Framed
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "A New Car"A thriller set in Washington
6 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Hanging out with the wrong crowd is trouble in the making. This is very well written and draws the reader into the story. Good imagery.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Hanging out with the wrong crowd is trouble in the making. This is very well written and draws the reader into the story. Good imagery.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Charlie thank you again for reviewing my writing. Your comments are always welcomed
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You're welcome, Bob. Charlie
Comment from TOMORAL
Oh my goodness, I wish this book was already published. I'm about to take a flight to Houston next week, and this would certainly be the book I would take. Look forward to your next chapter. Giving you my last six, this deserves no less. Action, action, action!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Oh my goodness, I wish this book was already published. I'm about to take a flight to Houston next week, and this would certainly be the book I would take. Look forward to your next chapter. Giving you my last six, this deserves no less. Action, action, action!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Thank you again. Perhaps you should get an ipod and download my other novel, The Ultimate Betrayal. I think it's almost as good. It's on Amazon for about $5 I think.
Don't you hate authors who self promote?
Your continued support is greatly appreciated
Comment from royowen
Dear Callin stealing cars is like shelling peas, I see Jess is becoming a little doubtful of Callin, but he says she's battle weary. I like the way he handled the salesman, pretty easy! It's still maintaining it's tension, I really like this style of story, it's really well told, well done. Bob, Blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Dear Callin stealing cars is like shelling peas, I see Jess is becoming a little doubtful of Callin, but he says she's battle weary. I like the way he handled the salesman, pretty easy! It's still maintaining it's tension, I really like this style of story, it's really well told, well done. Bob, Blessings Roy.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Roy, again you have boosted my self esteem, I fear I may become big headed if these fantastic reviews continue.
Thank you again. And if you get the chance, say one for Phillip Hughes
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I have already, very sad, and your welcome, Roy.
Comment from Jay Squires
Very imaginative and entertaining chapter, Bob. Calin is one sneaky dude! Uncanny. I believe Jess is picking up on his sense of personal aggrandizement.
The attack lacked subtlety, the knife came with a rush. [So close, Bob. Two more paragraphs and you'd be home free. A run-on sentence. After "subtlety", you need something other than a comma.
Your characters are really starting to blossom, Bob.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Very imaginative and entertaining chapter, Bob. Calin is one sneaky dude! Uncanny. I believe Jess is picking up on his sense of personal aggrandizement.
The attack lacked subtlety, the knife came with a rush. [So close, Bob. Two more paragraphs and you'd be home free. A run-on sentence. After "subtlety", you need something other than a comma.
Your characters are really starting to blossom, Bob.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Jay, the lady at our Post Office said delivery of the books generally takes about two weeks.
Thank you again for checking on the spag. Have made the change.
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I'll be keeping an eye out for it. Between now and Christmas the postman delivers even on Sunday. You are so thoughtful, my friend.
Comment from djsaxon
Strong chapter, bob. Terrific, dialogue-driven write that is action packed, always clear and never declamatory.
...nor Jess could verify,(.T) they both hoped the young reporter's...
...Canadian licence plate(s).
Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Strong chapter, bob. Terrific, dialogue-driven write that is action packed, always clear and never declamatory.
...nor Jess could verify,(.T) they both hoped the young reporter's...
...Canadian licence plate(s).
Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Thank you DJ for pinpointing those two errors, they are now corrected.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from JanetRussek
Just when I think it can't get any better, you come up with a new twist. Love it. Can't wait to read the next chapter. You certainly know how to tell a great story.
Warm Regards,
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Just when I think it can't get any better, you come up with a new twist. Love it. Can't wait to read the next chapter. You certainly know how to tell a great story.
Warm Regards,
Janet
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2014
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Janet, you sure know how to make this man happy. The next instalment will probably be on the weekend. I'm on night shift the next two nights and Jeanette's birthday is tomorrow. So I must keep her happy.
Thank you again for boosting this writer's self belief
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No Worries, you are amazing.
Happy Birthday, Jeanette.
Warm Regards, as always,
Janet
