The Fairies of Fernwood Forest
a story poem133 total reviews
Comment from M. Kari Barr
Very cute poem. Lovely imagery of the fairies sprinkling the sky with dust.
I would have given it a six star rating, but for me some of the lines were not as smooth as others. But that was reading silently, when I tried it out loud that did improve it. The use of congregate seemed overdone, unless a word is meant to be noticed for the theme complex words tend to stand out.
Nevertheless the poem is sweet.
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Very cute poem. Lovely imagery of the fairies sprinkling the sky with dust.
I would have given it a six star rating, but for me some of the lines were not as smooth as others. But that was reading silently, when I tried it out loud that did improve it. The use of congregate seemed overdone, unless a word is meant to be noticed for the theme complex words tend to stand out.
Nevertheless the poem is sweet.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2017
Comment from MaBaker
This was a lovely piece. I enjoy poetry though I don't write myself I like well written poetry and this was well written. It jogged along at a good clip which kept you reading. No typos that I could see. Regards Mabaker.
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This was a lovely piece. I enjoy poetry though I don't write myself I like well written poetry and this was well written. It jogged along at a good clip which kept you reading. No typos that I could see. Regards Mabaker.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
Comment from dragonpoet
Very smooth telling of a story of a smart leader who turned a doomsday into a new day. It shows hope can come from the smallest of things and grow to save a world.
The repition in the sixth stanza is a good bridge from bad to good.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Very smooth telling of a story of a smart leader who turned a doomsday into a new day. It shows hope can come from the smallest of things and grow to save a world.
The repition in the sixth stanza is a good bridge from bad to good.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 10-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Joan, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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Any time, Brooke.
Merry Christmas.
Joan
Comment from michaelcahill
This is wonderful. You'd be surprised how often I read one of yours, review it and then rush to word while the mood still strikes me and write something in the same vein. I bet I'm not the only one! This flowed so perfectly. Is this anapestic? Seems to be or a combination. Whatever it is, it is sooooo smooth and fun to read out loud. Wonderful. mikey
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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This is wonderful. You'd be surprised how often I read one of yours, review it and then rush to word while the mood still strikes me and write something in the same vein. I bet I'm not the only one! This flowed so perfectly. Is this anapestic? Seems to be or a combination. Whatever it is, it is sooooo smooth and fun to read out loud. Wonderful. mikey
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Mikey - there are anapestic feet in this one, but I would consider it more mixed meter :-) Brooke
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I love this delightful children's poem.
Fairies have caught my interest always and this is cleverly written in a magical style which children will love to read, or have read to them.
Fantasy stories are enchanting and all the more so when written in poetry so rich in imagery and magic.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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I love this delightful children's poem.
Fairies have caught my interest always and this is cleverly written in a magical style which children will love to read, or have read to them.
Fantasy stories are enchanting and all the more so when written in poetry so rich in imagery and magic.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Seken, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from bookwormgirl
I sense this poem took a good time to create.
Felt the sense of mystical and magical
i like this comparison -
the cloud as black as ravens' wings
very well written :)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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I sense this poem took a good time to create.
Felt the sense of mystical and magical
i like this comparison -
the cloud as black as ravens' wings
very well written :)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Bookwormgirl, for your generosity - yes, lots of time! :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
The thought occurred to me as I read this, that we could use a little of that fairy dust in the world today! Of course, the fairy dust worked because they believed it would and perhaps that's the problem...our belief system is lacking these days.
Loved the alliterative phrase of "Fairies of Fernwood Forest and the solid rhyme and meter you used in the delivery of this story...it was a pleasure.
My best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Hello Brooke,
The thought occurred to me as I read this, that we could use a little of that fairy dust in the world today! Of course, the fairy dust worked because they believed it would and perhaps that's the problem...our belief system is lacking these days.
Loved the alliterative phrase of "Fairies of Fernwood Forest and the solid rhyme and meter you used in the delivery of this story...it was a pleasure.
My best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Bill, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem:-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
I think that this is a great story poem. Reading it was a treasure and treat. And the message within the story holds true - we can make our own light.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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I think that this is a great story poem. Reading it was a treasure and treat. And the message within the story holds true - we can make our own light.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Evi, I appreciate your generosity and encouragement :-) Brooke
Comment from pluviophile79
Very nice work. You make the poem really easy to imagine. I can just picture the forest and all the fairies in their kingdom. Great job.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Very nice work. You make the poem really easy to imagine. I can just picture the forest and all the fairies in their kingdom. Great job.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Pluviophile :-) Brooke
Comment from NicciFaye
Brooke - this is wonderfully beautiful and imaginative. Your poems are always simplistic in thought yet innocent as a child's imagination. I loved this!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Brooke - this is wonderfully beautiful and imaginative. Your poems are always simplistic in thought yet innocent as a child's imagination. I loved this!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Nicci, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
