Never Too Late
Late-blooming can be joyful29 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I like:
the message of your poem
the image--perfect for your words
the way you used the flower to represent humans
the desire to be something
the idea to never give up
I would change nothing.
Good job.
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I like:
the message of your poem
the image--perfect for your words
the way you used the flower to represent humans
the desire to be something
the idea to never give up
I would change nothing.
Good job.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from Dawny53
Hello Loanna, this is my second visit to your poem, I really like it and consider very good. Your idea of the late blooming flower is a good strong message, especially to your friend! I was thinking good could become excellent with just a couple small changes in keeping with the overall rhythm. Try leaving out the word then in stanza 3, in your last stanza insert because before someone. Nice poem!
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Hello Loanna, this is my second visit to your poem, I really like it and consider very good. Your idea of the late blooming flower is a good strong message, especially to your friend! I was thinking good could become excellent with just a couple small changes in keeping with the overall rhythm. Try leaving out the word then in stanza 3, in your last stanza insert because before someone. Nice poem!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from tdragonfly
We can all take a lesson from the little flower. I have just had the talk with myself of recent. I have found that I am a lot happier now and am enjoying life much more. So heads up and let the sun shine on each and everyone!
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We can all take a lesson from the little flower. I have just had the talk with myself of recent. I have found that I am a lot happier now and am enjoying life much more. So heads up and let the sun shine on each and everyone!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Yes, it does make a rather good pep talk on the virtue of waiting.
The meter is a little uneven, but the poem still flows quite nicely and the metaphor of the shy flower works well.
So never give up if you've yet to be found.
Someone is looking for you.
Steve
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Yes, it does make a rather good pep talk on the virtue of waiting.
The meter is a little uneven, but the poem still flows quite nicely and the metaphor of the shy flower works well.
So never give up if you've yet to be found.
Someone is looking for you.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from harmony13
Excellent poem! An extreme creative presentation with this
poem. The author's words are clear, descriptive and thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem.
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Excellent poem! An extreme creative presentation with this
poem. The author's words are clear, descriptive and thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
We learn best when we realize that what we tell others we do not simply follow ourselves
The poem is simply written well with rhymes & in good meter, humorous in some sentences, light, lively, & light-hearted, throughout. A delight to read. The personification of the flower allows us to see & to hear the possibilities awaiting for us too.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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We learn best when we realize that what we tell others we do not simply follow ourselves
The poem is simply written well with rhymes & in good meter, humorous in some sentences, light, lively, & light-hearted, throughout. A delight to read. The personification of the flower allows us to see & to hear the possibilities awaiting for us too.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I love your comments and your thoughts...especially your first line.
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Comment from thee-name
Good verse about a flower. Understood it.
THE FLOWER THAT BLOOMS IN THE FALL
NEVER ASKED TO BE CHOSEN AT ALL
SHE SIMPLY DELIGHTED IN TAKING HER TIME
FOR PATIENCE WAS ALWAYS HER CALL
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Good verse about a flower. Understood it.
THE FLOWER THAT BLOOMS IN THE FALL
NEVER ASKED TO BE CHOSEN AT ALL
SHE SIMPLY DELIGHTED IN TAKING HER TIME
FOR PATIENCE WAS ALWAYS HER CALL
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for your great comments...'made me feel really good...thank you.
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THANK YOU!
Comment from SteveY
What a very beautiful story told in absolutely marvelous poetic fashion and perfect rhyming. Loved everything about this one. Truly deserves a 6 but alas I'm all out.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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What a very beautiful story told in absolutely marvelous poetic fashion and perfect rhyming. Loved everything about this one. Truly deserves a 6 but alas I'm all out.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Just knowing you felt that way means even more. You truly made my day.
Comment from c_lucas
When a relationship falters, release it and start anew. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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When a relationship falters, release it and start anew. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much. Your words are so very true about relationships.
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You're welcome, Loanna. Charlie
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Loanna, I enjoyed reading your philosophical poem about patience , using the late blooming flowers as a metaphor They say patience is a virtue and I do agree, and I also agree with you saying that you took your own advice, this is something we all could do.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Hi Loanna, I enjoyed reading your philosophical poem about patience , using the late blooming flowers as a metaphor They say patience is a virtue and I do agree, and I also agree with you saying that you took your own advice, this is something we all could do.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Hi Mary, blessings to you for writing...
