Two little boys.
Twins pulling the wool over their mama's eyes.36 total reviews
Comment from Zinnia48
This is a precious poem about two precious boys. I hope that you can share this with them someday! The story certainly resonated as true ( I have a 7 yo grandson). You told the story with humor, and packaged it in lovely rhythm and rhyme. Good luck with the contest! Caroline
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
This is a precious poem about two precious boys. I hope that you can share this with them someday! The story certainly resonated as true ( I have a 7 yo grandson). You told the story with humor, and packaged it in lovely rhythm and rhyme. Good luck with the contest! Caroline
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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I read it to them last evening, there sister really enjoyed it! They just asked where the candy was LOL. God Bless!
Comment from rjuselius
haha. lol. this is such a sweet and light-hearted piece of poetic art from an unique point of view! you should do well in the contest!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
haha. lol. this is such a sweet and light-hearted piece of poetic art from an unique point of view! you should do well in the contest!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you rebekka, your review are always awesome! God Bless!
Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. A true life happening. Understood it.
HOLDING OUT THEIR LITTLE HANDS
THE TWINS ASKED FOR A TREAT
MAMA SHOCK HER HEAD THEN SAID
"NOT TILL YOU EAT"
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
Excellent poem. A true life happening. Understood it.
HOLDING OUT THEIR LITTLE HANDS
THE TWINS ASKED FOR A TREAT
MAMA SHOCK HER HEAD THEN SAID
"NOT TILL YOU EAT"
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you thee-name for the excellent review. God Bless!
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THANK YOU!
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. This is so cute and no doubt true. Halloween brings out the worst of the candy fever...but i am with the boys..I love my candy and who needs dinner.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
Hi. This is so cute and no doubt true. Halloween brings out the worst of the candy fever...but i am with the boys..I love my candy and who needs dinner.
padumachitta
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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LOL! Thank you padumachitta for another awesome review. I love the sweets myself!
God Bless!
Comment from adewpearl
what a glorious photo :-)
good use of enjambment
good use of alliteration and consonance
vivid visuals
listen to me, man - add comma for direct address
beneath the cushion's - drop the apostrophe
good dialogue in a cute story of temptation :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
what a glorious photo :-)
good use of enjambment
good use of alliteration and consonance
vivid visuals
listen to me, man - add comma for direct address
beneath the cushion's - drop the apostrophe
good dialogue in a cute story of temptation :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you Brooke for another awesome and most helpful review. These sweet kiddo's in the photo are my great niece and nephew and their mother's name is Brooke as well. God Bless!
Comment from Poetic Diamond
Lol...This was simply delightful, and what a clever use of temptation. Especially with Halloween right around the corner. I loved the rhythm and rhyme. Thank you for sharing, and best of luck in the contest. ~Vikki
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
Lol...This was simply delightful, and what a clever use of temptation. Especially with Halloween right around the corner. I loved the rhythm and rhyme. Thank you for sharing, and best of luck in the contest. ~Vikki
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you Vikki for the most inspiring review and excellent star rating. I am so happy you enjoyed.
Feel free to vote!
God Bless!
Comment from granny goes viral
This is so adorable. So are those kids. Twin boys. Oh my.
Candy, ah such temptation. This is a really adorable poem about temptation. Kids and candy.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
This is so adorable. So are those kids. Twin boys. Oh my.
Candy, ah such temptation. This is a really adorable poem about temptation. Kids and candy.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you granny goes viral for the awesome review and stars. These little fella's are a trip, they get themselves into a mess at times.
If you liked it please feel to vote.
God Bless!
Comment from words
You left me smiling with this one.
I have twin grandchildren. A boy and a girl and they do get themselves up to a lot of mischief.
Never a dull moment with twins in the house. Ours love to take all things electrical apart.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
You left me smiling with this one.
I have twin grandchildren. A boy and a girl and they do get themselves up to a lot of mischief.
Never a dull moment with twins in the house. Ours love to take all things electrical apart.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Never a dull moment is right! Both boys are as equally mischievious LOL. Thank you so much for the awesome review.
If you liked the piece plese feel free to vote.
God Bless!
Comment from nancyjam
cute story with great rhyming.
Love the boys hiding their food under
the cushions!
Candy really is a temptation to children!
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
cute story with great rhyming.
Love the boys hiding their food under
the cushions!
Candy really is a temptation to children!
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you Nancyjam for another awesome review. They are a handful for sure!
If you liked the piece please feel free to vote!
God Bless!
Comment from amahra
The picture of the little girl and twin boys are really precious. Loved the poem story. Thought it was cute. Thought the rhyming and rhythm of the poem was great.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
The picture of the little girl and twin boys are really precious. Loved the poem story. Thought it was cute. Thought the rhyming and rhythm of the poem was great.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much amahra! They are a handful those 3 kiddo's. Thank you for the great review and stars.
Please don't forget to vote if you liked it!
God Bless!