I Issued an Invitation
poem in mixed meter and abcb rhyme122 total reviews
Comment from Deborah Marie
Beautifully written with exceptional use of photo. Your writing has a light and airy way about it. Progression, rhythm and flow all are in tow. This makes reading it a pleasure. Clever use of wording and rhyming. Keep 'em coming, Deb
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Beautifully written with exceptional use of photo. Your writing has a light and airy way about it. Progression, rhythm and flow all are in tow. This makes reading it a pleasure. Clever use of wording and rhyming. Keep 'em coming, Deb
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Deb, for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from ruzu27
I was just imagining how it would be to have the sun with me. Phew, I think quite hot.
And here is what the sun is teaching us:
The hour has come when day is done,
and I, the Sun, must set.
The sun knows that after work comes rest. I think we sometimes forget this.
Well, I have learnt the lesson. For me it's time to go to bed.
An interesting poem, Brooke, I like it.
Ruth
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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I was just imagining how it would be to have the sun with me. Phew, I think quite hot.
And here is what the sun is teaching us:
The hour has come when day is done,
and I, the Sun, must set.
The sun knows that after work comes rest. I think we sometimes forget this.
Well, I have learnt the lesson. For me it's time to go to bed.
An interesting poem, Brooke, I like it.
Ruth
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Ruth, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
What a lovely poem of the sun. Wish we could do that. LOL. I especially miss the sun in the winter, as we all do I suppose, who do not have it every day. Lovely rhythm as always. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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What a lovely poem of the sun. Wish we could do that. LOL. I especially miss the sun in the winter, as we all do I suppose, who do not have it every day. Lovely rhythm as always. Miss Sally
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Miss Sally :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, I'm without words (and that's really not the best situation for someone whose nickname is the call-letters for a radio station). (LOL) But all kidding aside, Brooke, I never want to miss when you post. These three are simply jewels, but you always entertain or move me in some way or another. This particular poem will warm me throughout the gloom and cold that's coming - I doubt I'll forget the image of the sun promising to return to brighten your day!
"Garbed in gold" indeed, and what artwork too! Fabulous!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Well, I'm without words (and that's really not the best situation for someone whose nickname is the call-letters for a radio station). (LOL) But all kidding aside, Brooke, I never want to miss when you post. These three are simply jewels, but you always entertain or move me in some way or another. This particular poem will warm me throughout the gloom and cold that's coming - I doubt I'll forget the image of the sun promising to return to brighten your day!
"Garbed in gold" indeed, and what artwork too! Fabulous!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much, my gracious and generous and encouraging friend :-) Brooke
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Very much my pleasure! :)
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
Nice poem. I liked these lines best:
for since you asked politely,
I cannot turn you down.
I'll don my finest frocks for you,
my scepter and my crown."
Well done!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Nice poem. I liked these lines best:
for since you asked politely,
I cannot turn you down.
I'll don my finest frocks for you,
my scepter and my crown."
Well done!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Chi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke,
When I first began reading this I thought it might be in reference to the weather that is already breathing down your necks in the East. Lol. I can't believe summer has gone so quickly.
However, your beautifully rhymed and metered piece seems to describe our daily event that draws to its inevitable conclusion. Great imagination and delivery sealed the write, well done.
All my best, Bill
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke,
When I first began reading this I thought it might be in reference to the weather that is already breathing down your necks in the East. Lol. I can't believe summer has gone so quickly.
However, your beautifully rhymed and metered piece seems to describe our daily event that draws to its inevitable conclusion. Great imagination and delivery sealed the write, well done.
All my best, Bill
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) - yep, summer is just a dim memory at this point, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Just reviewing poems down the line this morning and how ironically funny. Seems like I found a dialogue between you and the sun. The rhythm is quite sound and the words don my finest frocks for you scepter and crown was my favorite line. I'm curious if the sun is being invited to stay out longer? Anyways, I'm looking forward to catching up on more of your work down the line..Cheers Brooke!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Just reviewing poems down the line this morning and how ironically funny. Seems like I found a dialogue between you and the sun. The rhythm is quite sound and the words don my finest frocks for you scepter and crown was my favorite line. I'm curious if the sun is being invited to stay out longer? Anyways, I'm looking forward to catching up on more of your work down the line..Cheers Brooke!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful reading, Benjamin :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
What an intriguing artwork you selected--she looks like an Egyptian sun goddess! I enjoyed your use of personification plus your abundant alliteration of "g's" and your perfect rhymes in these rhythmic quatrains. Warm hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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What an intriguing artwork you selected--she looks like an Egyptian sun goddess! I enjoyed your use of personification plus your abundant alliteration of "g's" and your perfect rhymes in these rhythmic quatrains. Warm hugs- Joan
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Joan - yes, I love this painting :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
This is lovely, thank you so for sharing! I like the rhyme and meter, the style is so delicious to read. A spectacular presentation!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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This is lovely, thank you so for sharing! I like the rhyme and meter, the style is so delicious to read. A spectacular presentation!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Bina, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
Again, your masterful use of personification. The sun comes across as classy and gracious. And you're right. The artwork is stunning and fits the poem beautifully. Her short stay made me think of Daylight Savings Time. :-)
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Again, your masterful use of personification. The sun comes across as classy and gracious. And you're right. The artwork is stunning and fits the poem beautifully. Her short stay made me think of Daylight Savings Time. :-)
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Spitfire, thank you so much :-) Brooke
