Are You Serious?
The boss has gone too far this time...30 total reviews
Comment from Jacob Collins
I felt a sense of triumphant in the last line: "I quit." About time too I reckon how on earth could someone ask one of their employees to go in their place to the birth of their own child? I kept thinking throughout the piece, surely there has to be a logical explanation. A well written piece, I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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I felt a sense of triumphant in the last line: "I quit." About time too I reckon how on earth could someone ask one of their employees to go in their place to the birth of their own child? I kept thinking throughout the piece, surely there has to be a logical explanation. A well written piece, I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 30-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Jacob. I know it was an exaggeration, but I think many women feel that they are put on the back burner with workaholic spouses. And a lot of assistants feel they are living their bosses lives for them.
Comment from Louise G 23
Creative, well written, humorous and outstanding. I love the dialogue, it's believable and it's perfect.
I really enjoyed reading this and I was hooked the whole time.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Creative, well written, humorous and outstanding. I love the dialogue, it's believable and it's perfect.
I really enjoyed reading this and I was hooked the whole time.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Again, thank you so much for the beautiful review and the generous 6 star rating!
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yep, that would be going too far. Some people just have to learn when to say no. At least she got the right idea in the end. Love the picture. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Yep, that would be going too far. Some people just have to learn when to say no. At least she got the right idea in the end. Love the picture. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you for taking time to read the story, Cindy. I had fun thinking about just how far a boss could go before someone was ready to say that they had gone to far!
Comment from Debbie Noland
Good story, with lots of suspense and great dialogue. I love the line where Rebecca is changed when she gazes at the baby and "their souls meet" at some point between their physical bodies.
The story leaves us wondering at the end what happens to Sandra, but that doesn't bother me. Whatever the outcome, the dynamic of life has been forever changed for Rebecca, who makes the perfect response to her boss's final phone call.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Good story, with lots of suspense and great dialogue. I love the line where Rebecca is changed when she gazes at the baby and "their souls meet" at some point between their physical bodies.
The story leaves us wondering at the end what happens to Sandra, but that doesn't bother me. Whatever the outcome, the dynamic of life has been forever changed for Rebecca, who makes the perfect response to her boss's final phone call.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much, Debbie. The point of the story, really, was the change inside Rebecca. She grew as a person as she learned, maybe with a little tiny teacher, to make her own choices.
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Yes, you make that very clear here, that the dynamic character is Rebecca and the child the catalyst for her change/growth. Such a good story.
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Wow, thanks!
Comment from Spitfire
Seems her boss actually did her a favor. How can one know she doesn't want babies until she's held a newborn in her arms.
Shell Fish--LOL that's what the Pope calls those who don't want children -selfish.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Seems her boss actually did her a favor. How can one know she doesn't want babies until she's held a newborn in her arms.
Shell Fish--LOL that's what the Pope calls those who don't want children -selfish.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the review, Spitfire! Good play on names, only I didn't realise it when I put the name, and you are right, baby's win many hearts!
Comment from BlueMarble
Delightful story. I really like your talent for using conversation to develop the story. It moves along well and kept me reading. The one little glitch I noticed was the line "she took the wriggling mess of a baby, trying hard not to look at her." Later in the story you tell us that it's a boy. Or did I read it wrong? Great contest entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Delightful story. I really like your talent for using conversation to develop the story. It moves along well and kept me reading. The one little glitch I noticed was the line "she took the wriggling mess of a baby, trying hard not to look at her." Later in the story you tell us that it's a boy. Or did I read it wrong? Great contest entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Wow, I totally missed that, thanks. Thanks so much for the kind review!
Comment from Donovan
To say this is a wonderful story would not be right. It is however very intriguing and I like it. Was written well for a great point of view. It has a suspenseful open ending finish. In such a short piece you developed the characters and the dialogue seemed real.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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To say this is a wonderful story would not be right. It is however very intriguing and I like it. Was written well for a great point of view. It has a suspenseful open ending finish. In such a short piece you developed the characters and the dialogue seemed real.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your detailed and honest review!
Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. Seen no mistakes. Writing was interesting.
"My boss has gone too far this time,"Rebecca said, to her friend shelly on the phone.
Suggestion: Put a comma between said & to.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Excellent poem. Seen no mistakes. Writing was interesting.
"My boss has gone too far this time,"Rebecca said, to her friend shelly on the phone.
Suggestion: Put a comma between said & to.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the review and advice!
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thank you!
Comment from scd41
Everything in the story was going too far and that was in keeping with the contest writing prompt. The boss going too far in asking Rebecca to do such an odd job for him, Rebecca went too far in her cool response to the emergency and even Sandra went too far, unintentionally though, to deliver the baby in such an odd way. Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Everything in the story was going too far and that was in keeping with the contest writing prompt. The boss going too far in asking Rebecca to do such an odd job for him, Rebecca went too far in her cool response to the emergency and even Sandra went too far, unintentionally though, to deliver the baby in such an odd way. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much, hyperbole intended!
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day mate. That was a scream, I laughed all of the way through it. "I don't like babies" Hahahaha! What a great contest entry this is and I wish you luck, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Hahahaha! G'day mate. That was a scream, I laughed all of the way through it. "I don't like babies" Hahahaha! What a great contest entry this is and I wish you luck, cheers Fez
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank so much! What a wonderful review. Have a great day!
