Comment from Lisa Deverick

Excellent

This is very clever indeed. Your words are words that I believe we have all felt and sometimes I would just like to add a few explicitives in my response to the 20 year old college student who knows it all... but of course, I delete before I hit send... This is a great write for the prompt. Well done!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016

Thank you so much. Wow, this was written two years ago, how did you find it?

reply by Lisa Deverick on 13-Jun-2016

I was looking at Fanstory best writes

reply by the author on 13-Jun-2016

Oh, I see (smile). That was a fun contest.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hi Yeltel,

Oh, how you made me smile and nod my head!

These animals are on to something. Those patronizing reviewers ....

Best wishes for the contest. Have a lovely day.

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. Sorry for the late reply.

Love and blessings, Y.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This was absolutely adorable. It was said in such a cute manner. You used very good imagery and very good wording. I love the artwork you chose for this also. Good luck. hug,
teri

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014

Thank you so much for the adorable review, Teri. I had a lot of fun with that one!

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This poem made me smile. It's entertaining and fun. It rhymes well. It includes a wide variety of animals most of whom are competing in a writing contest.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thank you for the grand review. So glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ha ha ha ha ha I m laughing like a hyena......we all have had these beastly reviews...it makes me go ape that no defense must be given ...something tells me me that is the best though. It would escalate and we'd all be walking in dung......
God bless...well done

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014

Thank you for the wonderful review, Jenny. Glad you got a kick out of it.

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

LOL--One of the better entries in this contest, dear Yelena. Well crafted with fine rhymes, good flow, creative 'animal
characters and a clear message too. Good parallel of haiku and review woven into your rhymed and timed work. Well done! Great closing word SMILE!

one suggestion:

They finally finished, all burnt-out and spent
- With my long neck, guys, it will take me a while

Put the dash on previous line:

They finally finished, all burnt-out and spent -
With my long neck, guys, it will take me a while

Favorite stanza (because of the clever rhyme and alliteration of B and fun references):

Oh, yeah, said the Bat - and what gets me berserk -
the site rules say we can't defend our own work!
I reckon, the Bible reads "turn other cheek" --
But I tell you, that doctrine's for spineless and meek!

Good luck in the contest.

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Rama, thank you for such a fabulous review and rating. I am glad you had a laugh or two out of it (smile).

Regarding your suggestion:

They finally finished, all burnt-out and spent
- With my long neck, guys, it will take me a while

Put the dash on previous line:

They finally finished, all burnt-out and spent -
With my long neck, guys, it will take me a while

I put "-" before the giraffe's speech to mark the speech itself; since I didn't pu tit in brackets

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Sorry, I pressed by button before it was finished.

Rama, thank you for such a fabulous review and rating. I am glad you had a laugh or two out of it (smile).

Regarding your suggestion:

They finally finished, all burnt-out and spent
- With my long neck, guys, it will take me a while

Put the dash on previous line:

They finally finished, all burnt-out and spent -
With my long neck, guys, it will take me a while

I put "-" before the giraffe's speech to mark the speech itself; since I didn't putit in in quotes or brackets.

This was a true fun contest.

Love, Y.

reply by rama devi on 28-Aug-2014

Thanks for your nice reply, dear Y. Love and smiles, rd

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi yeltel

I have enjoyed reading your poem. Great rhyme and wit in content. I enjoyed your tongue-in-cheek humour. ooops ... I just told someone in a haiku contest, I thought it too long........ not your poem, I swear. lol

Just love your selected image. The cadence in your poem is a pleasure to read with a jaunty pace which embellishes the fun nature of the theme. Great humour and a fine entry. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Thank you for the terrific review, Lovinia, and the rating. I am so glad you enjoyed my poem and got a kick out of it. I had lots of fun with it.

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

This was very cute, yeltel. You wrote a witty story about Fanstory using animals as your witnesses. LOL

I think you deserve a win with this one. We'll have to wait and see. Good luck.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014

Thank you for the fabulous review.

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

I enjoyed your very clever entry in
this contest. Excellent rhyme and meter
and witty lines that define some of the
back and forth here on Fanstory as to
reviewing. Good luck in the contest. Nancy

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review, so sorry for the delay in replying to it.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

You certainly complied with the requirements for this unusual contest and added the perfect picture. I enjoyed your rhymed couplets and storytelling in these rhythmic quatrains. Your reviewer description in this FanStory zoo is choice. You did "make me smile" too! Best wishes in the competition with this strong contender- Joan, from Eureka, Northern, California

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review, Joan, so sorry for the delay in replying to it. I had great fun with that prompt.