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Hey, now I'm listening.

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32 total reviews 
Comment from justafan
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Brilliant writing and with such conviction. I applaud your fortitude in facing what life has thrown at you. I have read but not reviewed some of your other works and you are a very multi-talented author. This gives me an insight as to the man behind the words. Good luck in your recovery and I will be following your work from now on :).

Always justafan,
Missy

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2015


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
    Hi Missy,
    thank you for revisiting this story and deeming its worth to an exceptional rating you have given it... and I also greatly appreciate you reading some of my other writes... sorta makes me feel good to know someone is reading... smile))))))))).

    Well, this story of mine is a continuing lesson to a physical attrition... it took seven or so months to get back to walking and a start back to swimming 14 or so laps in the ocean pool... it actually was starting to look good to feel half normal again... well that's until I started with a new physiotherapist and he upped my exercise regime... it took two weeks for me to experience the violent back spasm that put me back to the very start... so for the past three months, it's been 83 step circuits of the inside of my house until the pain or numbness stops me from walking... and then it's my in between fanstory time... good news is, the last week has seen me getting outside and able to walk around the block... fingers and everything else crossed that this is the start... Shhhhhhhhh(((((((((((((, I'll say it quietly... ya' just never know?

    Truly, thank you Missy, this review and your comments have put a brighter hue on my day.

    With our thoughts we create,
    the way forward,
    James vx's.
reply by justafan on 26-Jul-2015
    :) steady as you go
reply by Anonymous Member on 26-Jul-2015
    :) steady as you go
reply by Anonymous Member on 26-Jul-2015
    :) steady as you go
Comment from amanda98653
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is one of the best non-fiction stories I've ever read. Realistic and heartfelt, it captures the essence of perseverance, honesty, and kindheartedness.

"Every action has a reaction. Everything we do or think, takes us in a direction that may cause these so called accidents. Not an accident at all--just bad judgement or bad choices."-- very wise and true.

"Introspection? No, I can't ever go there; this is where self-doubt, anxiety and depression are waiting in highjack to the future of my recovery and progression."-- I admire your ability to self-reflect. This world would've been a better place if all people were able to realize their mistakes and take steps toward self-improvement.

"There is but one option--to look forward."-- you're absolutely right, James. We all have to move on.

Are you feeling better? I know the healing process is slow, but I really do hope that things are getting better.

Hugs and respect

Sis :)

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2014


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2014
    Hi Sis,
    this review, these wonderfully kind words, have started my day off with more pleasure than you could possibly know... you reinforced me with my own words!

    Woke up this morning in more pain than what I would have liked. I was getting so much better and had an unfortunate miss-step going down to the ocean pool and jarred my back... well that was about a month ago now, but it is challenging me all the way... lost my head and direction for the last week or so... that's how important and fortuity timed your review is... and to pick this story to review, well that just reinforces all the very special things I know about you.

    Maybe you knew I needed a pep talk, maybe not? No matter your keen intuitiveness has worked its magic... time to get my head back in the game... Thank you!

    Your hugs and respect are sent back ten-fold!

    With our thoughts we create,
    a positive outlook,
    James xx
Comment from Saucey
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Wow this was one of those WOW moments, I am so proud of you James, I love the humility and honesty of this beautifully written piece. I believe that everything will be restored (body) I have learn that it is through dark times that the better you shines through for the world to see, wonderful story. Your story, you are blessed. Thanks for sharing my friend.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
    Hi Sheri,
    thanks so much for your kind encouraging sentiments in this exceptional review... I, am blessed... and in so many ways... the light moments in my dark times and the friends who open their hearts with no boundaries or limits... yes, you are at the top of the list... smile)))))).

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James xx
reply by Saucey on 22-Oct-2014
    Don't you dare feel sorry for yourself. No pity parties Now watch the World Series my hometown is in it the Kansas City Royals:)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
    Is that what it sounds like? Nah, I'm doing just fine... we don't get the baseball on free TV, just the NFL.
reply by Saucey on 23-Oct-2014
    No baby dear your story did not sound like that I'm just saying.....LOL your story gave me a better idea of what and how, there's a silver lining behind every dark cloud, I'm just saying
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
    I love you just saying, it's nearly like I can hear your voice... and yes, if we choose, there is always a silver lining to every situation... which is great for me, as there seems to be dark clouds trying to visit without invitation at every change of the weather and my cheeks are getting puffed-up and tired from trying to blow them away... smile))))))))... love you lady 'S' xx.
reply by Saucey on 23-Oct-2014
    I love you as well and hear me blow with you....
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
    Smile)))))))))) xx.
Comment from Starlight's Edge
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi, James,
This is a piece that one who reads it can feel that you poured your soul into it. There is a message too that many can relate in different ways, I think. I do relate. And I think I was in need to read this. I need to go to the GP and never go, I always think I am kind of invincible, there is always things to do, don't have time to go to the GP, and think things will pass as always, lol. I think you can relate to what I am saying.

But yes, there is the thing you said. We feel, we know, even though we deny it, that the pain is not like the other times, we feel there is something serious this time, the pain is just stronger and different.

One thing you said so right - Be kind to yourself. That should be everyone's first rule. But then I understand how much it takes a mind and soul that is so wild, free, likes to go beyond boundaries, etc, to take in the message.

This is such as inspiring piece. I could feel every word, your experiences, and then the episode with the boy. How stressful and awful this must have been for you. I am glad everything turned okay with the young boy.

I believe you are in the good track. About future mistakes, more "again's", you can only do your best. I believe there is a reason for everything. You might already know yours, or you may still need to find out.

I wish you all the best, and that your health improves in every possible way.

Now, I found this piece overall well written.

A few suggestions:

when you use this -- put an hyphen instead.

; - be careful with the overuse. Not all, but in most cases you used it, a period could have been used instead.

word accident conjure up? (To-remove) call it an undesirable or an unfortunate happening, without design or just by mere chance; (?) no (No.), I can't digest
I whole-heartedly convinced myself, if my thought created my reality; (,) would the acknowledgement

Obviously I'm a very slow learner. What, did I think (?) (That) I was invincible or something?

until the end game (game ends sounds better) to know the finality of the story.

Click-click-click-click-click--snap. Wrong move, (! - to add impact) the (The) rope gave way

I did the usual, (.) rolled the arm around to see if it was still working, (and) move(d) the neck back and forward.

if not by name (-remove) (,-add) then by face.

no ambulance was forth-coming; One (one) of the major draw-backs,






 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
    Hi Starlight,
    Yes, I can relate to what you're saying, it is my story to a tee, but that has to change... be kind to yourself... it all starts from there.

    Thank you so much for this amazing review and rating... so appreciative... thank you for the improvements, took every suggestion except for the 'end game' just had to keep 'me' with that one... smile))))))).

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James xx
reply by Starlight's Edge on 23-Oct-2014
    You are welcome.
    Yes, I thought it would be your story :)
    Regarding the suggestions, please, either it is me or anyone suggesting anything or making any correction, follow your writing style first of all. And follow your instinct too.
    I had people telling me to remove the purple prose. Most of Avon authors write in purple prose and that is what the publisher wants to see. Doesn't matter your writing style, there will be a publisher who is looking for it.
    There were many people here that mentioned to be editors, others who were good writers too, and in both cases they were wrong. And recently I had someone saying the chapters needed a lot of editing and to be rephrased. But the phrases I used did not come from my imagination, they were found in books I read, and my editor then almost did not touch the chapter.
    First, trust in yourself and what makes sense to you. And when you read a lot of successful published books, you will know what makes sense. I am glad I do it, otherwise I would have followed advise that was not correct. Fanstory should be a hobby to enjoy, not to learn. When you want to learn and succeed, you will read from the best.
Comment from Neonewman
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What an inspiring piece you have so well-crafted. I found myself, many times during this read. I have been in similar position on both ends of this spectrum. God Bless!

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
    Hi Neonwman,
    thank you for dropping by with this fine review and rating, most appreciated friend... let's hope we've bot found a safe middle ground?

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
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Hi I enjoyed reading your story, and I found it interesting and quite amusing. The picture blends well with the story. No need to suggest changes. Thanks for sharing.Mary

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
    Hi Mary Ann,
    thank you for your kind review and rating... most appreciated.

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James xx
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

An amazing read, my dear James. Poignant and heartfelt - I felt privileged to be able to share some of your life's journey, your pain and, most of all, your courage.

I am inspired by your story, my friend. You are the epitome of the human spirit.

I'm so glad the little boy survived.

Hugs,

Av

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
    Hi Avril,
    this review really lifted my spirits to my determination to proceed in a forward direction, not only in writing, but in life... these cultivated experiences, although debilitating, take me to another level of consciousness to what I know I must achieve to become the person I want to be.

    Thank you so much for amazing response to my story... I really appreciate it... and yeah, I'm supper glad the young boy survived... I see him riding around town on his razor scooter, like nothing ever happened... on a sad note, his step dad was diagnosed with a terminal cancer not long after his accident, he's still hanging in, but just... Russell is the same age as me (53)... it really puts thing into perspective.

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James xx
reply by Cumbrianlass on 21-Oct-2014
    I haven't forgotten about the book. The paperback proof is being 'proofed'! Once it has passed muster, I shall be sending a copy your way.

    Av
    xx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
    Thanks Av, I didn't think you had... let me know where to send the cheque... the book will be treasured... smile))))).
    James xx.
Comment from dennis0530
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Might Lao Tzu's words be modified to read:
When I let go of what I was
I become what I am

It seems that by your choices and actions, you have altered your body.

Taking for granted that choices and actions are separated from happenings, results, good or bad still comprise the outcome. For better or for worse we are never sure of what will finally result.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
    Hi Dennis,
    thank you for your very philosophical review, it is most appreciated... no modifications to Tzu's words, they are and always will be what they are... pretty much like our lives and the circumstances we find ourselves in... take care my friend.

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James.
Comment from adewpearl
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a thoughtful story of self examination and reflection
good use of questions to intensify the narrator's emotion and to engage the reader
an honest and forthright story about an important aspect of your life
Brooke

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
    Hi Brooke,
    thank you for very kind response to this story... just have to write what I know... I don't believe ego has a place within the truth and accountability to ones shortcomings... I think that's where true learning begins.

    Really appreciate your time, I know you're a very busy lady.

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James xx
Comment from Irish Rain
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Wonderful story, full of questions that I hope you've received at least some answers to. Your story could most certainly be mine, every year, one more ache, injury, usually due to me thinking..."Well, of course I can do that! I used to!...ha ha...great entry, sincere prayers that you feel better soon!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014


reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
    Hi there Irish Rain,
    ah, yeah... the title was a statement to my conviction towards listening... iv'e heard enough times, but I seem to have trouble with the actual taking-in of the lesson... thank you for your kind and thoughtful review, most appreciated... I enjoyed the laugh you supplied with your comment... I hear you there... and yes, I am getting stronger each day... just have to keep up the measured movement for the right result.

    With our thoughts we create,
    our own destiny,
    James.