Saving Jill
A quatrain poem about saving a life.34 total reviews
Comment from kintesiegel
this poem is sad but conveys an important message. It is hard to predict where it will go as the reader travels through it. But the end is a happy one with a moral to boot.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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this poem is sad but conveys an important message. It is hard to predict where it will go as the reader travels through it. But the end is a happy one with a moral to boot.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Agreed & thank you!! :) Jill P.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
This was quite a moving piece I must say.. It's flow was like rapids in a stream never hitting still water. Thanks for sharing this with us all and good luck in the contest
TK
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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This was quite a moving piece I must say.. It's flow was like rapids in a stream never hitting still water. Thanks for sharing this with us all and good luck in the contest
TK
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Wow!! Thank you!! Very much appreciated!!!
Comment from Genya
An excellent entry for the quatrain poetry contest. Filled with passion and emotion. Life is so hard when you are down there but sometimes we are the only ones who can save ourselves. I was always told...I was the conductor of my own orchestra. I was once the girl who wanted to fly left broken now grown and wanting to die. Loved these two lines. Such strong impact in these words. Genya
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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An excellent entry for the quatrain poetry contest. Filled with passion and emotion. Life is so hard when you are down there but sometimes we are the only ones who can save ourselves. I was always told...I was the conductor of my own orchestra. I was once the girl who wanted to fly left broken now grown and wanting to die. Loved these two lines. Such strong impact in these words. Genya
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you!! :) Jill P.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent Quatrain poem. Writing has lots of emotion.
FAR TO MANY YEARS
DROWNING IN MY TEARS
MY HEAD WASN'T CLEAR
I LIVED IN FEAR
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Excellent Quatrain poem. Writing has lots of emotion.
FAR TO MANY YEARS
DROWNING IN MY TEARS
MY HEAD WASN'T CLEAR
I LIVED IN FEAR
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks!! Much appreciated!! :) Jill P.
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Eric1
Hi JPilcher, This is a sad desperate poem my friend, I am reading it as though you and a friend are drowning in a river, you get saved and she doesn't, I hope I have got it right, Your poem is beautifully presented with good rhyme and rhythm, good luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Hi JPilcher, This is a sad desperate poem my friend, I am reading it as though you and a friend are drowning in a river, you get saved and she doesn't, I hope I have got it right, Your poem is beautifully presented with good rhyme and rhythm, good luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Actually Eric, you'll be glad to hear that it was only me drowning - but I'm not drowning anymore. ;) Thanks for the review. <3 Jill P.
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Well that's good news Jill, (I Think!) lovely poem though!
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You still aren't getting it, are you?! LOL!! ;)
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I have now!! LOL
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LOLOLOLOL!!!
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LOLOLOL!!
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi JP this is a well written piece of poetry in quatrain style. I think many of us have been in that dark place and we have to save ourselves. Good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hi JP this is a well written piece of poetry in quatrain style. I think many of us have been in that dark place and we have to save ourselves. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Agree & thanks for the review! Much appreciated!!
Comment from kiwijenny
I am so glad you saved yourself and dug down deep inside yourself to do it
We have to keep recharging,..so we won't get beyond worn down again
God bless
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I am so glad you saved yourself and dug down deep inside yourself to do it
We have to keep recharging,..so we won't get beyond worn down again
God bless
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Agreed & thanks for the review!! :) Jill P.
Comment from butterfly4265
I really like the entire presentation of this poem with the old photograph and coloring of the font and background. Your poem feels genuinely sad and heartfelt. The rhyming is good and I liked the easy, natural flow of each verse. Very much enjoyed, and the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I really like the entire presentation of this poem with the old photograph and coloring of the font and background. Your poem feels genuinely sad and heartfelt. The rhyming is good and I liked the easy, natural flow of each verse. Very much enjoyed, and the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much!! Very much appreciated!! :) Jill P.
Comment from c_lucas
One is always responsible for themselves. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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One is always responsible for themselves. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much!! Very much appreciated!!!
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You're welcome, JP. Charlie
Comment from Drew Delaney
What a really sad poem. Very well written and probably from the heart. If it's well written, one seems to know whether it did really happen.
I love your presentation with the picture, font and colouring. All very nice.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Drew xx
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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What a really sad poem. Very well written and probably from the heart. If it's well written, one seems to know whether it did really happen.
I love your presentation with the picture, font and colouring. All very nice.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Drew xx
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you & it's all very much from the heart!! ;) <3 Jill
