Comment from Delahay

Excellent

This is a beautifully written portrait of the soothing effects of a beautiful sunset. You have written a lovely tribute to the colorful ending to a day.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015

Thank you for your appreciations of this scene and presentation. One of my favorites too, and so
glad you enjoyed and shared with your kind thoughts and visit. Sunsets are fantastic consolations.
a calming effect after a busy day. Best wishes always, Ronni

Comment from MelB

Excellent

This is well written with good flow, very tranquil, reminds me of being by the ocean and just listening to the waves crash into shore and taking in the saltwater air. Beautiful picture to complement the poem. Good use of alliteration.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015

Thank you for your kind and complimentary thoughts on this reflection and presentation, so very
pleased you enjoyed! Sunsets and seaside views always fascinate me, and this is one of my favorites too.
Have a soothing day or evening, best wishes, Ronni

reply by MelB on 28-Jan-2015

Thanks, you too!

reply by Anonymous Member on 28-Jan-2015

Thanks, you too!

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

Brilliantly beautiful! You had me in the first stanza.. one can't help but be transfixed with your word choices. Really good writing, I love this poem.. thanks for giving me such a good read!

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015

My pleasure dear! My elations over your awesome thoughts and comments are doing 'cartwheels'...LOL..
my grandest reward is your sheer pleasure in the reading of it and loving the 'take me away' effects.
Thank you...for sharing such gracious appreciations. Best always, Ronni

Comment from donaldcolson

Exceptional

Ronni: I like this melodic and peace giving poem. One suggestion would to mention one or two of those pastel colors. The specifics evoke more to your already evocative image. don

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015

Thank don, for your most constructive and inclusive thoughts and comments. Your point is well taken
on the adding of few pastel colors...and I sincerely appreciate you pointing it out. Glad you enjoyed
the presentation overall, and especially grateful, for the Extra Star...best wishes always, Ronni

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Ronnie

That title is so seductive ... simply beautiful and begs for your poem to be read.
Great presentation sets the mood ... I find myself almost floating out that window into those final rays. Sunset and dawn always magic in any form.

Your eloquent phrases and clever word use create perfect imagery and tone ... the reader feels the poem in their mind, body and senses you awaken. Just one suggestion and I may be grammatically wrong or you may not agree ...

"Softly
as dusk arrives, I am transfixed
by that gentle sigh ..." ..... just a suggestion, I've read a few times and I get 'stuck' at the "I am" after softly. Up to you.:))

I also believe you should have an apostrophe in "mind's yesterdays" to show the possessive.

Beautiful expressions in your phrasing ... I enjoyed very much. Warmest regards - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015

Dear Lovina!
Thank you ever so much for such an outstanding and totally comprehensive review, so sincerely
appreciated! I am so pleased you found it especially inviting to read, a poet's anticipation always.
Your generous appreciations and compliments most sincerely gratifying indeed. I note your
added thoughtfulness in the grammatical suggestions noted, and will attend to.
Lovely to have your visit and sharing always most instructive perceptions.
Many beautiful sunsets to you always....Ronni

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Softly
I am transfixed as dusk arrives
by that gentle sigh between day and night
near my window, as I gaze, as if
sinking into sunset
freeing my weary soul from day's strife
I love the sigh between day and night...beautiful
God bless

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015

Thank you for your kind appreciations of this presentation dear!
Blessings and beautiful sunset's to you always, ...Ronni

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Great description of dusk as a magical time of day. "Gentle sigh between day and night" is a lovely phrase. Colorful details about how the sky looks at dusk. "But a wink in the eye of glorious eternity"--that is a choice description. This time of day does give a feeling of peace, as it signals a time for rest and to think about another day. Beautifully done. judi

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015

Hi judi1
So pleased you enjoyed and appreciated this presentation with your lovely and affirming
thoughts and comments. Indeed, sunset is an especially tranquil time to savor and enjoy!
Lovely to have your visit, and sharing. Best wishes always, Ronni

reply by judiverse on 26-Jan-2015

Hi, Ronni. You're very welcome. judi

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

I live by the sea and every day, that's where my sun sinks. I like this tribute to sunset. Many herald the morning sunrise, but I find solitude in the resting sun.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015

Hello seaglass,,
How neat you have a sea view every day to welcome and enjoy! This is a sea view from my window at my
Calif. house, and indeed, as you well note, solitude is truly mesmerizing beneath the resting sun. So happy
this musing was especially relatable and enjoyable to you. Thank you for sharing it with your kind, visit.
Beautiful sunset's and best wishes to you always...Ronni

Comment from alf collier

Excellent

Hi Ronni. This poem kind of flows well without the rhyming. The words seem to be enough to tell your story. I enjoyed reading it, alf

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015

Hello,
Your enjoyment of this musing and presentation is truly gratifying, and I am so pleased
you shared it with your kind visit. Best wishes always, Ronni

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Wow! What beautiful language. A great flow throughout. Reads smoothly. The imagey is stunning. Your words are like a painting that I can see vividly. Especially like the last three lines:

"deepening peace flows in as I step out of
minds yesterdays
to silently, sweetly drawn breaths of tomorrow"

Great! Les

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015

Thank you. Les..for your most expressive thoughts and comments on this presentation,
and so very pleased you enjoyed it , and citing the great imagery, and those favorite lines!
May you too have many beautiful sunsets always, Ronni