Comment from lakeport

Excellent

ball and chain, indeed that's a very inspirationl poem, very nice song lyrics, I enjoyed reading them. God bless you,Hugs!Lakeport.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014

Thanks so much:)

reply by lakeport on 07-Oct-2014

your welcome.Hugs!lakeport,

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Hi, Teresa

I enjoyed your spirited free verse poem of faith. The use of the ball and chain provides a strong metaphor to help you convey the theme of your poem.

Well done!
Ray

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

thanks Ray:)

Comment from tbacha58

Excellent

Now whatever your ball
whatever your chain
give that key to Jesus
give that key to Jesus
Jesus

Hi T. I simply loved this amazing poem of Jesus, the way you wrote it is so sincere and deep. Your being positive towards living in the name of Jesus is so beautiful, I felt the comfort in your depth, a lovely poem T. I hope you are feeling much better. Sorry I have no stars, this poem does deserve many. Love u Terry xoox

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

Thanks Terry:)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

perfect illustration
excellent use of enjambment
powerful imagery
effective use of repetition
and yes, it does read like inspiring lyrics
to a hymn
Brooke

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

thanks brooke

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

It could very easily be put to music, Teresa, if one had the inclination and knowledge to do so.

Reads like many of the old slave hymns I've heard in the past, while they toiled in the fields of whatever plantation they happened to be on at the time.

Very nice, good stuff!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

thanks dean

reply by Dean Kuch on 03-Oct-2014

You're very welcome, Teresa. :}

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Definitely lyrics to a song Teresa. great message in this well written piece. Uplifting and strong with nice rhyme and cadence throughout. Well done.

Janet

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

thanks janet

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Reminded me of Paul's miraculous escape from prison.

As I read, it became clear that I was about to start singing, and then I got to your notes. I knew then that I was supposed to. It's a simple metaphoric message of the ball and chain being the sin/problems that weigh us down daily and that there will be a time we'll call out to be released from the pressure. Jesus is the answer and just like he did on the cross, he will carry the weight of our concerns for us. An excellent song of faith.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

thanks:)

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

SOunds pretty good here. Admittedly though, I like to remove myown ball and chain and have no real need for Jesus to do so, but hey, what ever rows your boat. Good job.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

thanks james

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hi Teresa,

Yes, definitely a song! This has a rousing campfire-song-type ring to it.

Beautiful message. One thought, though - often people who have the ball and chain on them, don't seem to have access to the key, right? That's where miracles come into play, I guess. :)

Until next time,

Love,

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

thanks sonali

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Good devotional song lyric, with fine use of repetition and good flow, dear friend. Definitely sounds like song lyrics...no question about it. Good random near-slant rhymes with assonance, like in down and found, scratch and back.

NO suggestions.

God Bless!

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2014

thank you so much:)

reply by rama devi on 02-Oct-2014

:-))