Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Well Hello, Dolly"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
59 total reviews
Comment from Master Philip
That was pretty great stuff!
A few lines in, the guy took on an English accent in my head for some reason. ;-)
(I think it might be his "proper" way of speaking.)
Anyways, cool stuff.
Was there a word limit you had to adhere to? If you had the space, I would've liked to read a bit more detail about when he removed her eyes. Things like the little whisp of smoke that floats upwards when the hot spoon digs in next to her tear duct. Maybe have her catch a whiff of it? Maybe she threw up in her throat a little, but the gauze blocked it and she choked to death on the cesar salad he had purchased her at the restaurant a few hours ago, back when she thought she was such a lucky woman to be on a date with this intelligent, handsome gentleman...
Just a couple of thoughts, that's all.
I still really enjoyed it.
Sincerely,
Master Philip
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That was pretty great stuff!
A few lines in, the guy took on an English accent in my head for some reason. ;-)
(I think it might be his "proper" way of speaking.)
Anyways, cool stuff.
Was there a word limit you had to adhere to? If you had the space, I would've liked to read a bit more detail about when he removed her eyes. Things like the little whisp of smoke that floats upwards when the hot spoon digs in next to her tear duct. Maybe have her catch a whiff of it? Maybe she threw up in her throat a little, but the gauze blocked it and she choked to death on the cesar salad he had purchased her at the restaurant a few hours ago, back when she thought she was such a lucky woman to be on a date with this intelligent, handsome gentleman...
Just a couple of thoughts, that's all.
I still really enjoyed it.
Sincerely,
Master Philip
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
Comment from Ric Myworld
Now, I'll just have to hope that a few days will get rid of those images of popping eyes out of their sockets with a spoon. Thanks for the pleasure of reading another chapter of your Tiny Tales of twisted Terror. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Now, I'll just have to hope that a few days will get rid of those images of popping eyes out of their sockets with a spoon. Thanks for the pleasure of reading another chapter of your Tiny Tales of twisted Terror. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Heh-heh, sorry about that, Ric. Well, I'm not really sorry, I just have to say that or you'll hate me and think I'm cruel, lol. I appreciate your comments my friend. ~Dean :}
Comment from Gunner Lil
A very good tale. A great description of the operation. Love the heating of the
spoons and the 'pop'. I had to laugh.
A nice read that had the reader wanting more.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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A very good tale. A great description of the operation. Love the heating of the
spoons and the 'pop'. I had to laugh.
A nice read that had the reader wanting more.
Thank you.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Thank you very much, Gunner. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. There are many more stories just like mine in the book. Check them out sometime. :)
~Dean
Comment from ravenblack
He forgot to install the string that you pull to make the doll talk lol. Grotesque and chilling. And not so far from reality. Dahlmer was trying to make his victims into his own dolls. So, what was the name of your teddy bear?
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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He forgot to install the string that you pull to make the doll talk lol. Grotesque and chilling. And not so far from reality. Dahlmer was trying to make his victims into his own dolls. So, what was the name of your teddy bear?
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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If my memory serves me correctly, Ed, I had an over-sized stuffed T-Rex that I slept with as a kid. Which probably explains my affinity towards things which...well... eat other things and sport very large teeth. His name was Rex, I think. Original, huh?
Thanks a bunch for the review. I'm glad you've taken an interest in the tiny twisted tales. I'm sure all of the other fantastic authors who have contributed to the book appreciate it as well.
Thanks again! ~Dean
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day Dean, YUCK! That was one of the grossest (if that's a word) things I've ever read mate, but I loved it. At first it sounded like my smart arse Dr who takes such pleasure in telling me that his injections will hurt me a lot more than him LOL. This is great stuff cobber. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Hahahaha! G'day Dean, YUCK! That was one of the grossest (if that's a word) things I've ever read mate, but I loved it. At first it sounded like my smart arse Dr who takes such pleasure in telling me that his injections will hurt me a lot more than him LOL. This is great stuff cobber. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your comments, Fez, as well as taking the required time to read it. I appreciate it, mate.~Dean
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great title for this story Dean and you tell it almost like a lecturer talking us through your operation to perfect the living doll, except she wasn't in the end. Well done. You keep coming up with some terrible tales.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Great title for this story Dean and you tell it almost like a lecturer talking us through your operation to perfect the living doll, except she wasn't in the end. Well done. You keep coming up with some terrible tales.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your comments, Pearl, as well as taking the necessary time to read it. ~Dean
Comment from sandragee
Don't you just hate it when someone asks you a question and don't let you reply?
Annoying. He's a psychopath with great commentary skill. This tale is ghoulish and great.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Don't you just hate it when someone asks you a question and don't let you reply?
Annoying. He's a psychopath with great commentary skill. This tale is ghoulish and great.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your comments, Sandra, as well as taking the necessary time to read it. ~Dean
Comment from DALLAS01
Now that is what I call some kind of terror. Reminds me of something that the writers of criminal minds might have produced, back when they took a few more liberties than they seem to do now. Funny, how you can detect the change in writing on that show. This one rates a six for creepiness.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Now that is what I call some kind of terror. Reminds me of something that the writers of criminal minds might have produced, back when they took a few more liberties than they seem to do now. Funny, how you can detect the change in writing on that show. This one rates a six for creepiness.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thanks, DALLAS, and I'll gladly accept a six for creepiness, eeriness, or whatever 'ness you'd like to attach to it, lol.
Thanks for the six stars, and your thoughtful comments. I really do appreciate it!
~Dean :}
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Comment from GE Parson
My "Goulish" Friend,
You and your good friend Bret West make a pair, a rotten pair, but never-the-less a pair!
I was in a street fight with a 1200 lb. well maybe a 300 lb man and I felt to survive I had to do some vicious fighting, so I poked him in his eyes with my pinkie finger and index finger, and his eyes popped out and was dangling on his cheeks; He was screaming and staggering around. He ran into a brick wall and knocked himself out and fell down. I didn't know what to do, I wasn't expecting to de-eye him.
So what I did was probably either the best thing or worst thing, but I ran a half a block to the police station and told them there as was some man laying in the ally. Than I left as soon as I could before they started asking me questions.
Anyway, my brother, you make interesting stories.
YBIC,
Jerry
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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My "Goulish" Friend,
You and your good friend Bret West make a pair, a rotten pair, but never-the-less a pair!
I was in a street fight with a 1200 lb. well maybe a 300 lb man and I felt to survive I had to do some vicious fighting, so I poked him in his eyes with my pinkie finger and index finger, and his eyes popped out and was dangling on his cheeks; He was screaming and staggering around. He ran into a brick wall and knocked himself out and fell down. I didn't know what to do, I wasn't expecting to de-eye him.
So what I did was probably either the best thing or worst thing, but I ran a half a block to the police station and told them there as was some man laying in the ally. Than I left as soon as I could before they started asking me questions.
Anyway, my brother, you make interesting stories.
YBIC,
Jerry
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your comments, Jerry, as well as taking the necessary time to read it.
God bless. ~Dean
Comment from Connie C
You are so good at this kind of writing, Dean. I was curious what those "masterpieces" were in the display cases, but after finishing this little story of yours, I can only imagine what they might contain. What great fun this was to read!
Connie
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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You are so good at this kind of writing, Dean. I was curious what those "masterpieces" were in the display cases, but after finishing this little story of yours, I can only imagine what they might contain. What great fun this was to read!
Connie
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your comments, Connie, as well as taking the necessary time to read it. ~Dean
