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Minute Poem contest entry41 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
Congratulations Steve, on winning second place with this beautiful poem. It is truly an artful piece and so thought-provoking as well as beautiful. I enjoyed it and was happy to see you, once again, among the winners. You are an outstanding poet, no matter what form you tackle. (I thought I had another six left, but see I've used my last. Does it help to know I consider it a six anyway?) Now I wish I'd waited to review until tomorrow.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Congratulations Steve, on winning second place with this beautiful poem. It is truly an artful piece and so thought-provoking as well as beautiful. I enjoyed it and was happy to see you, once again, among the winners. You are an outstanding poet, no matter what form you tackle. (I thought I had another six left, but see I've used my last. Does it help to know I consider it a six anyway?) Now I wish I'd waited to review until tomorrow.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Adonna.
I appreciate your constant support for my writing. I've only been at it for four years or so and learning all the time, so now I just have to live to be 104 and I should be getting pretty good! That's unless the end of days comes around before then!
Steve
Comment from evilynne
Congratulations on your win. Your poem is nicely written, thought provoking, and seems to follow the requirements well. The picture is also awesome. Evi
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Congratulations on your win. Your poem is nicely written, thought provoking, and seems to follow the requirements well. The picture is also awesome. Evi
Comment Written 03-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Evi - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from w.j.debi
A thoughtful and thought provoking poem, Steve.
Excellent use of metaphor, which you use consistently and beautifully--the sunset, the sea meeting sky...
The meter flows smoothly and the syllable count is perfect.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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A thoughtful and thought provoking poem, Steve.
Excellent use of metaphor, which you use consistently and beautifully--the sunset, the sea meeting sky...
The meter flows smoothly and the syllable count is perfect.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve
Comment from Sis Cat
Hmm. This poem resonated with me. Your rhymes and rhythm appealed to my ear. Your images and metaphors appealed to my imagination. Your message appealed to my heart. Thank you for sharing.
"A life so rich is fleeting breath
till glooming Death,
with mournful sighs,
can claim his prize."
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Hmm. This poem resonated with me. Your rhymes and rhythm appealed to my ear. Your images and metaphors appealed to my imagination. Your message appealed to my heart. Thank you for sharing.
"A life so rich is fleeting breath
till glooming Death,
with mournful sighs,
can claim his prize."
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from emjaihammond
This one strikes me where I live and with such imagery too. You've brought to mind a subject we may not like to think about, yet it is something we are touched by sooner or later. We all tend to have some pretty strong opinions of what that day will look like. I admire the feeling that comes through in your writing.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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This one strikes me where I live and with such imagery too. You've brought to mind a subject we may not like to think about, yet it is something we are touched by sooner or later. We all tend to have some pretty strong opinions of what that day will look like. I admire the feeling that comes through in your writing.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thanks, MJ
Seems I'm in a gloomy phase at the moment - just finished another piece about death!
Steve
Comment from I am Cat
Wow Steve, a very deeply profound entry for this minute poem contest...
I love your word choices.
A life so rich is fleeting breath
till glooming Death,
with mournful sighs,
can claim his prize.
(states the truth which is Life, fleeting as it is... is only ours until Death
comes to claim ours)
For all who sail this ocean deep,
where fickle sweep
of wind and wave
may test the brave,
(tested as we are along the way... through the trials and tribulations... so well stated)
shall face one final mystery
where sky meets sea,
the world ablaze
at end of days.
(we only know that we must live our lives to the fullest until that final moment... and go out... in a blaze of glory!)
well stated and in an impeccable form which we all but forget is happening all around a lovely poetic statement of life. A SIX STAR WORTHY POEM... (which I am just pitifully ready for... ) :(
somebody talk to Tom about this, would you?
Well done Steve and good luck in this contest
Cat
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Wow Steve, a very deeply profound entry for this minute poem contest...
I love your word choices.
A life so rich is fleeting breath
till glooming Death,
with mournful sighs,
can claim his prize.
(states the truth which is Life, fleeting as it is... is only ours until Death
comes to claim ours)
For all who sail this ocean deep,
where fickle sweep
of wind and wave
may test the brave,
(tested as we are along the way... through the trials and tribulations... so well stated)
shall face one final mystery
where sky meets sea,
the world ablaze
at end of days.
(we only know that we must live our lives to the fullest until that final moment... and go out... in a blaze of glory!)
well stated and in an impeccable form which we all but forget is happening all around a lovely poetic statement of life. A SIX STAR WORTHY POEM... (which I am just pitifully ready for... ) :(
somebody talk to Tom about this, would you?
Well done Steve and good luck in this contest
Cat
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Cat, for your usual thorough review and the virtual six.
I must be in a gloomy phase at the moment - I've just completed another poem about death - 'There so many ways a chap can die / A grand explosion's better than a rot...
Sent that one somewhere else wher they occasionally pay me - it may end up on FanStory later.
Steve
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is great imagery in it. It is written in the perfect minute syllable count and has good meter as well. I wish you well in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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This is great imagery in it. It is written in the perfect minute syllable count and has good meter as well. I wish you well in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Teresa - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
One can be adrift in the ocean and be at the mercy of the currents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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One can be adrift in the ocean and be at the mercy of the currents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thanks, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your minute poem. The artwork is awesome. Good job on the format. Your message is strong within the words.
I see no changes.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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I enjoyed your minute poem. The artwork is awesome. Good job on the format. Your message is strong within the words.
I see no changes.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Hey Steve, wonderful metaphor. Your opening stanza clearly reveals the sting and venom of death in a blooming life, taken away the fruits of labour (the prize) of life. The final mystery is really inevitable. Great work.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Hey Steve, wonderful metaphor. Your opening stanza clearly reveals the sting and venom of death in a blooming life, taken away the fruits of labour (the prize) of life. The final mystery is really inevitable. Great work.
ola thomas
Comment Written 16-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Ola. Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
