My Dad
Small boy's Tribute16 total reviews
Comment from L.lora
It has been way too long
since I've been here and
read your work. You are
still penning some wonderful
lines, this is no exception.
So much emotion and depth is
portrayed in so few words.
no nits or spags. Lora
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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It has been way too long
since I've been here and
read your work. You are
still penning some wonderful
lines, this is no exception.
So much emotion and depth is
portrayed in so few words.
no nits or spags. Lora
Comment Written 12-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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Wow, Thank you! I have also been away too long, now that things are slowing down a tad I will start putting some stories out that have been simmering on the back burner for a long time!
Great to hear from you again, Lora!
irish
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It was my pleasure to read and review your work. I'm not here as much as I'd like to be--however I try to be here often...LOL. Looking forward to more of your work my friend. Lora
Comment from Selina Stambi
A tiny, touching tribute that conveys volumes with a paucity of words.
Very well done, Irish. The amazing thing is, your reader is able to figure out a lot without the author notes.
Sonali
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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A tiny, touching tribute that conveys volumes with a paucity of words.
Very well done, Irish. The amazing thing is, your reader is able to figure out a lot without the author notes.
Sonali
Comment Written 13-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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I am humbled by your kind words. How in the world did you find me, this tribute was written some time ago.
Thanks again,
irish
Comment from PenelopePoet
What a sad poem! I see on the stone this man died in 1909 so I guess this isn't the same dad that was killed in Iraq but that is not a distraction in any way from your splendid poem which is well written and very touching. I will read more of your poetry. You are very good.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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What a sad poem! I see on the stone this man died in 1909 so I guess this isn't the same dad that was killed in Iraq but that is not a distraction in any way from your splendid poem which is well written and very touching. I will read more of your poetry. You are very good.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much! I am humbled by all your stars, and surprised you found this little poem. I write mainly fiction, but sometimes everything just falls into place and I am able to reflect and express emotions in rhyme. This poem was inspired by the small son of a friend placing a flag at his fathers tombstone. The loss, and the silent, solemn tribute seemed to far exceed the boy's years and understanding.
Thank you again, irish
Comment from MissMerri
I truly love this! What a sweet sentiment, and so much is said in these well-chosen few words. It is just right in every way. You speak from the heart and you fit your feelings perfectly to the form. Congratulations on placing third in this Lune contest. There were many entries, so you should be very proud of this. ;") I know I am!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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I truly love this! What a sweet sentiment, and so much is said in these well-chosen few words. It is just right in every way. You speak from the heart and you fit your feelings perfectly to the form. Congratulations on placing third in this Lune contest. There were many entries, so you should be very proud of this. ;") I know I am!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Thank you! I am surprised and humbled to have placed third in a field of real poets, which I am not. You are such a great poet, you should have won that contest. How generous you are, to share third place with such a rank amateur! Perhaps now, as the dust settles, I can write something worthwhile in the fictional mode...
Thanks again, My Friend!
irish
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Beautiful Lune poem about a boy that lost his father who fought in Iraq. Good job with the syllable count and I like the presentation, nice picture.
~Gypsy
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Hello :)
Beautiful Lune poem about a boy that lost his father who fought in Iraq. Good job with the syllable count and I like the presentation, nice picture.
~Gypsy
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Gypsy, for your kind words and the stars! Write this tribute to help bring attention to the rotten treatment our returning vets get from the government.
irish
Comment from Neonewman
Wonderfully crafted lune you have delivered. This should rise high in ranking during the voting process. Best of luck in the contest.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Wonderfully crafted lune you have delivered. This should rise high in ranking during the voting process. Best of luck in the contest.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words, and the stars! usually never enter contests, but hoped this tribute would bring attention and get some better treatment for our returning Wounded Warriors.
irish
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow. This is a touching poem. I like how your imagery pulled back a little and let the poem show the imagery which was powerful. This is a tough poem to read but unfortunately only too common.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Wow. This is a touching poem. I like how your imagery pulled back a little and let the poem show the imagery which was powerful. This is a tough poem to read but unfortunately only too common.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you Michael for your kind words and the stars! Wrote this as a tribute but also to bring attention to the rotten treatment our returning vets get.
irish
Comment from LeannaP
IRISHAUTHORME,
Great read here, with suggestibility.
It was very heartwarming In just the
few lines you used to express the condolences of a fallen soldier,
it also expresses beautifully the love a son has for
his dad.Beautiful work
and excellent picture to use to go along
with it.
Leanna
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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IRISHAUTHORME,
Great read here, with suggestibility.
It was very heartwarming In just the
few lines you used to express the condolences of a fallen soldier,
it also expresses beautifully the love a son has for
his dad.Beautiful work
and excellent picture to use to go along
with it.
Leanna
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Leanna, for your kind comments, and all the stars! Wrote this as a tribute, and also to bring attention to get better treatment for our returning vets.
irish
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Well, how thoughtful!
Great read!
Comment from arnie47
Very poignant for this time of year. Somehow during all this political turmoil we forget about those who served. My father was in the navy during WWII was supposed to ship out on the Indianapolis but caught rhuematic fever and was in hospital in Seattle when that ship was torpedoed and sunk. I had an uncle who was a master sergeant on DDay and received two purple hearts and a bronze star, and another uncle who was a machine gunner in the South Pacific. So I understand the huge punch this short, succinct poem holds.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Very poignant for this time of year. Somehow during all this political turmoil we forget about those who served. My father was in the navy during WWII was supposed to ship out on the Indianapolis but caught rhuematic fever and was in hospital in Seattle when that ship was torpedoed and sunk. I had an uncle who was a master sergeant on DDay and received two purple hearts and a bronze star, and another uncle who was a machine gunner in the South Pacific. So I understand the huge punch this short, succinct poem holds.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for the history, your kind words, and the stars! My father was a SeaBee in WWII, gone almost four years and came back as someone we didn't know. Got a purple heart, but would not talk about the war and refused the limited therapy available. Lost an uncle and a cousin, Kwajalein and Okinawa.
Bitter about the treatment our returning vets get, part of the prompting for this tribute.
irish
Comment from IndianaIrish
I love this lune format because it has the syllable count as the only rule. It allows the writer to be more creative. I feel the emotional power of your poem, Irish, and can picture easily the image of a small boy holding his daddy's hand as they walk together. I can see his dad wiping mustard from the corner of his mouth from a ballpark hot dog, brushing back the hair from his forehead, or holding him tight against his heart. It's a stunning heartfelt poem, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Smiles,
Sassy :-)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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I love this lune format because it has the syllable count as the only rule. It allows the writer to be more creative. I feel the emotional power of your poem, Irish, and can picture easily the image of a small boy holding his daddy's hand as they walk together. I can see his dad wiping mustard from the corner of his mouth from a ballpark hot dog, brushing back the hair from his forehead, or holding him tight against his heart. It's a stunning heartfelt poem, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Smiles,
Sassy :-)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you, Dear Friend, for your understanding and kind words. My dad was gone four years in WWII, and he was someone else when he came back, never got my real dad back again. Also bitter about the way our returning vets are treated, helped prompt this tribute. Just had something I needed to say.
irish
