Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "The Snake"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
26 total reviews
Comment from petalangela
You poem is hard hitting an alive ddrawing attention to abuse. I ready it with emphathy .
child abuse is horrific and even when your family are totally aware of it they they tuen a blind eye.
As though they feel it's your turn just deal with it. Child abuse is compounded by the actions of those who KNOW but but do nothing. Petal
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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You poem is hard hitting an alive ddrawing attention to abuse. I ready it with emphathy .
child abuse is horrific and even when your family are totally aware of it they they tuen a blind eye.
As though they feel it's your turn just deal with it. Child abuse is compounded by the actions of those who KNOW but but do nothing. Petal
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments. Appreciate them very much.
Comment from GE Parson
Hi new Friend,BWD,
First of all I am very impressed with your accomplishments.
Congratulations FOR YOUR BLESSED GOD GIVEN TALENT!
IT IS BEYOND SAD WHAT SATAN DOES TO LITTLE CHILDREN through MOM'S & DADS & OTHERS.
In my mind, the greatest child abuse (actually Baby abuse)
is killing babies before they are born. The world system calls it Abortion, God calls it murder.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Hi new Friend,BWD,
First of all I am very impressed with your accomplishments.
Congratulations FOR YOUR BLESSED GOD GIVEN TALENT!
IT IS BEYOND SAD WHAT SATAN DOES TO LITTLE CHILDREN through MOM'S & DADS & OTHERS.
In my mind, the greatest child abuse (actually Baby abuse)
is killing babies before they are born. The world system calls it Abortion, God calls it murder.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments. Appreciate them, and agree.
Comment from sibhus
So sad a tale in this wonderfully rhymed words. All to often this happens and no one seems to notice, or care. Some very good writing, and the fact that it originally only got two votes reflects the system on Fan and not your writing.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
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So sad a tale in this wonderfully rhymed words. All to often this happens and no one seems to notice, or care. Some very good writing, and the fact that it originally only got two votes reflects the system on Fan and not your writing.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
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That is why I said if you believe in your writing enough put it out there and let the Writers on this site prove its worth. Appreciate your comments.
Comment from Gunner Lil
This is truly great. You painted a complete picture story with words. Your next writing could show the trial of the son winning over the town.
Outstanding! Thank you!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
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This is truly great. You painted a complete picture story with words. Your next writing could show the trial of the son winning over the town.
Outstanding! Thank you!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2015
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Thanks for the suggestion. I may just have to do that.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem tells an awful story. Good job with the rhyme and flow of lines. Good use of occasional alliteration.
Good job of "sticking to your guns."
One thing that I would have done differently though is copy and past the poem without the contest references at the bottom. I was looking for the "I remember when" line. I thought a poem could not be posted twice.
Your topic is all to pervasive in society today. You did a good job with a tough subject.
I see nothing to change.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Your poem tells an awful story. Good job with the rhyme and flow of lines. Good use of occasional alliteration.
Good job of "sticking to your guns."
One thing that I would have done differently though is copy and past the poem without the contest references at the bottom. I was looking for the "I remember when" line. I thought a poem could not be posted twice.
Your topic is all to pervasive in society today. You did a good job with a tough subject.
I see nothing to change.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Such a sad poem but it is an all to true story that happens to many times in this world. I did not find any problems with your style. I also did not find any spag. Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Such a sad poem but it is an all to true story that happens to many times in this world. I did not find any problems with your style. I also did not find any spag. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Comment from Green Lake Girl
A very gut wrenching poem you've written. Just don't understand how certain people can be so incredibly evil and mean--and to their own. Can't blame the kid for plugging the man--he had it comin'. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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A very gut wrenching poem you've written. Just don't understand how certain people can be so incredibly evil and mean--and to their own. Can't blame the kid for plugging the man--he had it comin'. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Comment from LIJ Red
Does autobiographical preclude fiction or hearsay? I expected prose. Cops dread domestic disturbance calls. Bad things happen in families. I think your rhyming story rates five.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Does autobiographical preclude fiction or hearsay? I expected prose. Cops dread domestic disturbance calls. Bad things happen in families. I think your rhyming story rates five.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Bmwhsd...
One never knows how a work will be received. The contests can be brutal sometimes too.
Abuse is an ugly and growing problem. You depict it well. The snake gives me the heebie-jeebeis though. (*<*)
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Hi, Bmwhsd...
One never knows how a work will be received. The contests can be brutal sometimes too.
Abuse is an ugly and growing problem. You depict it well. The snake gives me the heebie-jeebeis though. (*<*)
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments. Appreciate them.
Comment from BlueMarble
Yes child abuse does happen more than we can be allowed to know. This is a wonderfully written poem about just how bad it can be, to the point that shooting the snake seems the only option.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Yes child abuse does happen more than we can be allowed to know. This is a wonderfully written poem about just how bad it can be, to the point that shooting the snake seems the only option.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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