Gobbledegook
Acrostic53 total reviews
Comment from Diny
So I went in search of more from you- so you could see some people read for pleasure and not points!
Acrostics are difficult at best and you rhymed on top of it! BRAVO!- Write on- it was my pleasure- Di
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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So I went in search of more from you- so you could see some people read for pleasure and not points!
Acrostics are difficult at best and you rhymed on top of it! BRAVO!- Write on- it was my pleasure- Di
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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.... and thank you for taking me up on the invitation. And for the review.
I hate that some people seem to think they can just get those initial letters right in an acrostic and they don't have to worry about any other poetic elements.
Steve
Comment from SteveY
Well what more is there to say? I think you've very adequately summed it all up very nicely with this one. Great job once again.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Well what more is there to say? I think you've very adequately summed it all up very nicely with this one. Great job once again.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Ridley Williams
Oh Steve,
...love it when you pull the gloves off, lol. The Bible says to make some, "Holy noise", but some of these guys are taking it too far. People have always been suckers, (just ask P.T.Barnum), but, if there's a hell, I hope it's reserved for guys who take advantage of weak-minded people...they suck!
Loved the opening line, especially the "gargle with oil"...righteous!
Great job expressing your feelings in this one, and best of luck with your entry, Bill
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Oh Steve,
...love it when you pull the gloves off, lol. The Bible says to make some, "Holy noise", but some of these guys are taking it too far. People have always been suckers, (just ask P.T.Barnum), but, if there's a hell, I hope it's reserved for guys who take advantage of weak-minded people...they suck!
Loved the opening line, especially the "gargle with oil"...righteous!
Great job expressing your feelings in this one, and best of luck with your entry, Bill
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Bill.
This one just flowed out and yes, it is a fairly true representation of how I feel about the topic.
Steve
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Well hey...good on ya. This is a super entry, and a great treatment of the word. I applaud your chutzpah for putting on this site.
Your word choise is good and the delivery more than sound.
Good luck in the contest.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Hi. Well hey...good on ya. This is a super entry, and a great treatment of the word. I applaud your chutzpah for putting on this site.
Your word choise is good and the delivery more than sound.
Good luck in the contest.
padumachitta
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Padu.
I did take a deep breath before posting this, but I've really had only one negative review. Perhaps most people recognized it as an attack on shonky preachers rather than on the actual congregation,
Steve
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Hi...ya, the snake tent guys...years ago they would a had a wagon and sold cures...padumachitta
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Those are the ones - preying on the vulnerable.
On a lighter note, some of my favourite O Henry stories are about the lovable snake-oil kinda guy, Jeff Peters.
If you've never read 'The Ethics of Pig' try searching for it. If I had any ability as a script-writer I would adapt this and see if Steven Spielberg would be interested - it would be a humdinger.
Steve
Comment from Sanku
This is a lovely acrostic and I am sure you are going to win .Each line is so graphically expressive and the alliterations adds on to the enjoyment.Last three lines are great especially 'kindle the frvour and foment the fear'
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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This is a lovely acrostic and I am sure you are going to win .Each line is so graphically expressive and the alliterations adds on to the enjoyment.Last three lines are great especially 'kindle the frvour and foment the fear'
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Sanku, thanks so much for the generous review and the six stars.
Nobody knows which way the committee will go, especially since I have chosen a slightly controversial topic.
Steve
Comment from chasennov
Acrostic "Gobbledegook" You have created a Gobbledegook which takes me back a few years when I did one of these for a group. This sounded just fine. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Acrostic "Gobbledegook" You have created a Gobbledegook which takes me back a few years when I did one of these for a group. This sounded just fine. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
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My pleasure.
Comment from seaglass
I'll bet you will get some angry responses. Good use of Acrostic. I attended a service like this and was shocked when the preacher announced that if people would empty their wallets for the offering, God would give them back 3X more. (3 fold)People all around me were dumping it in the plate. Sadly, they appeared to be rather poor people. ( I didn't buy it) It sounded like gambling promises.
You are correct, they rule and lead with fear and false promise. Here in the States, they deny science and fight it in our schools.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I'll bet you will get some angry responses. Good use of Acrostic. I attended a service like this and was shocked when the preacher announced that if people would empty their wallets for the offering, God would give them back 3X more. (3 fold)People all around me were dumping it in the plate. Sadly, they appeared to be rather poor people. ( I didn't buy it) It sounded like gambling promises.
You are correct, they rule and lead with fear and false promise. Here in the States, they deny science and fight it in our schools.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the supportive review and the six stars.
Actually the responses have been mostly positive, although I did draw a deep breath before posting this.
Steve
Comment from Sasha
You got a 6 for your bravery in posting this. I agree with everything you say but fear some may go off the deep end...we do have a few die hard Gobbledegookers here on FS, but the heck with them. This is a dynamite entry for this contest and I can say, you definitely got my vote...I know you can't comment on that but just wanted you to know how much I liked this one. Just realized, I don't get to vote so, so much for that!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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You got a 6 for your bravery in posting this. I agree with everything you say but fear some may go off the deep end...we do have a few die hard Gobbledegookers here on FS, but the heck with them. This is a dynamite entry for this contest and I can say, you definitely got my vote...I know you can't comment on that but just wanted you to know how much I liked this one. Just realized, I don't get to vote so, so much for that!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Sasha.
I have had a few reviews along the same lines.... Yes., I did pause briefly before hitting the post button with this one but 'fools rush in' you know?
So you'll be pleased to know there are a few anti-gobbledegookers here on FS as well - we just don't make such a fuss of it - I'll have to rely on a couple of them being on the voting committee as well!
Steve
Comment from Just2Write
I love the word Gobbledegook - Your Acrostic uses it in a totally different way than what I was expecting when I saw the title, but the poem is VERY poignant, and says much about the fear-mongering from Snake Oiled serpents and those who make money from selling fear to the masses.
You are so right - Garble the words, and postulate - There will be someone to swallow them.
Excellent submission, Steve. Rose.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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I love the word Gobbledegook - Your Acrostic uses it in a totally different way than what I was expecting when I saw the title, but the poem is VERY poignant, and says much about the fear-mongering from Snake Oiled serpents and those who make money from selling fear to the masses.
You are so right - Garble the words, and postulate - There will be someone to swallow them.
Excellent submission, Steve. Rose.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Rose.
Not as many snake oil merchants jumping down my throat as I expected - perhaps they abstained from voting. The poem does spell out pretty clearly my own thoughts on the topic.
I did write another piece called 'Gobbledegooks' recently - a very different fettle of Gish!
Steve
Comment from tdragonfly
From the beginning of time there has always been the ones to use scare tactics to hide behind the word of God. They twist the words to suit their needs. And unfortunately a lot of times to grease their personal billfold. All in the name of God. They prey on the weak and frighten souls. Those eager to find answers and hope at whatever the cost.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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From the beginning of time there has always been the ones to use scare tactics to hide behind the word of God. They twist the words to suit their needs. And unfortunately a lot of times to grease their personal billfold. All in the name of God. They prey on the weak and frighten souls. Those eager to find answers and hope at whatever the cost.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the thoughtful review - exactly what I had in mind.
Steve
