Cruel Rain
free verse34 total reviews
Comment from May 1
I love the image of rain this creates in my mind, it's awesome. The image you create of Earth is so sad, I can feel it's pain. I love the ending because it sounds so true.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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I love the image of rain this creates in my mind, it's awesome. The image you create of Earth is so sad, I can feel it's pain. I love the ending because it sounds so true.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Hi May 1,
Thank you for the excellent review. I don't wander into free verse often, but found it the best form for this story. I am glad you liked it.
Debi
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello w.j.debi
I liked how you told us in the beginning of your poem the need of rain and they with your poetic voice how the wrinkled Earth--
accepts gratefully,
drinking, bathing, capturing what she can,
relieved for the temporary renewal
of her youth,
savoring the moment
Gert
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Hello w.j.debi
I liked how you told us in the beginning of your poem the need of rain and they with your poetic voice how the wrinkled Earth--
accepts gratefully,
drinking, bathing, capturing what she can,
relieved for the temporary renewal
of her youth,
savoring the moment
Gert
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Hi Gert,
Thank you so much for the unexpected review. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by and writ such a gracious and encouraging review. I am happy you liked it. Thank you. Debi
Comment from BeasPeas
Dear debi. I don't know when I have enjoyed a poem so much. This piece is truly exceptionally written and described. Outstanding job. Marilyn/BeasPeas
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Dear debi. I don't know when I have enjoyed a poem so much. This piece is truly exceptionally written and described. Outstanding job. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Wow, what a delightful surprise to come home to tonight. I didn't have anything listed so I did not expect a review and certainly not a wonderful six stars. Thank you so much for the delightful review. I am happy you enjoyed reading this verse so much. You really made my evening! Thank you, Marilyn!
Comment from lakeport
Cruel rain, indeed thank God for the rain, but at times it is to much at once,
I enjoyed reading the poem, nice flow. I enjoyed reading it, God bless you. Hugs1 lakeport.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Cruel rain, indeed thank God for the rain, but at times it is to much at once,
I enjoyed reading the poem, nice flow. I enjoyed reading it, God bless you. Hugs1 lakeport.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Hi Lakeport,
Thank you for the encouraging comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Debi
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you are very welcome.Hugs! lakeport.
Comment from Bill Schott
I love this personification and great descriptions used in your poem to complain about the fickle moisture cycle and how it's feast or famine with rain. Great job with this.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I love this personification and great descriptions used in your poem to complain about the fickle moisture cycle and how it's feast or famine with rain. Great job with this.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging comments. I am pleased to hear you enjoyed reading it. Thank you. Debi
Comment from Pantygynt
You just have have lived in Africa and waited for the monsoon rains to break the drought. I suppose it could be anywhere that is dependent on monsoon rainfall. An excellent poem that uses alliteration well to paint the picture of an arid landscape waiting for the rains to come.
"while ragged, wrinkled Earth"
Then of course it all comes at once in a single tercet,
"Then you, Rain, unleash a torrent,
a drenching, drowning deluge
full of fury and pride."
that brings relief and disastrous flooding together.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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You just have have lived in Africa and waited for the monsoon rains to break the drought. I suppose it could be anywhere that is dependent on monsoon rainfall. An excellent poem that uses alliteration well to paint the picture of an arid landscape waiting for the rains to come.
"while ragged, wrinkled Earth"
Then of course it all comes at once in a single tercet,
"Then you, Rain, unleash a torrent,
a drenching, drowning deluge
full of fury and pride."
that brings relief and disastrous flooding together.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I've never been to Africa, but we are on tight water restrictions where I live. I do hope we get rain soon instead of the clouds that just keep rolling by and taunting us with possibility.
Thank you for the great analysis of the writing. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Debi
Comment from judester
This is is great. I love the image of a petulant child hiding behind mothers billowy white skirts. That is how it seems on those days when the clouds and thunder are threatening, but rain is holding back, cheers judester
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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This is is great. I love the image of a petulant child hiding behind mothers billowy white skirts. That is how it seems on those days when the clouds and thunder are threatening, but rain is holding back, cheers judester
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the great review, judester. You got exactly the meaning I was trying to portray. I appreciate you mentioning the "mother's billowy skirts." Now, if it would just rain. Thank for reading and reviewing. Debi
Comment from Mastery
Hi, debi. What an outstanding poem this is. You have all the strong verbs in all the right places, I think.
I especially took note of this stanza:
"And Earth accepts gratefully,
drinking, bathing, capturing what she can,
relieved for the temporary renewal
of her youth,
savoring the moment
with joy and sorrow,
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Hi, debi. What an outstanding poem this is. You have all the strong verbs in all the right places, I think.
I especially took note of this stanza:
"And Earth accepts gratefully,
drinking, bathing, capturing what she can,
relieved for the temporary renewal
of her youth,
savoring the moment
with joy and sorrow,
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the encroaching review, Bob. I appreciate you pointing out then lines you liked best. Debi
Comment from gallivandog
I loved reading this, I remember writing a verse quite similar a few years back, which told the story of the drought and the parched earth in much need of re hydrating in order for the wildlife to flourish and survive. "Your Mothers Billowy Cotton Skirt" this line is genius, one of the best descriptive lines I've read in a while.
Thanks for sharing this and well done you.
Regards
Dave
S.Wales
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I loved reading this, I remember writing a verse quite similar a few years back, which told the story of the drought and the parched earth in much need of re hydrating in order for the wildlife to flourish and survive. "Your Mothers Billowy Cotton Skirt" this line is genius, one of the best descriptive lines I've read in a while.
Thanks for sharing this and well done you.
Regards
Dave
S.Wales
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review, Dave. I appreciate the comment about the "billowy cotton skirts" line. I think I will be smiling the rest of the day. Thank you! Debi
Comment from inside echo
I wish I had a 6. So vey well written and so painfully honestly described. You wrote a perfect poem describing rain and its components. Your poem works well to think of a person, longing for the tiny pleasure another could give, if even for a brief moment. Beautifully and vividly written. A perfect poem. Thank you for sharing.
echo
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I wish I had a 6. So vey well written and so painfully honestly described. You wrote a perfect poem describing rain and its components. Your poem works well to think of a person, longing for the tiny pleasure another could give, if even for a brief moment. Beautifully and vividly written. A perfect poem. Thank you for sharing.
echo
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the virtual six, Inside Echo. I don't know about perfect, but I am honored by your remarks. I appreciate your insightful comments about an alternate interpretation as well. Free verse was a stretch for me so I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
