The Girl In The Window
A short writing about the day it all made sense...26 total reviews
Comment from granny goes viral
Yes this is very good. You must show up. Or don't complain if you missed life. I do not recall reviewing this. Fanstory takes up much of my life. As you can see it is after 3 am her. Oh well. Just another excuse to sleep late. Haha.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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Yes this is very good. You must show up. Or don't complain if you missed life. I do not recall reviewing this. Fanstory takes up much of my life. As you can see it is after 3 am her. Oh well. Just another excuse to sleep late. Haha.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2014
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I'm going to write a poem about when I was introduced to "Granny" the night (or morning!) before I flew out to Philly & both dedicate it to you & blame it on you!! LMAO.. ;)
Comment from Warren Rodgers
I know how personal this poem is for you and through your writing you have found and understanding of several things and the will to go forward and not repeat the mistakes that were a part of your younger life. I think it takes a special person to see that and consciously want to break that cycle. A child should not have to go through life with a father who "just does not show up" for his children. Unfortunately many men act this way and pass that behavior on to their children. A heart wrenching piece that offers hope for the future.
All the best,
Rodger
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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I know how personal this poem is for you and through your writing you have found and understanding of several things and the will to go forward and not repeat the mistakes that were a part of your younger life. I think it takes a special person to see that and consciously want to break that cycle. A child should not have to go through life with a father who "just does not show up" for his children. Unfortunately many men act this way and pass that behavior on to their children. A heart wrenching piece that offers hope for the future.
All the best,
Rodger
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Hope for the future is exactly right......... There is actually hope. Now, it's about breaking the cycle. Thank you!! <3 Jill P.
Comment from patcelaw
I had a father that never showed up for me. I only have 1 good memory of my dad. Also I didn't have a good relationship with my mother either, so I pretty much raised myself and had to determine in my mind what was right and wrong. made some bad choices, but when the chip were down I was a girl that did show when it mattered.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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I had a father that never showed up for me. I only have 1 good memory of my dad. Also I didn't have a good relationship with my mother either, so I pretty much raised myself and had to determine in my mind what was right and wrong. made some bad choices, but when the chip were down I was a girl that did show when it mattered.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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That's such a sad story - but with a good ending as well. I was actually much more fortunate, thank god. I'd be lost without my Parents likely. I also think that God only gives us as much as we can handle though, for the most part. The devil does walk amongst us, and he has a way of jacking stuff up a lot so...........
Thanks for the review as always. <3 Jill
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Thanks for your understanding, I try to forget the past, but sometimes even though I forgave my parents, I cannot forget some awful things, especially what my mother did to me when I was pregnant with the son I had to give up for adoption.
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Never forget the past. It's part of who you are today. It sucked, I can totally relate (not in the same way per se but I definitely can for sure). However, if we didn't live the years we've lived, we wouldn't be the people we are today. It's impossible. I, personally, already know I like you very much so........... ;) <3
PS= I have yet to read about your Mother (minus what I picked up in your "lefty" writing), but I already know that she was beyond blessed to have you. Unfortunately, she obviously didn't know that. That, and, I don't like her. ;)
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Let me just say, she tried twice to take my life when I was pregnant with the son I was pregnant with as a result of rape. All because I would not abort. The first time I awoke and she was holding a gun with 1 inch of my face right be4tween my eyes, and the second time she tried to trick my into taking an overdose of pills which would have caused my heart to explode in 4 minutes, had I taken them as instructed, according to doctors I have asked since that time and all agree. Was she trying to kill me? I don't know but it was scary.
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Ggggrrrrrrr... This pisses me off. THIS is when I question God. You know what I mean? THIS and other "parents" like that or even worse - THAT is when I question God. That's my right though.
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I did not question God in the situation with mom, as I feel God woke me when she was standing over me with the gun, as I have no recall of her saying anything to wake me. Becaause I was looking at her she could not pull the trigger, so I praise Gid for waking me at that moment. Then with the pills I give God praise for giving me the wisdom the drop those pills in the toilet.
Comment from Veeb
Very touching story within a poem. This nostalgic work has
good rhythm and flow. Great description: "along the way I forgot about me." Powerful. There is a deep message here, and I'm glad to have been able to read this. The picture compliments well. Thank you.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Very touching story within a poem. This nostalgic work has
good rhythm and flow. Great description: "along the way I forgot about me." Powerful. There is a deep message here, and I'm glad to have been able to read this. The picture compliments well. Thank you.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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No.. Thank you!! Very much appreciated!!
Comment from risktaker
I can relate to an inability to accept that someone you love is incapable of giving you what you want most from them,time and attention. I have wallowed in anger, frustration, and sadness, wasted many productive hours, going to a well with no water to give. I love the lesson and the message.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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I can relate to an inability to accept that someone you love is incapable of giving you what you want most from them,time and attention. I have wallowed in anger, frustration, and sadness, wasted many productive hours, going to a well with no water to give. I love the lesson and the message.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much... Very much appreciated. :)
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Comment from emrpoems
Effective use of repeated lines.
I am sure if fathers knew the pain they cause when they neglect their responsibility to their children they may do differently.
Love the picture that compliments the poem
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Effective use of repeated lines.
I am sure if fathers knew the pain they cause when they neglect their responsibility to their children they may do differently.
Love the picture that compliments the poem
Comment Written 07-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the review and the compliments on the picture. I used my daughter in my place. Not so much the little girl in the window anymore. ;)
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. One should show respect to those who are waiting for an appearance.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. One should show respect to those who are waiting for an appearance.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much & I couldn't agree more!!!
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You're welcome, JP. Charlie
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Comment from LIJ Red
Leaves me wondering about the guy who never showed up, as
your note mentions your dad. Was it he who missed a birthday, or some guy who may not have had a clue he was
supposed to show up? Fine poem.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Leaves me wondering about the guy who never showed up, as
your note mentions your dad. Was it he who missed a birthday, or some guy who may not have had a clue he was
supposed to show up? Fine poem.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thanks for reading & reviewing!! That's a very valid question too & why leave you wondering, right? Yes, that man (my Dad), he knew he was supposed to show up & he has come in/out of my life & my Sisters lives many of times over the years. You named it - he missed it. Graduations too. He did, however, show up to each of our Weddings though (& we all got married at my Parents/Mom's house even!). He showed up & he watched my Father/my Dad Dennis, who has fortunately been a part of my life since I was three years old, him walk all three of us down the aisle. Don't think I don't love my Dad though. I do & a lot. My Mom doesn't understand it & I don't ever expect her too either - but I do love that man too. :)
Comment from Ben Colder
Good tribute to you and your father. It takes some longer to mature than others just like fruit on various trees. Well done. I find no fault. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Good tribute to you and your father. It takes some longer to mature than others just like fruit on various trees. Well done. I find no fault. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much!!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, jpitcher, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about watching for a father that didn't come home and and the anger and disappointment that came from that
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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this is an excellent write, jpitcher, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about watching for a father that didn't come home and and the anger and disappointment that came from that
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much!! Very much appreciated!!
