter. You certainly have done tremendous research for this. I enjoyed reading this very much. I found one small spag:
At the end of the school day a few student file out the classroom ... you need an 's' at the end of the word 'student' ...
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
Thanks so much for catching the typo. You are so good to take time to read this and review. Marie
Comment from Shirley McLain
I find scripts difficult to read but I do like this story. The characters are strong and the dialogue is appropriate. You did a great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
I find scripts difficult to read but I do like this story. The characters are strong and the dialogue is appropriate. You did a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
I agree that scripts are not so easy to read, especially in the format that FS offers. Thanks for reviewing, Shirley.
Comment from Nosha17
I do remember reading some of your story before, I remember enjoying it. I like the historical information and the characters of the Native Americans described in the story. Well presented script-maybe you should post it in the script category. Couple of things, between Para 6 and 7, Crowded. Para 11, They stand to attention (expression meaning militarily alert)Most enjoyable. faye
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
I do remember reading some of your story before, I remember enjoying it. I like the historical information and the characters of the Native Americans described in the story. Well presented script-maybe you should post it in the script category. Couple of things, between Para 6 and 7, Crowded. Para 11, They stand to attention (expression meaning militarily alert)Most enjoyable. faye
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
Thanks for commenting. I appreciate your review. Marie
Comment from gamay
Hello Alaskastory.
This nice work you written.
Its so interesting.
I like the way you write it.
Its easy to understand.
keep on coming my Friend.
God bless you.
gamay
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
Hello Alaskastory.
This nice work you written.
Its so interesting.
I like the way you write it.
Its easy to understand.
keep on coming my Friend.
God bless you.
gamay
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
I appreciate your comment. Thanks for reviewing. Marie
Comment from Ricky1024
Review posted through a ZTE Android phone have no access to the internet with parent time as I am in a convalescent in a rehab from my accident I was involved in my round up for the titanium rod encrusted with in a lake it was broken and six places which is a multiple compound there will be grandma cuz there will be run off and run on sentences there will be no abbreviations and I read the piece it was quite long into fights basically based on of Asians my family history of from Czechoslovakia they were invaded twice by the Russians and once by the Germans were the Nazis and both times for my great uncle Joseph in 600 revolutionist to care that while the communist government credit forward in the history books my great uncle died in a Silvia prison he may Time magazine in 1972 and his ideas on socialism back then are still well respected today at the country moves forward they're still not totally non-communist it go they are still considered a poor country on the Bohemian side or the Slovakia side my family basically want to 17 levels of grand broke off so don't progress with starting with a shock on a hill probably got to be hundreds of years ago we are related to the crystal Swarovski crystal people has cousins the pieces filled with great inventory on my thoroughly enjoyed it it brings me to sort of the the the great 1500 100 rule by the Austrian King invasion of Czechoslovakia hey aware that they took over our churches and me to speak their language and we will check with locking people put up with it for only 100 years on and then they revolted they regain their churches by marching all of the other increased up to the top level and I'm pushing them off those who did not die Arbeit Modesto one of the few times in history that this so peaceful and quiet people in in Richton Park decided to take things in their own hands as well noted you don't want to mess around with an angry Czechoslovakian review by Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
|
Review posted through a ZTE Android phone have no access to the internet with parent time as I am in a convalescent in a rehab from my accident I was involved in my round up for the titanium rod encrusted with in a lake it was broken and six places which is a multiple compound there will be grandma cuz there will be run off and run on sentences there will be no abbreviations and I read the piece it was quite long into fights basically based on of Asians my family history of from Czechoslovakia they were invaded twice by the Russians and once by the Germans were the Nazis and both times for my great uncle Joseph in 600 revolutionist to care that while the communist government credit forward in the history books my great uncle died in a Silvia prison he may Time magazine in 1972 and his ideas on socialism back then are still well respected today at the country moves forward they're still not totally non-communist it go they are still considered a poor country on the Bohemian side or the Slovakia side my family basically want to 17 levels of grand broke off so don't progress with starting with a shock on a hill probably got to be hundreds of years ago we are related to the crystal Swarovski crystal people has cousins the pieces filled with great inventory on my thoroughly enjoyed it it brings me to sort of the the the great 1500 100 rule by the Austrian King invasion of Czechoslovakia hey aware that they took over our churches and me to speak their language and we will check with locking people put up with it for only 100 years on and then they revolted they regain their churches by marching all of the other increased up to the top level and I'm pushing them off those who did not die Arbeit Modesto one of the few times in history that this so peaceful and quiet people in in Richton Park decided to take things in their own hands as well noted you don't want to mess around with an angry Czechoslovakian review by Ricky 1024
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2015
-
Wrong story!
