I'm But a Tiny Drop of Rain
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6121 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
So very true. Something I have thought myself. You have put it perfectly to verse. Beautiful personification. I should copy this and show it to people the next time they have a contest for it. They DON'T seem to know what it is here. (whine, whine...) Excellent everything and I can't even find a word that I would suggest to improve it. mikey
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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So very true. Something I have thought myself. You have put it perfectly to verse. Beautiful personification. I should copy this and show it to people the next time they have a contest for it. They DON'T seem to know what it is here. (whine, whine...) Excellent everything and I can't even find a word that I would suggest to improve it. mikey
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Mikey :-) I love personification. Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
I enjoyed your poem. It contains a great message for nobodies.
I love the personification of the drop of rain and the sea. The drop is feeling like a nobody... unimportant, overlooked perhaps.
"I'm but a tiny drop of rain,
and you, the sea so grand,
whose waves can range for miles and miles
and rage at your command." ... I like the pairing of "range/rage"
But the sea is like a wise ruler, knowing his very existence depends on tiny drops.
"I'm but the sea, who would have been
a parched and endless plain
if I had not received my life
from tiny drops of rain.
You may be but one tiny drop
and I the mighty sea,
but if it weren't for you, my friend,
then I would never be." ... the sea is humble. Gotta love that.
You can contemplate this on so many levels.
What about today's pop star, like Taylor Swift, for example? She'd be just another tinkling cymbal if not for her fans. She wouldn't have wealth or fame. Every single fan counts.
What about your President or my Prime Minister, or any other elected government official? Without each individual voter, what would they be doing?
What about a poet? Do they become published and famous without readers?
A lesson for the nobodies, and also for the somebodies.
Nicely penned!
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke
I enjoyed your poem. It contains a great message for nobodies.
I love the personification of the drop of rain and the sea. The drop is feeling like a nobody... unimportant, overlooked perhaps.
"I'm but a tiny drop of rain,
and you, the sea so grand,
whose waves can range for miles and miles
and rage at your command." ... I like the pairing of "range/rage"
But the sea is like a wise ruler, knowing his very existence depends on tiny drops.
"I'm but the sea, who would have been
a parched and endless plain
if I had not received my life
from tiny drops of rain.
You may be but one tiny drop
and I the mighty sea,
but if it weren't for you, my friend,
then I would never be." ... the sea is humble. Gotta love that.
You can contemplate this on so many levels.
What about today's pop star, like Taylor Swift, for example? She'd be just another tinkling cymbal if not for her fans. She wouldn't have wealth or fame. Every single fan counts.
What about your President or my Prime Minister, or any other elected government official? Without each individual voter, what would they be doing?
What about a poet? Do they become published and famous without readers?
A lesson for the nobodies, and also for the somebodies.
Nicely penned!
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Kimbob, thank you so much, my friend :-) I'm glad you like the personification and the message :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
Very nicely employed metaphor during this voting cycle!
Each drop of rain, each vote that's cast builds the superstructure
that buoys civilization and nourishes our sense of community. . .
I suspect that is not the inspiration you were drawing on -
but what can I say. . .that's the frame of mind I was in when
I read it :-)
Enjoyed it. . .in my own warped way ;-)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Very nicely employed metaphor during this voting cycle!
Each drop of rain, each vote that's cast builds the superstructure
that buoys civilization and nourishes our sense of community. . .
I suspect that is not the inspiration you were drawing on -
but what can I say. . .that's the frame of mind I was in when
I read it :-)
Enjoyed it. . .in my own warped way ;-)
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Leineco :-) It isn't what I was thinking of at the time, but I love that about poetry - that we each bring our own experience and perspectives to what we read, and the results are often just as fascinating as the thoughts the poet was thinking :-) Brooke
Comment from mshirachot
Brooke, such a lovely take on friendship with this poem about the raindrops and the endless ocean. It is so true that our friends make up who we are! My life would be SO bland and pale without the countless "rain-drop" souls He has blessed me with as friends!
Blessings!
Marsha
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Brooke, such a lovely take on friendship with this poem about the raindrops and the endless ocean. It is so true that our friends make up who we are! My life would be SO bland and pale without the countless "rain-drop" souls He has blessed me with as friends!
Blessings!
Marsha
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Marsha, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DALLAS01
Presenting this in the form of conversation, helps personalize it. It reminds us that if we feel we are insignificant, we must remember that we are all part of a greater whole, and are therefore indispensable.
Isn't it amazing that poetry can be a vehicle for such profound messages.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Presenting this in the form of conversation, helps personalize it. It reminds us that if we feel we are insignificant, we must remember that we are all part of a greater whole, and are therefore indispensable.
Isn't it amazing that poetry can be a vehicle for such profound messages.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Dallas :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
Ah, with your beautifully worded
quatrains you have captured the
the beauty of the sea that indeed
if it had not been for tiny drops
of rain, there would only be a
parched and endless plain.
Well done
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Ah, with your beautifully worded
quatrains you have captured the
the beauty of the sea that indeed
if it had not been for tiny drops
of rain, there would only be a
parched and endless plain.
Well done
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
The poem is beautiful, as is the picture. There are many tiny things in life which in unison are part of a larger picture. Thank God for those tiny drops of rain! Evi
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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The poem is beautiful, as is the picture. There are many tiny things in life which in unison are part of a larger picture. Thank God for those tiny drops of rain! Evi
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Evi, thank you for your encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Ekim777
Profoundly written with beautiful images. The sea might just be the source of all life and so we are fed an uncanny metaphor. It all seems so deceptively simple. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Profoundly written with beautiful images. The sea might just be the source of all life and so we are fed an uncanny metaphor. It all seems so deceptively simple. -Ekim777
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Ekim, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - Good personification of both the sea and the drop of rain. Very profound and you have shown how necessary each is to the other. This message could apply in many situations in life, namely, 'Every little helps'. A thoughtful write in good abcb rhyme. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke - Good personification of both the sea and the drop of rain. Very profound and you have shown how necessary each is to the other. This message could apply in many situations in life, namely, 'Every little helps'. A thoughtful write in good abcb rhyme. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Dorothy, thank you for your insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking charming piece of poetry beautifully depicting equality in power of tiny rain-drops and the mighty sea!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching with the theme.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking charming piece of poetry beautifully depicting equality in power of tiny rain-drops and the mighty sea!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching with the theme.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, RP :-) Brooke
