Puppy Love
Is it possible to be in love for a lifetime?16 total reviews
Comment from Jackq
Congratulations on your win. I knew you had it as soon as I read your entry. It was very well written and easy to read. I loved the way you ended it.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Jackie
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Congratulations on your win. I knew you had it as soon as I read your entry. It was very well written and easy to read. I loved the way you ended it.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Jackie
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thousands in my portfolio. Thanks.
Comment from RodG
I really like this story as it brings back bitter-sweet memories of a similar relationship I had growing up. You have really made us CARE about Susie, the narrator, and the-boy-she-could-not-have, Danny. Each scene is beautifully paced and we get to SEE how this relationship slowly evolved over the years. I like how the last scene ends, allowing the reader to coo, "Maybe .. . ?" This story is poignant, not saccharine, and thus appeals to a wide audience. So well done, I wish I had written it myself!
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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I really like this story as it brings back bitter-sweet memories of a similar relationship I had growing up. You have really made us CARE about Susie, the narrator, and the-boy-she-could-not-have, Danny. Each scene is beautifully paced and we get to SEE how this relationship slowly evolved over the years. I like how the last scene ends, allowing the reader to coo, "Maybe .. . ?" This story is poignant, not saccharine, and thus appeals to a wide audience. So well done, I wish I had written it myself!
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Thanks for the stars. Hugs, ingrid
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good story!! -action flows, descriptive language used, excellent format and picture, excellent character development, held my interest all the way to the end.
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Good story!! -action flows, descriptive language used, excellent format and picture, excellent character development, held my interest all the way to the end.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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So glad you enjoyed this. Thanks.
Comment from K. Lorraine
Many long term romances start out as puppy love...
Some even turn into a long term marriage...
This was a nice story, but take a look at all of the 'down the street' used. I think the story could improve if you used different ways of meaning -- 'down the street.'
I found this word error... *Mama would ask about (out) muddied clothes.
I never loved any man the same way that I loved the boy next door... But I wouldn't give up my husband for all the gold on earth...
Nice contest entry and best wishes...
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Many long term romances start out as puppy love...
Some even turn into a long term marriage...
This was a nice story, but take a look at all of the 'down the street' used. I think the story could improve if you used different ways of meaning -- 'down the street.'
I found this word error... *Mama would ask about (out) muddied clothes.
I never loved any man the same way that I loved the boy next door... But I wouldn't give up my husband for all the gold on earth...
Nice contest entry and best wishes...
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for catching that. I'll look at it again..
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You're welcome... keep on writing. This was a nice story.
Comment from livelylinda
Author: I loved this story. Didn't have a comparable experience but in my imagination something similar. You have written a good story, easy to read. Kept this reader eager to read the next sentence, paragraph, hoping they ended up together. I think they finally did. livelylinda
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Author: I loved this story. Didn't have a comparable experience but in my imagination something similar. You have written a good story, easy to read. Kept this reader eager to read the next sentence, paragraph, hoping they ended up together. I think they finally did. livelylinda
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Sometimes a happy ending makes us feel better while we live ordinary lives--especially the writer. Thanks.
Comment from Ben Colder
Sounds as if jealousy ruled and won out. Gender gap. It happens and you explained it well. Poor pretty girl who was being a typical teen and hated by her younger peer.
I find no fault in the way this is written. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Sounds as if jealousy ruled and won out. Gender gap. It happens and you explained it well. Poor pretty girl who was being a typical teen and hated by her younger peer.
I find no fault in the way this is written. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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For teenage girls, every emotion is stretched to its utmost limit. Thanks.
Comment from jpduck
I thought this was a most accomplished story. I vividly felt the narrator's agonies. I suspect you must be in with a good chance with the contest. Good luck with it.
Adrian
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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I thought this was a most accomplished story. I vividly felt the narrator's agonies. I suspect you must be in with a good chance with the contest. Good luck with it.
Adrian
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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A simple love story that I wish was mine. Thanks.
Comment from petalangela
Such a well written and fascinating tale. Yes it is possible to love for a lifetime . This story show the real depth of love no frills thrills and false excitement. True love is clam and steady...... Until your eyes meet
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Such a well written and fascinating tale. Yes it is possible to love for a lifetime . This story show the real depth of love no frills thrills and false excitement. True love is clam and steady...... Until your eyes meet
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you very much. It's good to believe in love--especially a sustaining love.
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a well told story of unrequited puppy love. Oh, the childhood sweethearts that never and almost were...and maybe still can be? You develop the characters expertly. The longing comes through, and the resignation to do the right thing. Best of all, the hope that not all is lost and the best may be realized even yet.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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This is a well told story of unrequited puppy love. Oh, the childhood sweethearts that never and almost were...and maybe still can be? You develop the characters expertly. The longing comes through, and the resignation to do the right thing. Best of all, the hope that not all is lost and the best may be realized even yet.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks so much for your very generous review and stars. I think we all have someone in our past that we wondered about, thinking about how life might have been different.
Comment from joann r romei
is this true, i hope so, it is the cutest story ive heard in a while. now about that diary, you would be arrested today if you wrote threats like that, lol
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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is this true, i hope so, it is the cutest story ive heard in a while. now about that diary, you would be arrested today if you wrote threats like that, lol
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Very true, but I do remember as a teen how filled with high drama and excrutiating detail and torture helped fuel my emotions.
How I wish there was a Danny out there for me, but sadly, no. This is all fiction. Thanks for the stars. Your review humbles me.
