The Night When the Skeletons Woke
a poem of horror in anapestic meter138 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
This was my favorite stanza (loved the whole thing):
Then silent they slipped neath the ground whence they came --
where dark was their home and death staked its claim.
But may none forget once my words have been said,
this night when the skeletons woke from the dead.
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Hello,
This was my favorite stanza (loved the whole thing):
Then silent they slipped neath the ground whence they came --
where dark was their home and death staked its claim.
But may none forget once my words have been said,
this night when the skeletons woke from the dead.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
Comment from wpk0156
Awesome! I loved it! I am not a real lover of poetry, but this was great. There was an easy flow for a novice such as myself and a clear story jumped out. IMHO, this would make an unbelievable Halloween book, combined with more great artwork!!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Awesome! I loved it! I am not a real lover of poetry, but this was great. There was an easy flow for a novice such as myself and a clear story jumped out. IMHO, this would make an unbelievable Halloween book, combined with more great artwork!!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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wpk0156, thank you so much for your generous stars and very thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great artwork you've chosen for this fabulous poem. Really enjoyed this one Brooke, particularly like the line
the people of flesh met the bones from the ground.
Paints a good picture in the mind, fun read.
valda
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Great artwork you've chosen for this fabulous poem. Really enjoyed this one Brooke, particularly like the line
the people of flesh met the bones from the ground.
Paints a good picture in the mind, fun read.
valda
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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valda, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Treischel
Your thrilling horror write would definitely do Dean Kuch proud in is spooky ascent of the skeletons from the grave. I loved that touch of humor interjected as they were frustrated when the living folks ran away.
Nice Anapestic cadence where the weighted end alternated between lines. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Your thrilling horror write would definitely do Dean Kuch proud in is spooky ascent of the skeletons from the grave. I loved that touch of humor interjected as they were frustrated when the living folks ran away.
Nice Anapestic cadence where the weighted end alternated between lines. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Treischel - I've been carrying on my tradition of postin dark Halloween-inspired poems each October for six years, long before Dean ever joined the site. Brooke
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is an amazing horror tale spun effortlessly from beginning to end. I get thoroughly confused by all these meter regulations so go strictly by what it sounds like when read aloud and this is lyrical in the reading. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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This is an amazing horror tale spun effortlessly from beginning to end. I get thoroughly confused by all these meter regulations so go strictly by what it sounds like when read aloud and this is lyrical in the reading. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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thanks so very much, mystic angel :-) Brooke
Comment from GeorgieBoy
I especially liked 'the last remnants of breath'
Also, the line where the greetings were not cheering ones. It is unique and whimsical.
Even though I always enjoy your poems, this one to me, seems as if some lines are little wordy. I was stumbling over some words. I really admire your work, and this is a little different from the rest.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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I especially liked 'the last remnants of breath'
Also, the line where the greetings were not cheering ones. It is unique and whimsical.
Even though I always enjoy your poems, this one to me, seems as if some lines are little wordy. I was stumbling over some words. I really admire your work, and this is a little different from the rest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Georgie Boy, thank you for your feedback. perhaps it is the anapestic meter that is throwing you off. Brooke
Comment from trimple
HI Brooke
OO ERR! You sure know how to rattle the cages of ghastly story telling.
The great thing I found with this poem is how it builds up and hits a peek then winds down with the depths of dread.
A truly great piece of writing.
I really do love your more serious works. You excel on every level.
A real thriller!
Kind regards
trimple
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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HI Brooke
OO ERR! You sure know how to rattle the cages of ghastly story telling.
The great thing I found with this poem is how it builds up and hits a peek then winds down with the depths of dread.
A truly great piece of writing.
I really do love your more serious works. You excel on every level.
A real thriller!
Kind regards
trimple
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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trimple, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Magic Wand
How wonderful, and so fitting for Halloween. Dark and mysterious visions appear in my head, filling me with a tittering dread, as I read on and then smile as
I REACH THE END.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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How wonderful, and so fitting for Halloween. Dark and mysterious visions appear in my head, filling me with a tittering dread, as I read on and then smile as
I REACH THE END.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thanks so very much, Magic Wand, for your generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
Nice Halloween poem.Very well written.I liked this definition of death in these lines:
belonged to the bones of those long ago freed
from burdens of living confined by their skin,
a night for the skeletons once trapped within.
Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Nice Halloween poem.Very well written.I liked this definition of death in these lines:
belonged to the bones of those long ago freed
from burdens of living confined by their skin,
a night for the skeletons once trapped within.
Well done!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Chi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Too bad he's not still around, because none other but Vincent Price should read this out loud.
I was reminded of Poe, too. And Michael Jackson's 'Thriller', when the corpses all come out of the earth. LOL! (love it).
This sets a chilling mood. The story-like meter is perfect for the mood. Your choice of words and rhyme set the atmosphere. The writing style smacks of the more traditional/classic - old-fashioned, if you like - which perfectly suits the drama of the subject.
Really enjoyed the read, Brooke. Superb work.
Av
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Too bad he's not still around, because none other but Vincent Price should read this out loud.
I was reminded of Poe, too. And Michael Jackson's 'Thriller', when the corpses all come out of the earth. LOL! (love it).
This sets a chilling mood. The story-like meter is perfect for the mood. Your choice of words and rhyme set the atmosphere. The writing style smacks of the more traditional/classic - old-fashioned, if you like - which perfectly suits the drama of the subject.
Really enjoyed the read, Brooke. Superb work.
Av
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Av, thank you so much for your generosity and encouragement. One of my fantasies is that Price might rise from the dead just long enough to record some of my Halloween poems LOL :-) Brooke
