Tanka 5-7-5-7-7 So High
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Comment from DSMalott
Simple, powerful poem.
Syllable count was right.
The short lines still contained the emotion needed to convey the heart nicely.
Good job and so sorry for your loss.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Simple, powerful poem.
Syllable count was right.
The short lines still contained the emotion needed to convey the heart nicely.
Good job and so sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Thanks so very much! I appreciate your understanding...
Comment from stroncoso1
You wrote a beautiful poem and it keeps with the guidelines of 5-7-5-7-7 syllabic count. It is a lovely poem that flows like one thought. It is a well written tribute to your husband. It is heartfelt and deep. I enjoyed reading it!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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You wrote a beautiful poem and it keeps with the guidelines of 5-7-5-7-7 syllabic count. It is a lovely poem that flows like one thought. It is a well written tribute to your husband. It is heartfelt and deep. I enjoyed reading it!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much.....I appreciate your caring words.
Comment from James Dooney
Wow this is such a nice little ditty you have going on here. I am sure it is a fitting dedication to your hubby. Very well done.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Wow this is such a nice little ditty you have going on here. I am sure it is a fitting dedication to your hubby. Very well done.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Lol...you made my day...thank you!
Comment from amahra
Hey LoannaLois, wonderful art work you have chosen for this 5-7-5 poem. Loved the content of the poem as well as the showcase of it.
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Hey LoannaLois, wonderful art work you have chosen for this 5-7-5 poem. Loved the content of the poem as well as the showcase of it.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
Comment from ravenblack
What you write here is why I have always have been drawn to the mountains to the point of rock climbing. I have been on many summits and really, up there it feels like you are close to the sacred. Sorry about the anniversary of your husband's death. I don't know where you live, but if you are close to mountains, treat yourself and take yourself there.
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What you write here is why I have always have been drawn to the mountains to the point of rock climbing. I have been on many summits and really, up there it feels like you are close to the sacred. Sorry about the anniversary of your husband's death. I don't know where you live, but if you are close to mountains, treat yourself and take yourself there.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
Comment from Christine B.
Hello, LoannaLois. Most importantly, I want to tell you that I feel for you and your endless loss. This is a maginificent dedication. How you wish to reach him. Even Nature, and very possibly all things, become a reminder.
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Hello, LoannaLois. Most importantly, I want to tell you that I feel for you and your endless loss. This is a maginificent dedication. How you wish to reach him. Even Nature, and very possibly all things, become a reminder.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
Comment from skye
Powerful words of love and longing.
It is impossible to lose those we love so much without eons of grief and pain.
Your words provide an outlet, a positive gleam of hope.
Excellent. I am so sorry for your loss.
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Powerful words of love and longing.
It is impossible to lose those we love so much without eons of grief and pain.
Your words provide an outlet, a positive gleam of hope.
Excellent. I am so sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
Comment from rjuselius
"The mountains so high
seem to reach out to heaven
as my heart looks up
and wishes I too could reach
out to that which is beyond."
this is a sublime piece of poetic art! i love the imagery and the message of the poem!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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"The mountains so high
seem to reach out to heaven
as my heart looks up
and wishes I too could reach
out to that which is beyond."
this is a sublime piece of poetic art! i love the imagery and the message of the poem!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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You humble me. I appreciate your kind words and am glad you found something of merit. Thank You!
Comment from Liisa
Your poem touched my heart, especially after I read that you have lost your husband. I am sorry. I lost my father years ago, and after many years alone, my mother found a wonderful man to her life. So don't give up. You will find love, or better, love will find you one day. Thanks for your poem.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Your poem touched my heart, especially after I read that you have lost your husband. I am sorry. I lost my father years ago, and after many years alone, my mother found a wonderful man to her life. So don't give up. You will find love, or better, love will find you one day. Thanks for your poem.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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First, thank you from the bottom of my heart. Your encouraging comments made my day...Second, you made me smile.
Comment from rrabinow
I like the line seems to reach out to heaven, great description that creates a wonderful image in my mind. I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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I like the line seems to reach out to heaven, great description that creates a wonderful image in my mind. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for reading it and commenting...I appreciate it.
