Truthful Jones, Greatest Babysitter
Short Story-World's Greatest Babysitter45 total reviews
Comment from Drew Delaney
Hi Mikey,
This is hilarious to say the least. Canada missing Bingo. Ha!
I like the photo you chose to enhance your babysitter. Egad! Glad I'm all grown up. LOL
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Hi Mikey,
This is hilarious to say the least. Canada missing Bingo. Ha!
I like the photo you chose to enhance your babysitter. Egad! Glad I'm all grown up. LOL
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from PatVallesMangan
Wow! You have some great characters! I love the names. There is much authenticity here and the character development is divine. I can see a whole story developing here. There are so many possibilities. Maybe something to think about? However, I totally enjoyed as is. God Bless! Pat
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Wow! You have some great characters! I love the names. There is much authenticity here and the character development is divine. I can see a whole story developing here. There are so many possibilities. Maybe something to think about? However, I totally enjoyed as is. God Bless! Pat
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from GWHARGIS
I love the name choices. Truthful, Khrushchev, and Canada. This was a funny yarn and now I have to wait for the second part? You're killing me! I like the displays of confusion, and indignation from the characters. It all came through in the dialogue and speech patterns. Great job. Gretchen
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I love the name choices. Truthful, Khrushchev, and Canada. This was a funny yarn and now I have to wait for the second part? You're killing me! I like the displays of confusion, and indignation from the characters. It all came through in the dialogue and speech patterns. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from Marisa3
Nice yarn you are spinning here, full of colorful mountain style language.
The characters are lively and fun and your story flows well.
I enjoyed this very much.
Marisa
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Nice yarn you are spinning here, full of colorful mountain style language.
The characters are lively and fun and your story flows well.
I enjoyed this very much.
Marisa
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Well I can certainly see where Truthful gets his name from!
A wonderful mixture of moonshine and malarkey and told with great gusto by the champeen baby-sitter himself.
I will keep an eye out for the next instalment.
Steve
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Well I can certainly see where Truthful gets his name from!
A wonderful mixture of moonshine and malarkey and told with great gusto by the champeen baby-sitter himself.
I will keep an eye out for the next instalment.
Steve
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
is that a recent photo taken of you mikey your very badly failed looking you should be taking your vitims happy halloween pal thumbs up excellent pen enjoyed the read
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is that a recent photo taken of you mikey your very badly failed looking you should be taking your vitims happy halloween pal thumbs up excellent pen enjoyed the read
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Now here I come along and read this absolutely hilarious tale when I don't have a six star to give it. Don't that beat all?
Where do I begin? Having to explain sitting. The box with the word wine on it. The Budweiser commercial with the bears being real, and her reaction to it. Vince McMahon coming with sleds full of wrestlers to convince bigfoot to be a wrestler. The fact that wrestling is real and.her reaction to that. All of these were simply priceless comedic moments. The only very minor complaint I have is the names. It took a second read through to get used to the names. Other than that a fantastic read, so funny.
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Now here I come along and read this absolutely hilarious tale when I don't have a six star to give it. Don't that beat all?
Where do I begin? Having to explain sitting. The box with the word wine on it. The Budweiser commercial with the bears being real, and her reaction to it. Vince McMahon coming with sleds full of wrestlers to convince bigfoot to be a wrestler. The fact that wrestling is real and.her reaction to that. All of these were simply priceless comedic moments. The only very minor complaint I have is the names. It took a second read through to get used to the names. Other than that a fantastic read, so funny.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Tpa
Although the story was very well-written, I found the beginning a slow starter. I found my interest perk with the sentence,'Now,I happened to be at the North Pole' I found you wavering your tale with grandpa Joe and those Aussies a bit confusing. I wish you luck.
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Although the story was very well-written, I found the beginning a slow starter. I found my interest perk with the sentence,'Now,I happened to be at the North Pole' I found you wavering your tale with grandpa Joe and those Aussies a bit confusing. I wish you luck.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, Loved it, Michael! Hope you get the next bit written quickly. You have turned a babysitting job into something totally off this planet. Great imagination, and I love the quirky dialect. Part one was superb, part two is what I'm waiting for!! :) Sandra
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LOL, Loved it, Michael! Hope you get the next bit written quickly. You have turned a babysitting job into something totally off this planet. Great imagination, and I love the quirky dialect. Part one was superb, part two is what I'm waiting for!! :) Sandra
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Nosha17
He might be a bit too big and scary to be a babysitter, for me, anyway. Very creatively written, with good touch of humour and descriptions. You have a good imagination. Great picture and enjoyable read. faye
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He might be a bit too big and scary to be a babysitter, for me, anyway. Very creatively written, with good touch of humour and descriptions. You have a good imagination. Great picture and enjoyable read. faye
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
