Fog
Halloween-inspired poem NOT for children130 total reviews
Comment from reconciled
yes maam....the claim by men who seek their own glory clothed in robes of piety preaching wealth and prosperity...apparently cant see the hypocrisy, when they say they worship a homeless carpenter God, who said...paraphrased, if you will not surrender all, whether wealth's temporary contentment or your own flesh...you not worthy to follow me. Yes I found it at once and still find it very odd...completely out of place.
Miss you sweet Lady. Love Michael
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yes maam....the claim by men who seek their own glory clothed in robes of piety preaching wealth and prosperity...apparently cant see the hypocrisy, when they say they worship a homeless carpenter God, who said...paraphrased, if you will not surrender all, whether wealth's temporary contentment or your own flesh...you not worthy to follow me. Yes I found it at once and still find it very odd...completely out of place.
Miss you sweet Lady. Love Michael
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
Comment from Sanku
It is unusual to see explanations in your author's note ,but i understand why you did it.i agree with you totally in that many good people end up with painful diseases and suffer unnecessarily. many not-so-good people have a smooth ride too. praying is mainly an exercise to gather strength to face whatever we have to face and if we keep a positive mind we may not fall victim to depression.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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It is unusual to see explanations in your author's note ,but i understand why you did it.i agree with you totally in that many good people end up with painful diseases and suffer unnecessarily. many not-so-good people have a smooth ride too. praying is mainly an exercise to gather strength to face whatever we have to face and if we keep a positive mind we may not fall victim to depression.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Sanku, I appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
Beautifully put and I don't think that anyone with sense can dispute it. I agree with your notes completely and I think that it does require saying. I might add that one of the main ways to be "good" is to send them a check! Fate is fate. Good is good for its own sake. To seek a reward for it abrogates it. Well, your rant is so good I have to go find something else to rant about! Hahaha. mikey
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Beautifully put and I don't think that anyone with sense can dispute it. I agree with your notes completely and I think that it does require saying. I might add that one of the main ways to be "good" is to send them a check! Fate is fate. Good is good for its own sake. To seek a reward for it abrogates it. Well, your rant is so good I have to go find something else to rant about! Hahaha. mikey
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Mikey, thank you so much, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from daeneam
Boy, I am late. Anyway... I'm very glad to read some notes from you. I agree. It's hard to understand the way of the Lord. But, I was born not to question His will, but just put my complete trust to Him. c", Mae
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Boy, I am late. Anyway... I'm very glad to read some notes from you. I agree. It's hard to understand the way of the Lord. But, I was born not to question His will, but just put my complete trust to Him. c", Mae
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Mae, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from billscott
Awesome...truly a fantastic piece!
The rhyming is flawless. Your sense of meter just works.
Love the topic, set up and flow of the entire poem!
Beautifully tragic!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Awesome...truly a fantastic piece!
The rhyming is flawless. Your sense of meter just works.
Love the topic, set up and flow of the entire poem!
Beautifully tragic!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Bill, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Ekim777
Your poem might pose unanswerable questions. What is this fog within our very minds, where spectral, inferior things lurk. Some call it the shadow or abyss where maybe fear and guilt do battle with our very souls. Let us not try to define our souls. The importance of the ghosts that plague our shadows s that they might be milestones to our souls. Some of us in a panic resort to a blind sense of faith or belief. Let me repeat, there might be no answers (Only a new way of understanding.) The great playwright, Eugene o' Neil said; I thought life was a long day's journey into night until I discovered, it was a long day's journey into the light." Which leads to the next question; What is our fate? A great, Eastern philosopher claimed that with our awareness we move from the laws of accident, to the laws of fate. I think you address this issue in the final line.
It seems this is not your usual kind of poem. -Ekim777
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Your poem might pose unanswerable questions. What is this fog within our very minds, where spectral, inferior things lurk. Some call it the shadow or abyss where maybe fear and guilt do battle with our very souls. Let us not try to define our souls. The importance of the ghosts that plague our shadows s that they might be milestones to our souls. Some of us in a panic resort to a blind sense of faith or belief. Let me repeat, there might be no answers (Only a new way of understanding.) The great playwright, Eugene o' Neil said; I thought life was a long day's journey into night until I discovered, it was a long day's journey into the light." Which leads to the next question; What is our fate? A great, Eastern philosopher claimed that with our awareness we move from the laws of accident, to the laws of fate. I think you address this issue in the final line.
It seems this is not your usual kind of poem. -Ekim777
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem my friend, I am so happy you explained, because you had me wondering. After reading your notes, the poem makes much more sense.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Good poem my friend, I am so happy you explained, because you had me wondering. After reading your notes, the poem makes much more sense.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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GWinterwin, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
With reference to your author notes, I could not agree more.
We just cannot earn salvation nor escape from our fate, and bad things do happen to good people - like you, I have seen it so often.
I really appreciate how you present the idea in your poem.
Perfect rhythm (would expect nothing less from you) and well paired rhymes. I also like the near rhyme of spurn and earned.
Juliette
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With reference to your author notes, I could not agree more.
We just cannot earn salvation nor escape from our fate, and bad things do happen to good people - like you, I have seen it so often.
I really appreciate how you present the idea in your poem.
Perfect rhythm (would expect nothing less from you) and well paired rhymes. I also like the near rhyme of spurn and earned.
Juliette
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great artwork, and I love this darker poem. Great opening line- the screams are hid -
Whether you are good or bad, you can't escape the fog, it comes when least expected, wanted or not. A great read Brooke
valda
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Great artwork, and I love this darker poem. Great opening line- the screams are hid -
Whether you are good or bad, you can't escape the fog, it comes when least expected, wanted or not. A great read Brooke
valda
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - A good philosophical poem, well written in good rhyming couplets. I particularly like the line 'Escape from fate cannot be learned' - how true! Even more so I enjoyed reading your author notes. Good to read some fine common sense words and why not have a good rant when justified. I agreed with every word. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hi Brooke - A good philosophical poem, well written in good rhyming couplets. I particularly like the line 'Escape from fate cannot be learned' - how true! Even more so I enjoyed reading your author notes. Good to read some fine common sense words and why not have a good rant when justified. I agreed with every word. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
