Paradise
Island for sale20 total reviews
Comment from INtity
Nice poem, it has the perfect words to go along with the images. The description of the subject is handled poetically and creatively.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
Nice poem, it has the perfect words to go along with the images. The description of the subject is handled poetically and creatively.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thank you INtity for the awesome review. God Bless!
Comment from adewpearl
Creative pairing of illustration and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
I like the vivid picture you create and the great humor in that final line, that breaks the mood of the first two lines so well :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
Creative pairing of illustration and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
I like the vivid picture you create and the great humor in that final line, that breaks the mood of the first two lines so well :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thank you young lady! I am currently reading some of your fine pieces. What an inspirational site this is.
God Bless!
Comment from James Dooney
Lol what is the point if there is no beer !!!! Come on man ! Hey at least your work is good ! Seriously, I like this - its short and sweet !
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
Lol what is the point if there is no beer !!!! Come on man ! Hey at least your work is good ! Seriously, I like this - its short and sweet !
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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LOL! Thank you James for the awesome review. I agree, there must be a clause somewhere that states, "BEER WILL BE PROVIDED!"
God Bless!
Comment from kiwijenny
Hello was this inspired by a corona beer add?
Ha ha ...fifty square feet of heaven....
Beer not included....
Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
Hello was this inspired by a corona beer add?
Ha ha ...fifty square feet of heaven....
Beer not included....
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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LOL! More along the lines of work related stress, needing a vacation and the love of beer. Thank you Kiwi.
God Bless!
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I know we are too busy too vacation ...sigh
Comment from PatVallesMangan
A lovely 5-7-5 poem that meets all of the requirements. It gives us a lovely setting and a great picture with a nice laugh in the end! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
A lovely 5-7-5 poem that meets all of the requirements. It gives us a lovely setting and a great picture with a nice laugh in the end! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thank you Pat, for the great review and stars. God Bless!
Comment from TAB_that's me
I don't need the beer but would sure like to have a paradise island:) Great 5-7-5 for the contest - good luck to you.
Teresa
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
I don't need the beer but would sure like to have a paradise island:) Great 5-7-5 for the contest - good luck to you.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thank you Teresa for another awesome review. God Bless!
Comment from mermaids
Beer not included is a clever last line. Paradise does not have to include beer. Your haiku form creates a clear image and then surprises the reader.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
Beer not included is a clever last line. Paradise does not have to include beer. Your haiku form creates a clear image and then surprises the reader.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thank you mermaids for another awesome review. God Bless!
Comment from ravenblack
if beer is not included, than it simply cannot be called paradise. and what about women? fifty square feet with a soccer ball for company - no wonder it is for sale.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
if beer is not included, than it simply cannot be called paradise. and what about women? fifty square feet with a soccer ball for company - no wonder it is for sale.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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LOL! Thank you ravenblack for another awesome review. God Bless!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Perfect 5/7/5 for the contest entry. Good use of metaphor in lines 1 and 2. Amusing line 3. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
Perfect 5/7/5 for the contest entry. Good use of metaphor in lines 1 and 2. Amusing line 3. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you Dorothy for another amazing review, I always look forward to hearing form you.
Don't forget to vote.
God Bless!
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words portray the message well island for sale excludes beer
good visual
cheers smoothiecool
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words portray the message well island for sale excludes beer
good visual
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you Smoothiecool for an excellent review and generous star count. I need that island, if only for a day LOL!
Don't forget to vote!
God Bless!
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oh yeh... know the feeling some days just a private get away
have a blessed day..SC >.Faye