A Storm Came Crashing
a rispetto147 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
I loved the feel you injected into this rispetto... it had a real sea shanty feel and drove that feeling home with the Starfish refrain... wonderful construction and beautifully formatted... loved the colours and visual, it set the tone of what came next... you are rated 'one' for good reason... exceptional.
With our thoughts we create,
safe harbour,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I loved the feel you injected into this rispetto... it had a real sea shanty feel and drove that feeling home with the Starfish refrain... wonderful construction and beautifully formatted... loved the colours and visual, it set the tone of what came next... you are rated 'one' for good reason... exceptional.
With our thoughts we create,
safe harbour,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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James, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
I feel the need to free my soul is a powerful line like the force of the waves. Love the mention of the starfish and how the storm affects them. There is feeling and emotions in your words.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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I feel the need to free my soul is a powerful line like the force of the waves. Love the mention of the starfish and how the storm affects them. There is feeling and emotions in your words.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Elaine, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
Like how included that Starfish even breathed a sigh of relief. As always, the rhyming is smooth. You paint a very vivid picture with just eight lines. Well crafted. Les
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Like how included that Starfish even breathed a sigh of relief. As always, the rhyming is smooth. You paint a very vivid picture with just eight lines. Well crafted. Les
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Les, thanks so much for your positive comments - since the comments are all positive, can I ask if you meant the 4 rating?
Brooke
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Oh, I'm sorry. I thought I gave you five stars. Please accept my apology. Les
Comment from honeytree
I loved the art work for these words written.
When a storm happens it shows its presence in a big way.
Some sea creatures survive and many die.
honey tree
Many sea
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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I loved the art work for these words written.
When a storm happens it shows its presence in a big way.
Some sea creatures survive and many die.
honey tree
Many sea
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Annie, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great artwork of the ferocious sea. Like the use of the tiny starfish cowering against the crashing waves. A lovely rispetto and an enjoyable read.
valda
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Great artwork of the ferocious sea. Like the use of the tiny starfish cowering against the crashing waves. A lovely rispetto and an enjoyable read.
valda
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
''A Storm came crashing toward the shore --
While Starfish cowered at its roar ''
Love those two lines in this stark presentation; the imagery strong indeed. I like the change of structure in the two stanzas without losing its impetuous.
For only two stanzas, a formidable delivery indeed.
Well done,
RGstar
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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''A Storm came crashing toward the shore --
While Starfish cowered at its roar ''
Love those two lines in this stark presentation; the imagery strong indeed. I like the change of structure in the two stanzas without losing its impetuous.
For only two stanzas, a formidable delivery indeed.
Well done,
RGstar
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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RG, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Neonewman
Outstanding! I will be reading as much of your work as possible. I am currently writing a novel and bringing my creativity to the next level. I have written thousands of poems and I'm just now putting the out there for review.
Thank you for your post
God Bless
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Outstanding! I will be reading as much of your work as possible. I am currently writing a novel and bringing my creativity to the next level. I have written thousands of poems and I'm just now putting the out there for review.
Thank you for your post
God Bless
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for your encouraging comments, Neonewman :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
I can always depend on you to introduce a new poem style to us fanstory members. I like this rispetto poem. I loved the art work. You know I love anything blue.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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I can always depend on you to introduce a new poem style to us fanstory members. I like this rispetto poem. I loved the art work. You know I love anything blue.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Brooke:
What a marvelous rispetto. It's hard to decide
whether you wrote the poem for the picture or
selected the picture for the poem - they fit
together so perfectly.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Brooke:
What a marvelous rispetto. It's hard to decide
whether you wrote the poem for the picture or
selected the picture for the poem - they fit
together so perfectly.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Jan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpearl,
This was wonderful because it was short and sweet. Also, the theme was well chosen. Your rhyming was very good. I like many things about the Italians, this style was just one more thing I liked.
There was no SPAG, and no typos.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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adewpearl,
This was wonderful because it was short and sweet. Also, the theme was well chosen. Your rhyming was very good. I like many things about the Italians, this style was just one more thing I liked.
There was no SPAG, and no typos.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
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Oatmeal, thank you so much :-) Brooke
