Corn Dodger -- 2 of 2
Gold in the snowy mountains.34 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
Hahaha. Love your notes. I wish I could offer some kind of suggestion. You always have something worthwhile to offer me in a review. But, it is so damn good that all I can do is enjoy it. I wish their was more of it. I suppose that is something I would submit. These are great characters that I would love to see again. I am left wanting to know what happens next. Here he is with his two new brides on his way to his mine. Sounds like a great story could be coming. In any case. Loved this. mikey
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Hahaha. Love your notes. I wish I could offer some kind of suggestion. You always have something worthwhile to offer me in a review. But, it is so damn good that all I can do is enjoy it. I wish their was more of it. I suppose that is something I would submit. These are great characters that I would love to see again. I am left wanting to know what happens next. Here he is with his two new brides on his way to his mine. Sounds like a great story could be coming. In any case. Loved this. mikey
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Mikey. Enjoyment is the best review ever. I write to entertain. And it keeps me from visiting hookers.
Peace, Lee
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Just for the record, I did read # 1 first... LOL ... very fine entertainment pardner. Old Catlaw turns out to be a real friend. And gives a young and pretty wife to boot. Joe, I guess, decided a squaw named Daisy Mae might not be so bad after all.
Thanks for sharing,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Just for the record, I did read # 1 first... LOL ... very fine entertainment pardner. Old Catlaw turns out to be a real friend. And gives a young and pretty wife to boot. Joe, I guess, decided a squaw named Daisy Mae might not be so bad after all.
Thanks for sharing,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Carolyn. I had no doubts that you would read in the proper order. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from pafaust
You are such a tease...2 parts is not enough. I wasn't surprised that Three Knives came to the rescue, but having the wives that he was giving away do the saving was pretty cool. Quite frankly, though, I think Daisy Mae deserves her own story. I'm not a religious person, but I thought that the earlier reference to going to the seminary and then having him wondering if God was helping him was amusing and interesting.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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You are such a tease...2 parts is not enough. I wasn't surprised that Three Knives came to the rescue, but having the wives that he was giving away do the saving was pretty cool. Quite frankly, though, I think Daisy Mae deserves her own story. I'm not a religious person, but I thought that the earlier reference to going to the seminary and then having him wondering if God was helping him was amusing and interesting.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Yes, pafaust, I believe you're right. There is more to this story. But I get antsy when I work on one thing for too long.
I need variety. But I think I'll come back to Corn Dodger and his new wives pretty quickly. Even I am curious.
Thanks so much. Peace, Lee
Comment from Patti R.
Part 2 is just as fantastic as Part 1, making for a great story through and through! Your use of vernacular, of slang is phenomenal. Rich! I do believe you can time-travel. I can see you sitting at the back of the saloon, hunkered down at a table, waiting for your turn upstairs, soaking up whiskey and local talk.
The following are my favorite bits but rest assured that entire paragraphs, hell, the entire write might have been copied here:
A windblown dusting that tended to piebald the ground rather than cover it evenly.
Past shale crops and spindly spruce copses
careful he wasn't showing above the skyline. (You daub on the details, like a painter)
this was the spot to make a fight from. ( This tripped me up a bit, how's about 'this was the best spot to fight from.')
So I suggest you be reasonable polite 'til carnal understandin's is reached."
I ought a charge you more, but we already spit. Cracked me up! I liked Three Knives.
Patti
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Part 2 is just as fantastic as Part 1, making for a great story through and through! Your use of vernacular, of slang is phenomenal. Rich! I do believe you can time-travel. I can see you sitting at the back of the saloon, hunkered down at a table, waiting for your turn upstairs, soaking up whiskey and local talk.
The following are my favorite bits but rest assured that entire paragraphs, hell, the entire write might have been copied here:
A windblown dusting that tended to piebald the ground rather than cover it evenly.
Past shale crops and spindly spruce copses
careful he wasn't showing above the skyline. (You daub on the details, like a painter)
this was the spot to make a fight from. ( This tripped me up a bit, how's about 'this was the best spot to fight from.')
So I suggest you be reasonable polite 'til carnal understandin's is reached."
I ought a charge you more, but we already spit. Cracked me up! I liked Three Knives.
Patti
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thanks for a terrific review, Patti. I wonder how many readers understand 'piebald' in this (or any other) context? Sometimes I delight myself with arcane bits of knowledge.
I like these characters, too. I'm already planning on a visit to Joe's digs to find out how he's taking to married life. Of course, Three Knives will be part of the festivities.
Thank you, Patti. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peach, Lee
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I am delighted you delight yourself with arcane bits of knowledge! I do the same. For example, I know why the coyote shits in the middle of the road ...
I believe you have misspelled Peace!
Oh yes, you need to go back to Joe's!
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Brilliant closing of this two part story, my friend. Loved every word of it. Good continuity and it did not let off on the pace.
PS: Congrats on the no.1, haven't checked the ratings for a while.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Brilliant closing of this two part story, my friend. Loved every word of it. Good continuity and it did not let off on the pace.
PS: Congrats on the no.1, haven't checked the ratings for a while.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Schalk. Glad you enjoyed. I'm sure the #1 ranking is temporary. Some people care more than I do.
Peace, Lee
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Great fun, double oh. The way you set up the gunfight/ambush was artfully done, with all the bullets flying.
Had a chuckle at the end too, with Daisy Mae. Joe's in for an interesting night, it seems. ;)
this was the spot to make a fight from. - this sounded a bit awkward to me, my dear James, and a member of HMSS should never sound awkward.
. ...this was the spot to make a stand. ??
Av
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Great fun, double oh. The way you set up the gunfight/ambush was artfully done, with all the bullets flying.
Had a chuckle at the end too, with Daisy Mae. Joe's in for an interesting night, it seems. ;)
this was the spot to make a fight from. - this sounded a bit awkward to me, my dear James, and a member of HMSS should never sound awkward.
. ...this was the spot to make a stand. ??
Av
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Av. I'm clumsy when it comes to action scenes. But I'm trying. You're right about the awkward sentence. Sometimes I forget that narration is different from dialogue. I'll make the adjustment. So, Moneypenny, care to see my digs?
Peace, Lee
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Oh, double oh. You smooth talking..
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...sonofabitch is what you were thinking, right?
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No. No, no, no, no, no. Absolutely not.
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Damn! I like it when women call me 'sonofabitch'. Reminds me of all my common-law wives--may they rest in peace. L
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Which is why I'm an expert on forest fungi.
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Hmmmm, Moneypenny, this one eludes me.
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I was talking to a guy in the line at the store. The conversation got around to wives, and he said he had been widowed three times. I said "Three wives, all dead and buried?" He said "Yes."
"What happened to the first one?"
"Poison Mushrooms."
"What happened to the second one?"
"Poison Mushrooms."
"And the third?"
"Fractured skull."
"How did that happen?"
"She wouldn't eat the poison mushrooms."
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Sonofabitch! You set me up!
Now it's all so clear.
Me? I just natter them until they self-expire. I'm a black belt natterer. Watch yourself.
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Wouldn't bother me at all. I love a good natter.
Comment from Titan Black
That's why I never enter the wilderness, with
no way of leaving. Especially by myself?
Anyway, you have great writing skills. And
You did a great job with this write. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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That's why I never enter the wilderness, with
no way of leaving. Especially by myself?
Anyway, you have great writing skills. And
You did a great job with this write. Keep writing.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Titan Black. I hope you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from barkingdog
Now, I want to know what happens with the new wives. LOL
Catlaw really know how to set his prices. Wives, a mule AND rifles!
Great story. It leaves me wanting more.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Now, I want to know what happens with the new wives. LOL
Catlaw really know how to set his prices. Wives, a mule AND rifles!
Great story. It leaves me wanting more.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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You're so right, Ellen. Even I want to know what happens next. I need to write a couple stand-alone pieces, then I'll look in a Joe and the gals. Thank you. Glad you enjoyed.
Peace, Lee
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I look forward to Part 3. :)e
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
NICE BELIEVABLE WESTERN FICTION. I CAN ALMOST PICTURE THIS IN A SCREEN PLAY OR SOMETHING.I LIKE THE INTRIGUING STORYLINE.WELL DONE. GREAT JOB!
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NICE BELIEVABLE WESTERN FICTION. I CAN ALMOST PICTURE THIS IN A SCREEN PLAY OR SOMETHING.I LIKE THE INTRIGUING STORYLINE.WELL DONE. GREAT JOB!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from Twilightspire
Lol. Nice author notes.
This story continued the first part magnificently. The action was tense and quick, as it should be and the unexpected rescue by Catlaw was a well written.
Again, you have an amazing flair for capturing the spirit of a true western in this. I love the dialogue, both inner and spoken. It added so much to the story.
Great job on this.
-T.J.
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Lol. Nice author notes.
This story continued the first part magnificently. The action was tense and quick, as it should be and the unexpected rescue by Catlaw was a well written.
Again, you have an amazing flair for capturing the spirit of a true western in this. I love the dialogue, both inner and spoken. It added so much to the story.
Great job on this.
-T.J.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
