Comment from Lovinia

Exceptional

Hi Brooke

I found the right poem for the contest ... and with time to vote.

An excellent entry and a clever concept. I never tire of poems about the seasons or change of seasons, and you have provided some wonderful phrasing and lovely imagery of the fame of autumn contrasted with the frozen white of winter. I love the selected image.

Great personification - "raiment", "fire of her garments", "Stripp her limbs bare and leave her to tremble with little to wear". Lovely colours from the artist's palette, "crimson and bronze", "golden and red".

A most enjoyable progression as winter struggles for supremacy. Love the last couplet, "steal the last leaf". An eloquent poem with the warm images of autumn to the bleakess of the cold chilled winter. Now I can wish you good luck in the contest. lol Warm Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Lovinia - I so appreciate the generous six stars and your kind contest encouragement :-) Brooke

reply by Lovinia on 06-Nov-2014

Congratulations on your win. Lovely imagery ... obviously we all enjoyed. Well done. You're amazing. Hugs - Lovinia xoxo

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Exceptional

This meets the contest requirements beautifully. Not much one can say other than STUNNING. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014

Thank you so very much for your gracious and encouraging comments and your generous six stars, my friend :-) Brooke

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 02-Nov-2014

You got my vote too as it was truly the cleanest write - your gift for choosing exactly the right word to convey the most impact is amazing.

Comment from Warren Rodgers

Exceptional

Hi Brooke,
It'll be here soon, that old man in white! Action news at every Wawa in five counties lol. Terrific entry for the contest in smooth 11 syllable anapestic meter with headless catalexis! Nice personification, rhyming and alliteration. Should way up there in the vote tally. Good luck
All the best,
Rodger

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014

Thank you so much, my gracious, encouraging and generous friend :-) Brooke

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

The transition from autumn to winter is beautifully portrayed here.Autumn all dressed up in gold and bronze is cruelly shorn off her colour to bare shivering starkness. I enjoyed this nature poem and the idea that winter is stealing the leaves from autumn.All the best for the contest

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014

Thank you, Sanku, for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from kittykatnoel

Excellent

Nicely written, I was wondering if there should be a "so" in front of "bold" in the 8th line from the top. It seemed like it needed another syllable. Thank you for writing.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

thanks for your feedback, Kitty - I am using the two syllable pronunciation of cruel, like you hear in the lyrics of Good King Wenceslas :-) Brooke

Comment from Deborah Marie

Exceptional

Beautiful contest entry. Your words flow nicely. Lovely use of descriptive words throughout producing breath taking imagery. Lovely photo too... God Bless and good luck in the contest, Deb

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Thank you, Deb, for your encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from JudyS

Excellent

Brooke, I really enjoyed reading this one. Fall is my favorite season, next to winter. Excellent job on this.Best of luck in the contest. Judy

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Judy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To adewpearl,
An alarming amount of withered leaves encompass the grounds and with it we shake and tremble at the sub-zero temperatures that dominate most of a 6 month span. Therefore, making for a very long and unwelcoming winter blues that go with it.
Charlene

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Thank you so much, Charlene :-) Brooke

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello adewpearl, Brooke, A timely poem. It seems that many of our FanStorians are already feeling the bleakness of winter. Of special note:

The winds of the winter will strip her limbs bare
and leave her to tremble with little to wear
just when she most needs to be kept from the cold
and all of its forces so cruel and bold.

(That's ol' man winter and he's blowing hard.)

Very good descriptive writing and rhyming flow. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Thank you so much, LateBloomer, for your most thoughtful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from Kaila Mari

Exceptional

I don't know much about anapestic meter but this poem reads with such rhythmic cadence throughout, it must be in the right format and structure. I am a tree lover. The imagery used here is fantastic and creates a vivid cold winter picture. Another great piece written by an outstanding writer. Enjoyed it from beginning to end!

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Thank you so much, Kaila Mari :-) I so appreciate your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke