Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Stranger"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from Jackarrie
Hi,
Great lyrics, I would love to hear them sung to music. The story line is so realistic, there have been women who has lost all their life savings to one of these type of con men.
well done, Mary
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Hi,
Great lyrics, I would love to hear them sung to music. The story line is so realistic, there have been women who has lost all their life savings to one of these type of con men.
well done, Mary
Comment Written 03-May-2015
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Comment from walbc
This is an excellent poem and I can hear it being sung to music. Your rhyming and rhythm are perfect. Your story is interesting and very well told. All in all an excellent read.
Warm regards, Wendy
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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This is an excellent poem and I can hear it being sung to music. Your rhyming and rhythm are perfect. Your story is interesting and very well told. All in all an excellent read.
Warm regards, Wendy
Comment Written 03-May-2015
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Comment from Megalips
To me this is one of the best lyrics you have written...The timing, the cadence and the rhyme are really terrific...you just float thru this. I like the repetition at the end (your first two lines) which seems to 'package' the piece...sum it up. The imagery of this strange, dark (demonesque) man coming into town is really well painted. Really good job!
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To me this is one of the best lyrics you have written...The timing, the cadence and the rhyme are really terrific...you just float thru this. I like the repetition at the end (your first two lines) which seems to 'package' the piece...sum it up. The imagery of this strange, dark (demonesque) man coming into town is really well painted. Really good job!
Comment Written 03-May-2015
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Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha from Hawaii,
I can see why your poem is an "All Time Best", it is so well written and flows along well. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Aloha from Hawaii,
I can see why your poem is an "All Time Best", it is so well written and flows along well. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
Comment Written 02-May-2015
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Comment from Lulube
Love these lyrics. A great poemly story, only can't hear the tunes. Made my own up to read by. lol great imagery. Great flow and rhymes.
lulube enjoyed this song
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Love these lyrics. A great poemly story, only can't hear the tunes. Made my own up to read by. lol great imagery. Great flow and rhymes.
lulube enjoyed this song
Comment Written 02-May-2015
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Brett, great job on this. Has the feel of a country song. I love the meter, which I believe is Australian (I call it Gertrude meter, but that's a long story).
duh (or duh duh) DUM duh duh duh DUM duh duh duh DUM duh duh duh DUM etc.
Found a tiny error to fix:
and, he's wanting you today. << Remove the comma.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Brett, great job on this. Has the feel of a country song. I love the meter, which I believe is Australian (I call it Gertrude meter, but that's a long story).
duh (or duh duh) DUM duh duh duh DUM duh duh duh DUM duh duh duh DUM etc.
Found a tiny error to fix:
and, he's wanting you today. << Remove the comma.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
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Comment from tfawcus
Your poem sings, even without the music. The rhythm is impeccable. The slant rhyme at the start sets a casual mood. Beware the man who appears to hold all the aces. Some are sure to have been hidden up his sleeve. Like him, you'll need a sleeve big enough to wipe away the tears.
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Your poem sings, even without the music. The rhythm is impeccable. The slant rhyme at the start sets a casual mood. Beware the man who appears to hold all the aces. Some are sure to have been hidden up his sleeve. Like him, you'll need a sleeve big enough to wipe away the tears.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
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Comment from Ekim777
Our poet has a good turn of phrase and he speaks with a suggestion of the understatement. So he sketches the difference between a man and a woman since time immemorial; the root cause of the pain in a relationhip between the two sexes. What can you expect from a man; "The cards are stacked against him and he's going to have to draw." The point is, love for a man is a thing apart. It is a woman's whole existence. I think our poet is something of a philosopher. I think he is fond of humanity. -Ekim 777
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Our poet has a good turn of phrase and he speaks with a suggestion of the understatement. So he sketches the difference between a man and a woman since time immemorial; the root cause of the pain in a relationhip between the two sexes. What can you expect from a man; "The cards are stacked against him and he's going to have to draw." The point is, love for a man is a thing apart. It is a woman's whole existence. I think our poet is something of a philosopher. I think he is fond of humanity. -Ekim 777
Comment Written 02-May-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support. Humanity, and its action, are a real good source of Country music.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Love the poem, Brett. In fact, I've liked everyone I've read of yours. This one is a real country and western song, and it rolls beautifully of the tongue as I read it aloud. It was a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra.
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Love the poem, Brett. In fact, I've liked everyone I've read of yours. This one is a real country and western song, and it rolls beautifully of the tongue as I read it aloud. It was a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brett Matthew West,
Nice piece of Song Lyrics Poetry meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Starting and End with these two lines: "There's a stranger on the back roads driving slowly into town.
He's a hundred miles from nowhere and the sun is going down." - Superb!
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Hello Brett Matthew West,
Nice piece of Song Lyrics Poetry meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Starting and End with these two lines: "There's a stranger on the back roads driving slowly into town.
He's a hundred miles from nowhere and the sun is going down." - Superb!
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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