Son of Herb -- Conclusion
Gypsies, tramps, and thieves.24 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
That was a most satisfying and original ending. A twist I doubt anyone saw coming, but you made it work which makes for a great story. Can't think of any kind of critique. Perhaps some of the dialogue is funnier than I believe these guys could be. But, I can't complain about laughing too much can I! mikey
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That was a most satisfying and original ending. A twist I doubt anyone saw coming, but you made it work which makes for a great story. Can't think of any kind of critique. Perhaps some of the dialogue is funnier than I believe these guys could be. But, I can't complain about laughing too much can I! mikey
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
Comment from JBCaine
Hump-
A fine ending, and worth the wait.
A very convincing convincer in the end, and thoroughly enjoyable through all parts.
Smitty makes me spurt my drink out my nose. It's the only unpleasant part of this tale.
Thanks for sharing.
JBCaine-
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Hump-
A fine ending, and worth the wait.
A very convincing convincer in the end, and thoroughly enjoyable through all parts.
Smitty makes me spurt my drink out my nose. It's the only unpleasant part of this tale.
Thanks for sharing.
JBCaine-
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Thanks, JB. Ending is story is the hardest part. Loose ends everywhere. I'm thinking of writing another story giving Smitty the starring role. He's a corker. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent ending, humpwhistle, junior is telling the truth and tells jimmy about problems with his car, herb is taking care of his son and drew him to a place where someone would take care of him.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent ending, humpwhistle, junior is telling the truth and tells jimmy about problems with his car, herb is taking care of his son and drew him to a place where someone would take care of him.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Sweetie. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from vickib
Super! That took some thought to pull off, why you're the writer and I be the reader. That whole moth zookeeper deal had me laughing my ass off. Such a great town, I love it and these guys, they took him in, no matter. Love it and you did it so efficiently with still stuff left to the imagination and speculation. I look forward to the original too.
V
Unbelievable, you are stocked up on fairy dust hw. Worth much more though. Thanks for my fairy dust too. Stocked up my drawer.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Super! That took some thought to pull off, why you're the writer and I be the reader. That whole moth zookeeper deal had me laughing my ass off. Such a great town, I love it and these guys, they took him in, no matter. Love it and you did it so efficiently with still stuff left to the imagination and speculation. I look forward to the original too.
V
Unbelievable, you are stocked up on fairy dust hw. Worth much more though. Thanks for my fairy dust too. Stocked up my drawer.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Oh, Vicki, thank you so much for reading the entire saga. And it does feel like a saga to me. I hope you don't mind if I just thank you once. It's a treat for me to hear from someone who's read it straight through. With installments, I can be sure I'm keeping all the balls in the air throughout.
I'm glad you laughed. Four-Bits is that kind of place. Strange and serious things can happen, but somehow humor and decency always prevail in Four-Bits. Thanks you so much, Vicki, for all the shiny stars. Peace, Lee
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Of course one reply! I was going to say please don't worry about replying to each one. It was great to just be able to cruse through each chapter. Lots and lots of great things about this story line, it doesn't want to die, it wants to keep going.
Comment from Craigitar
Thank you, Hw, for the entertaining story--another good one from the master. Loved the characters, dialogue and humor. The conclusion was most satisfactory. Applaud, applaud!
Craig
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Thank you, Hw, for the entertaining story--another good one from the master. Loved the characters, dialogue and humor. The conclusion was most satisfactory. Applaud, applaud!
Craig
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from boxergirl
I think this is a good ending for your story. Like you say not all things in Four-Bits can be explained. I liked the explanation of Junior's past and how his father is making sure he is okay, even from the grave. 8-)
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I think this is a good ending for your story. Like you say not all things in Four-Bits can be explained. I liked the explanation of Junior's past and how his father is making sure he is okay, even from the grave. 8-)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Herb Granger, Jr...... a little bit nutty..... a lot a bit genius... I enjoyed this Lee, (as always) The conclusion is more than satisfactory. He has a place to live and a place to carry out his dad's mission. What more could anybody who is 4 cylinders short of a V8 want anyway?
:-) Carolyn
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Herb Granger, Jr...... a little bit nutty..... a lot a bit genius... I enjoyed this Lee, (as always) The conclusion is more than satisfactory. He has a place to live and a place to carry out his dad's mission. What more could anybody who is 4 cylinders short of a V8 want anyway?
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Oops! There goes my last sixer - I've been sprinkling them like confetti tonight!
Great conclusion wraps all the ends up nicely and more importantly keeps the entertainment flowing. Not to mention giving possibilities for future stories....
.... which I wouldn't mind reading.
Steve
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Oops! There goes my last sixer - I've been sprinkling them like confetti tonight!
Great conclusion wraps all the ends up nicely and more importantly keeps the entertainment flowing. Not to mention giving possibilities for future stories....
.... which I wouldn't mind reading.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
This is my first visit and I am sorry for that because this is very good writing...I love the characters and their wit back and forth the name Rezin the authentic dialog...I like the thread woven using gypsy...gypsy moth gypsy Hazel song gypsies teams and thieves
Well done
God bless
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This is my first visit and I am sorry for that because this is very good writing...I love the characters and their wit back and forth the name Rezin the authentic dialog...I like the thread woven using gypsy...gypsy moth gypsy Hazel song gypsies teams and thieves
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from WritingsByG
Lee
Well done, again.
You pulled it all together nicely and so visual. Everything you write is clear and allows my imagination to follow along without telling me what to see. I like that.
This one also would allow itself to be filmed in the vain of a Twilight Zone. A Ray Bradburyesque story.
BTW I understand we have a mutual friend - Jill Reese.
G
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Lee
Well done, again.
You pulled it all together nicely and so visual. Everything you write is clear and allows my imagination to follow along without telling me what to see. I like that.
This one also would allow itself to be filmed in the vain of a Twilight Zone. A Ray Bradburyesque story.
BTW I understand we have a mutual friend - Jill Reese.
G
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
