A Breeze Swept Through
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from bertodi
I think this is just great- I take it was meant for children- but I found that as I was a refugee as a child, I adore children's writings as an adult, besides my literature degrees and Masters- I just love them and spent hours reading to my children, nursery rhymes I had never heard- our childhoods were different with a different type of focus, soldiers, sour grass, nightmares-- I think this is great, I had never thought about that breeze on my cheek having been elsewhere- wonderful
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I think this is just great- I take it was meant for children- but I found that as I was a refugee as a child, I adore children's writings as an adult, besides my literature degrees and Masters- I just love them and spent hours reading to my children, nursery rhymes I had never heard- our childhoods were different with a different type of focus, soldiers, sour grass, nightmares-- I think this is great, I had never thought about that breeze on my cheek having been elsewhere- wonderful
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Love this poem Brooke The Quatern style is so catchy, seems to roll of the tongue. Lots of description and movement in your words. Good choice of artwork Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Love this poem Brooke The Quatern style is so catchy, seems to roll of the tongue. Lots of description and movement in your words. Good choice of artwork Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Gaye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
The repetition here works really well. Especially the first line is a great choice to start this off with. As always, your rhyming is superb. A great poem about nature. Wonderful!!! Les
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The repetition here works really well. Especially the first line is a great choice to start this off with. As always, your rhyming is superb. A great poem about nature. Wonderful!!! Les
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
Comment from tdragonfly
Life's message can often be found in nature. The mighty oak has stood the test of time compared to the leaves and reeds of life. The photo was a nice compliment to the poem.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Life's message can often be found in nature. The mighty oak has stood the test of time compared to the leaves and reeds of life. The photo was a nice compliment to the poem.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, tdragonfly :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I loved the art work here for these words very much.
A breeze can be a pleasant feeling upon ones skin.
I loved the words written about the oak as well
it stays steady except for the leaves
that brush against our skin.
honey tree
I have no six left
I love the art work so much here and the words written.
A breeze can be a pleasant feeling to receive upon ones skin.
The oak shows us how steady and strong and still it can be.
Wonderful poem.
Annie
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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I loved the art work here for these words very much.
A breeze can be a pleasant feeling upon ones skin.
I loved the words written about the oak as well
it stays steady except for the leaves
that brush against our skin.
honey tree
I have no six left
I love the art work so much here and the words written.
A breeze can be a pleasant feeling to receive upon ones skin.
The oak shows us how steady and strong and still it can be.
Wonderful poem.
Annie
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Annie, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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loved what you wrote.
Annie
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
A breeze that barely moves the leaf
Will never stir the oaks's proud stand
But even oaks will come to grief
Before the typhoon's brutal hand.
Just take care where you stand when next
You see the oaken branches flex.
Reg
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Dear Brooke,
A breeze that barely moves the leaf
Will never stir the oaks's proud stand
But even oaks will come to grief
Before the typhoon's brutal hand.
Just take care where you stand when next
You see the oaken branches flex.
Reg
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Reg :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great photo and perfectly described with this rhyming poem. Lovely repeating line
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin
Really enjoyed this one Brooke.
valda
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Great photo and perfectly described with this rhyming poem. Lovely repeating line
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin
Really enjoyed this one Brooke.
valda
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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valda, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I love your mastery of these forms. A lot of thought provoking images here. I love how the leaf, a part of the tree is at the whim of the breeze while the tree itself pays it no mind. Seldom used neurons pop in my head! One of my very first poems when I was thirteen was "I Tried To Catch A Breeze". I've always loved the wind. Can't see it, know where it comes from or where it goes. A poets dream. Great piece as always. It's even paying!!! mikey
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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I love your mastery of these forms. A lot of thought provoking images here. I love how the leaf, a part of the tree is at the whim of the breeze while the tree itself pays it no mind. Seldom used neurons pop in my head! One of my very first poems when I was thirteen was "I Tried To Catch A Breeze". I've always loved the wind. Can't see it, know where it comes from or where it goes. A poets dream. Great piece as always. It's even paying!!! mikey
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Mikey :-) Glad you could connect :-) Brooke
Comment from DerivedBetter
This was good. As I read it felt as if i was experiencing the breezes progesion as it dropped a line each stanza. Well done. thank you for sharing.
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This was good. As I read it felt as if i was experiencing the breezes progesion as it dropped a line each stanza. Well done. thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
Comment from Tonulak
Hi Brooke,
I really loved this. I rode with poem like a leaf on a breeze and found this lovely closing passage:
"The oak stayed steady, strong and still
against a breeze that lacked wind's will --
Not all's a war to lose or win.
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin. "
Lovely work as always--Ted
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I really loved this. I rode with poem like a leaf on a breeze and found this lovely closing passage:
"The oak stayed steady, strong and still
against a breeze that lacked wind's will --
Not all's a war to lose or win.
A breeze swept through and brushed my skin. "
Lovely work as always--Ted
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Ted, thank you so much for such gracious comments :-) Brooke
