senryru (my life)
contest entry29 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
This is true senryu. It's slightly ironic, slightly self-depractaing, but it reflects what is so many lives, an unfinished jigsaw. The imagery is simple to follow but truly apt for the imperfect worlds we create for itself. Most people's lives have missing pieces, and for some the bits will never be found. Good philosophy, wrapped in a tiny poem.
Good luck in teh contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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This is true senryu. It's slightly ironic, slightly self-depractaing, but it reflects what is so many lives, an unfinished jigsaw. The imagery is simple to follow but truly apt for the imperfect worlds we create for itself. Most people's lives have missing pieces, and for some the bits will never be found. Good philosophy, wrapped in a tiny poem.
Good luck in teh contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from amada
Beautiful and very authentic response to senryu yourself. We all have some pieces missing, indeed. Very funny and very universal. Beautiful.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Beautiful and very authentic response to senryu yourself. We all have some pieces missing, indeed. Very funny and very universal. Beautiful.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Dom G Robles
This poem meets the requirement of the Snryu. The writer's life -- a jiogsaw puzzle with a few pieces missing." The writer claims she/he is imperfect and there are few things lacking, which is truly the case. But the imperfections was not revealed, although short to be expressed in the requirement (to state what you are), one could be specific and yet expressive. I did not see much in this poem. Try to qualify the "few pieces missing."
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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This poem meets the requirement of the Snryu. The writer's life -- a jiogsaw puzzle with a few pieces missing." The writer claims she/he is imperfect and there are few things lacking, which is truly the case. But the imperfections was not revealed, although short to be expressed in the requirement (to state what you are), one could be specific and yet expressive. I did not see much in this poem. Try to qualify the "few pieces missing."
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you
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Welcome. Dom
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
I love the simplistic artwork, complimenting your poem very well. Makes a nicely put together presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Hi,
I love the simplistic artwork, complimenting your poem very well. Makes a nicely put together presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Julia.
Love it! I think that many of us can relate to the sentiment expressed here. Just hope the missing pieces aren't essential ones. :)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Love it! I think that many of us can relate to the sentiment expressed here. Just hope the missing pieces aren't essential ones. :)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from l.raven
OMG, I think there will be a lot who will relate to this poem...I know I do....just trying to find the pieces...so very well thought of...and very well written...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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OMG, I think there will be a lot who will relate to this poem...I know I do....just trying to find the pieces...so very well thought of...and very well written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you
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you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from gypsycaravan
At last, a senryu that makes sense. Thanks for posting and describing the life of most everyone. No one has all the pieces. Good luck with your prompt contest.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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At last, a senryu that makes sense. Thanks for posting and describing the life of most everyone. No one has all the pieces. Good luck with your prompt contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from Glasstruth
Like this one. Very clever. Life is definitely a puzzle, and having a few pieces missing can't be written better. Good luck with the contest. A pleasure to read. Les
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Like this one. Very clever. Life is definitely a puzzle, and having a few pieces missing can't be written better. Good luck with the contest. A pleasure to read. Les
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from victor 66
Very well done. Your senryu on "yourself" read very smoothly and, in my opinion, applies to everyone I know including myself. I wish you well and good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Very well done. Your senryu on "yourself" read very smoothly and, in my opinion, applies to everyone I know including myself. I wish you well and good luck.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you
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You are welcome.
Comment from Judy Couch
This would be an excellent phrase with which to start a story. You have said a lot in just a few words. You followed the prompt well.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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This would be an excellent phrase with which to start a story. You have said a lot in just a few words. You followed the prompt well.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you. that is a wonderful idea
