Grief
Many emotions as twin towers fell.112 total reviews
Comment from INtity
Pretty good read, it has all the notions of grief and horror that came on that atrocious day. I like the structure of the poem and the final stanza is very good!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Pretty good read, it has all the notions of grief and horror that came on that atrocious day. I like the structure of the poem and the final stanza is very good!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading and for your positive review. livelylinda
Comment from jaeladarling
Thank you for this sobering tribute. Such a sad, shocking day that rocked our world. I hope we wake up and take control before worse happens. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you for this sobering tribute. Such a sad, shocking day that rocked our world. I hope we wake up and take control before worse happens. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. livelylinda
Comment from Christine B.
A thorough display of emotions, a respectfully open-minded and knowledgeable speech on that awful day's impact, Livelylinda.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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A thorough display of emotions, a respectfully open-minded and knowledgeable speech on that awful day's impact, Livelylinda.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Christine B.! livelylinda
Comment from GracieAnn
LL, this moving write has a most interesting scattered rhyme which I enjoyed for a nice change. This entry is powerful in descriptive language and elicits the emotion intended. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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LL, this moving write has a most interesting scattered rhyme which I enjoyed for a nice change. This entry is powerful in descriptive language and elicits the emotion intended. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for reading, GraceAnn. I didn't win the contest. livelylinda
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Linda, your write is strong. I have found that contests turn out to be fruitless for me personally. Don't let it discourage you. :0 GracieAnn
Comment from SteveY
Looks like you pretty much described it here with this one that's for sure. So sad, but so true. Great job in putting to pen this little masterpiece.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Looks like you pretty much described it here with this one that's for sure. So sad, but so true. Great job in putting to pen this little masterpiece.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks, SteveY. livelylinda
Comment from jgirlie152
This is a wonderful poem, so well written. I will never forget, not will any American, that day in September our world fell apart. In our lifetimes we had never seen the invasion of our country, and I hope we never do again.
Thank you for writing this to remind all of us of the disaster and the bravery of those who were there.
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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This is a wonderful poem, so well written. I will never forget, not will any American, that day in September our world fell apart. In our lifetimes we had never seen the invasion of our country, and I hope we never do again.
Thank you for writing this to remind all of us of the disaster and the bravery of those who were there.
Joan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Joan, for reading and sharing your thoughts on this horrific event. Linda
Comment from Nosha17
I truly thought I had reviewed this already, must be going nuts. I agree, it is incomprehensible how many lives were affected by this awful tragedy. Good use of metaphorical and descriptive language. Great picture, good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I truly thought I had reviewed this already, must be going nuts. I agree, it is incomprehensible how many lives were affected by this awful tragedy. Good use of metaphorical and descriptive language. Great picture, good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Faye: thanks for reading. I only got two votes in the contest, my usual fare, but the better poem won. Linda
Comment from Cedar
You have perfectly described a horrible day in American history. The pain and agony that the victims must have felt that day and the ongoing sorrow their families will feel all their lives. Bill
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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You have perfectly described a horrible day in American history. The pain and agony that the victims must have felt that day and the ongoing sorrow their families will feel all their lives. Bill
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading, Bill. Linda
Comment from Sanku
on one hand there are individuals committing suicide and on wars causing millions of death.One feels 'overwhelming sadness' at the pointlessness of all. Your poem has a great emotional appeal .All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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on one hand there are individuals committing suicide and on wars causing millions of death.One feels 'overwhelming sadness' at the pointlessness of all. Your poem has a great emotional appeal .All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Sanku: thanks for reading. Got two votes but a better poem beat me so that is o.k. livelylinda
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Linda
You bring back all the haunting memories. Feelings that shattered the soul, not just of Americans ... those who feel what you all must have felt ... it could have been our own country, yet as the world watched your pain, the realisation of horror and the pervading fear that enveloped us. For anyone to surrender the lives of their own to devastate so many in the name of a religious war. Difficult for us to understand a cruel god who could demand such bloodshed.
Excellent free verse, a strong and emotive poem. Great mono-rhyme in the second stanza ... created a 'pounding effect' to hammer the message home. You've told all that is relevant without wasting excess words ... captured the atricty in purely emotion without graphic detail of the blood and gore.
Very clever conclusion ... a clever way to wrap up your story:-
"but the octopus-like tentacles of grief
have attached themselves to our deepest flesh
and will never bring relief" - "octopus tentacles of grief" - tremendous phrasing and so apt .... yes there will never be relief from this world catastrophe. A heart-breaking them ... yet it must be remembered. I'm sorry I missed the vote in the contest. An excellent entry. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Hi Linda
You bring back all the haunting memories. Feelings that shattered the soul, not just of Americans ... those who feel what you all must have felt ... it could have been our own country, yet as the world watched your pain, the realisation of horror and the pervading fear that enveloped us. For anyone to surrender the lives of their own to devastate so many in the name of a religious war. Difficult for us to understand a cruel god who could demand such bloodshed.
Excellent free verse, a strong and emotive poem. Great mono-rhyme in the second stanza ... created a 'pounding effect' to hammer the message home. You've told all that is relevant without wasting excess words ... captured the atricty in purely emotion without graphic detail of the blood and gore.
Very clever conclusion ... a clever way to wrap up your story:-
"but the octopus-like tentacles of grief
have attached themselves to our deepest flesh
and will never bring relief" - "octopus tentacles of grief" - tremendous phrasing and so apt .... yes there will never be relief from this world catastrophe. A heart-breaking them ... yet it must be remembered. I'm sorry I missed the vote in the contest. An excellent entry. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Lovi: thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts with me. I only got two votes in the contest. However, I feel this poem is a 'keeper' and the one that beat me was a better poem. Linda
