The Value of an Education
Education affects the whole world36 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
This is a long write, but I found nothing negative within, in fact, I found your views very dignified and justified.
So many have answers when they know very little. So many are headstrong yet they have not learned to respect the answers.
So many refuse to learn yet want us to believe they already know that which should have been taught.
Education comes in all forms so to stereotype one over the other would not be feasible. Yet education is, apart from love, the only other remedy to everlasting peace, understanding and a fruitful end to that which is difficult..including life.
A good write my friend.
I have a saying;: Do not answer that which you cannot. Answer instead that which you know, and ask for guidance in that which you would like to grow.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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This is a long write, but I found nothing negative within, in fact, I found your views very dignified and justified.
So many have answers when they know very little. So many are headstrong yet they have not learned to respect the answers.
So many refuse to learn yet want us to believe they already know that which should have been taught.
Education comes in all forms so to stereotype one over the other would not be feasible. Yet education is, apart from love, the only other remedy to everlasting peace, understanding and a fruitful end to that which is difficult..including life.
A good write my friend.
I have a saying;: Do not answer that which you cannot. Answer instead that which you know, and ask for guidance in that which you would like to grow.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Good advice RGstar, thank you for your review & great comments. Giovanni
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Well, certainly a different take on the education and educated. It is densely written, I would change the font, as it is visually hard to read.
I like the way the progression of the poem strides to the end.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hi. Well, certainly a different take on the education and educated. It is densely written, I would change the font, as it is visually hard to read.
I like the way the progression of the poem strides to the end.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Padumachitta thank you for your comments & review. Giovanni
What is a better font for reading? I should like to try it on my next poem "Poets Have Always Saved the World"
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Hi. It sort of depends on the look of the poem...I think as I get older, I get more sensitive to font...so it might be me.(old eyes)
Play around with it...and by the way, the rating i gave you was not affected by the font...I was just giving my opinion...
i look forward to you next poem:-)
padumachitta
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Thank you for the feedback, never gave it a thought. I love & I crave well written sincere criticism because that is the only way we truly learn. That is why FanStory.com has been and is great for me.
Have a good day; GMT
Comment from l.raven
I try to impress on my grandkids how important an education is...I wish I had gone further on in education...high school was it...but I made sure my kids went to college...very well written...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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I try to impress on my grandkids how important an education is...I wish I had gone further on in education...high school was it...but I made sure my kids went to college...very well written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Linda thank you for your review. Giovanni
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you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from risktaker
Outstanding presentation. I love the choice of words, tone, structure, and flow. I love the imagery and the message. I agree with the author's notes. I relate to "peace has no relation to anything worldly for when pitted against money,power, pride, or control, an unworldly cowardly alien fiasco transpires.' thanks
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Outstanding presentation. I love the choice of words, tone, structure, and flow. I love the imagery and the message. I agree with the author's notes. I relate to "peace has no relation to anything worldly for when pitted against money,power, pride, or control, an unworldly cowardly alien fiasco transpires.' thanks
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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What can I say Risktaker, thank you for your great review. Giovanni
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ok
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Ristaker thank you for your wonderful review and 6 Star rating. Giovanni
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You are welcome
Comment from Dom G Robles
Very well written. I love this Essay. Very educational. I suggest it is a good reading material for students in either high school or college. It is neatly written and with authority. There was not any section that is wandering. The structure, nay, the paragraphs were built in a manner that supports the previous ones. HOWEVER, I want to comment on something I had seen from seasoned writers and which, I also noticed in this Essay. I cannot truly accept even at this modern day the consistency of subject and predicate. ..."millions and billions of each one desiring THEIR own Niche." Another: ":...then one will be rewarded beyond THEIR wildest dreams..." Can anyone help clarify...? Spiritual Echo or Adewpearl?
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Very well written. I love this Essay. Very educational. I suggest it is a good reading material for students in either high school or college. It is neatly written and with authority. There was not any section that is wandering. The structure, nay, the paragraphs were built in a manner that supports the previous ones. HOWEVER, I want to comment on something I had seen from seasoned writers and which, I also noticed in this Essay. I cannot truly accept even at this modern day the consistency of subject and predicate. ..."millions and billions of each one desiring THEIR own Niche." Another: ":...then one will be rewarded beyond THEIR wildest dreams..." Can anyone help clarify...? Spiritual Echo or Adewpearl?
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Dom thank you for your review. Giovanni I apologize, not that schooled in the English language other than grade, & high; never expected to be a writer & never really appreciated it, now in older age I am & place together what sounds good to my ear. It probably is incorrect.
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Hi, Giovani, I did not mean to critise, my friend. It is truly that I had seen this many times in some magazines or in some technical articles, which I think, truly violates correct usage of grammar. But I think, this is now acceptable. Just like in emails where sometimes they do not use the Capital letters for Proper nouns now they do it under the lower key. And I ask grammarians for our own benefit so I would know really if it is now acceptable in this Modern English. But believe me, my friend, you write pretty well and I admire your style. SMILE and have a nice day! Dom
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Dear Dom, I didn't take any offense at all I appreciate honest criticism that is really the only way to learn. I have to be honest I still don't fully mentally comprehend what is being said. And, not to let it by, I do appreciate the compliment.
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Alright Giovani, my friend. It is something like this. In the quotation that I made: "millions and billions of each ONE desiring THEIR own niche. It should be: "millions and billions of each one desiring HIS or HER own niche. Having said that, the other would would be likewise. "then ONE will be rewarded beyond THEIR wildest dreams.... THEIR should be replaced by either HIS or HER. But as I said, this kind of writing must be
consistent. I had seen this kind of inconsistency from Seasoned magazines and periodicals and letters from seasoned writers. This is my own view point which I wanted to know from our friends from FanStory. I mentioned Spiritual Echo and Adewpearl because I know they help a lot and they are very proficient in the written language. CHEERS!
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Wow, I see. Dom, thank you for your explanation; yes, I do see it now. Frankly I never paid attention to it. I know that I will in the future & try to follow it as well as I can. I like it & it would actually enhance the poem. "millions and billions of each ONE desiring THEIR own niche, etc.
A good constructive criticism is always an occasion for learning.
Ciao, have a good evening. Giovanni
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Education is a must, no one can deny that. I also think wisdom from experience is important too. You have written a long piece, but it does all make sense and was an interesting read. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Education is a must, no one can deny that. I also think wisdom from experience is important too. You have written a long piece, but it does all make sense and was an interesting read. :) Sandra
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Sandramitchell thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from livelylinda
giovannimariatommasco: I'm having a difficult time seeing this piece of writing as a poem. It doesn't look like a poem, nor read like a poem, there is no rhythm or rhyme. It reads like a personal essay, going on and on and on like a long-winded speaker in a monotone. My honest opinion, livelylinda
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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giovannimariatommasco: I'm having a difficult time seeing this piece of writing as a poem. It doesn't look like a poem, nor read like a poem, there is no rhythm or rhyme. It reads like a personal essay, going on and on and on like a long-winded speaker in a monotone. My honest opinion, livelylinda
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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giovannimariatommaso; Livelylinda thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from Pyrrho
The subject essay is prose, not poetry, but it borders on poetry. The message cannot be sent often enough because the wrong folks hear it.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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The subject essay is prose, not poetry, but it borders on poetry. The message cannot be sent often enough because the wrong folks hear it.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Pyrrho thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from ravenblack
Knowledge that does not build around an inner core of nature, the accumulation of facts with no grounding, is pointless. I think most everyone learns more out of school than in. However, most damage to the world stems from ignorance, the lack of education. You have some good ideas her, but the presentation and form is more that of a prose essay than a poem.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Knowledge that does not build around an inner core of nature, the accumulation of facts with no grounding, is pointless. I think most everyone learns more out of school than in. However, most damage to the world stems from ignorance, the lack of education. You have some good ideas her, but the presentation and form is more that of a prose essay than a poem.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Ravenblack thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from visionary1234
I definitely 'get' your message and bravo for your thoughts here! However, I think your piece would have been way more effective if it were less long winded and more concentrated - eg you mix clichés ("Every day and in every way") with your serious intent and that dilutes the whole impact of your piece. Also, you need some 'poetry' within this piece - at the moment it truly reads more like a piece of prose. I found myself spacing out after the first three verses I'm afraid. Sorry!
:)S
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I definitely 'get' your message and bravo for your thoughts here! However, I think your piece would have been way more effective if it were less long winded and more concentrated - eg you mix clichés ("Every day and in every way") with your serious intent and that dilutes the whole impact of your piece. Also, you need some 'poetry' within this piece - at the moment it truly reads more like a piece of prose. I found myself spacing out after the first three verses I'm afraid. Sorry!
:)S
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Visionary1234 thank you for your reactions and review. Any writing that can extract a person's true sentiments is well worthwhile. Giovanni
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absolutely!
