Stranded in Cabo
unexpected wind-blown romance18 total reviews
Comment from amada
I enjoyed reading about this romance, Mr. Fireman. Congratulations in winning the contest. Yes, headlines are a great source of entertainment and ideas to plot. Excellent!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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I enjoyed reading about this romance, Mr. Fireman. Congratulations in winning the contest. Yes, headlines are a great source of entertainment and ideas to plot. Excellent!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Thank you for sharing my stor. So pleased you enjoyed it. RodG
Comment from mfowler
Terrific yarn here, Rod. I got into it pretty well straight up and because you wrote it, I knew it would be worth the journey. I like your prose from other pieces I've read. The whole romance is nicely paced as it develops through the wild actions of the hurricane. There's a good balance of show and tell as you have a dense story to relate in a small word count. Making the central character a fireman was an excellent choice as it explained so much about him without the backstory needing to be spelt out. I loved the girl from her openeing line and I though that Montana girl line:We Montana girls are blunt. Have to be. Winters are long and cold, and summers too damn short. No time to mince words...was precious and really saved a lot of words in pushing along the plausibility factor of the relationship. Excellent write!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Terrific yarn here, Rod. I got into it pretty well straight up and because you wrote it, I knew it would be worth the journey. I like your prose from other pieces I've read. The whole romance is nicely paced as it develops through the wild actions of the hurricane. There's a good balance of show and tell as you have a dense story to relate in a small word count. Making the central character a fireman was an excellent choice as it explained so much about him without the backstory needing to be spelt out. I loved the girl from her openeing line and I though that Montana girl line:We Montana girls are blunt. Have to be. Winters are long and cold, and summers too damn short. No time to mince words...was precious and really saved a lot of words in pushing along the plausibility factor of the relationship. Excellent write!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for sharing this journey and for your wonderful comments. Rod
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Verrrry good story. I was completely involved with the storm and the charactrs, worrying about them. Nice touch having his wife die in a fire, too.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Verrrry good story. I was completely involved with the storm and the charactrs, worrying about them. Nice touch having his wife die in a fire, too.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Delighted to share this story with you, Phyllis. Thank you for your most encouraging review.
Comment from Nosha17
A very well-written story, with great story line, definitely romantic content. Characters are well drawn, good use of descriptive language. It was indeed an unlikely setting for a romance. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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A very well-written story, with great story line, definitely romantic content. Characters are well drawn, good use of descriptive language. It was indeed an unlikely setting for a romance. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Faye, for sharing "Cabo" and your very kind praise.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of your enjoyable story. It doesn't really mater where you found the material, there is nothing more fun and memorable than the people we've met on the beach. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the pleasure of your enjoyable story. It doesn't really mater where you found the material, there is nothing more fun and memorable than the people we've met on the beach. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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So pleased you enjoyed the story, Ric. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from Judy Couch
I enjoyed the story. I liked it even more when I read your notes and learned that it is based in reality. Your description of the storm is really good.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I enjoyed the story. I liked it even more when I read your notes and learned that it is based in reality. Your description of the storm is really good.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Judy. I am especially pleased you liked the description of the storm.
Comment from jaeladarling
This turned out real sweet. For a minute there, I was worried this was going to turn into another one-night-stand story. So glad it didn't! :) Enjoyed the read - thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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This turned out real sweet. For a minute there, I was worried this was going to turn into another one-night-stand story. So glad it didn't! :) Enjoyed the read - thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I guess I will always prefer a PG rating to a "R" rating. So pleased you enjoyed the read.
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Me too, for sure. ;)
Comment from adewpearl
you set the stage well in your opening lines
you also give good insight into the narrator through his attitude in his comments
vivid description of the approaching hurricane
slam/pummel - good use of strong verbs to add drama to the scene
good dialogue among those stuck in the storm
a fun ending to a bad situation
Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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you set the stage well in your opening lines
you also give good insight into the narrator through his attitude in his comments
vivid description of the approaching hurricane
slam/pummel - good use of strong verbs to add drama to the scene
good dialogue among those stuck in the storm
a fun ending to a bad situation
Brooke
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my adventure in Cabo. Thanks for sharing, Brooke.
Comment from Goodauthor
I don't have any sixes left, but this was a well written, very creative story. It stayed with the prompt and flowed smoothly from event to event to make it a very enjoyable story.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I don't have any sixes left, but this was a well written, very creative story. It stayed with the prompt and flowed smoothly from event to event to make it a very enjoyable story.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I really appreciate your reading my story and thinking it's worth a six. Thanks so much for sharing.
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You're welcome.
Comment from K. Lorraine
Wonderfully written. My husband and I've been through a major hurricane and lost everything. Your story brought back memories of the frightening wrath of Mother Nature. I like the way you brought Dennis and Jamie together. The ending tugged at my heart. I almost didn't choose your story because the title didn't grab me, but something in my gut said read this story. I'm glad that I did. I like your style... I'm rooting for you to win regardless that I wrote one of the other stories in this contest. Good luck...
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Wonderfully written. My husband and I've been through a major hurricane and lost everything. Your story brought back memories of the frightening wrath of Mother Nature. I like the way you brought Dennis and Jamie together. The ending tugged at my heart. I almost didn't choose your story because the title didn't grab me, but something in my gut said read this story. I'm glad that I did. I like your style... I'm rooting for you to win regardless that I wrote one of the other stories in this contest. Good luck...
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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What a gracious review! I truly appreciate your sportsmanship, Lorraine, and I enjoyed your comments. I cannot imagine what it must havebeen like for you Andyour husband to lose everything. Have YOU written/posted a story about your own experience? Thanks again for sharing!
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No, but maybe one day I will be able to get past the trauma of such devastation and loss. We went through Hurricane Charley in 2004 and three other hurricanes separated by only two weeks from each other. We left SW FL and it took us nine years to come back, but we are home again to stay. Thanks for your heartfelt thoughts. K. Lorraine
