A Golden Coverlet
quatrains in abab rhyme137 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
This had such a royal feel to the speech pattern. It took me a couple false starts to get the rhythm right. Then it flowed so perfectly. I felt so apart of it they way you worded it. It seems to really draw the reader in. I can't tell how you did that. Perhaps the order of the words is a little unusual. But, it isn't inside out or forced, just slightly different from the expected. I love the last line. Almost like verbally musing up the readers hair. A very engaging and fun piece. mikey
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This had such a royal feel to the speech pattern. It took me a couple false starts to get the rhythm right. Then it flowed so perfectly. I felt so apart of it they way you worded it. It seems to really draw the reader in. I can't tell how you did that. Perhaps the order of the words is a little unusual. But, it isn't inside out or forced, just slightly different from the expected. I love the last line. Almost like verbally musing up the readers hair. A very engaging and fun piece. mikey
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Mikey :-) Brooke
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Adewpearl: You deserve the all time best with this beautiful poem and photo! The monarch, sun and fairy can't compete with your beauty of words! I love the golden threads on the brown earth. You have a great style.
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Adewpearl: You deserve the all time best with this beautiful poem and photo! The monarch, sun and fairy can't compete with your beauty of words! I love the golden threads on the brown earth. You have a great style.
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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flylikeaneagle, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
This is another modern classic that I feel so happy and fortunate to have read this morning. Ending with a question, one is left to ponder his/her own spirituality. Terrific!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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This is another modern classic that I feel so happy and fortunate to have read this morning. Ending with a question, one is left to ponder his/her own spirituality. Terrific!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Bill, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
This poem had me all excited. Our spring is in the air and we can't wait for all the flowers to start blooming. This very visual poem of the golden coverlet is very special. Makes me think of God's palette. He paints such masterpieces. Loved it. luv jada
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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This poem had me all excited. Our spring is in the air and we can't wait for all the flowers to start blooming. This very visual poem of the golden coverlet is very special. Makes me think of God's palette. He paints such masterpieces. Loved it. luv jada
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Jada - our fall will arrive soon with many of the flowers dying. I prefer what you have to look forward too :-) Brooke
Comment from gypsycaravan
Only God knows and was certainly responsible. He probably had some street paving material from heaven left over and had to dump it somewhere. So glad it was here. Lovely poem. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Only God knows and was certainly responsible. He probably had some street paving material from heaven left over and had to dump it somewhere. So glad it was here. Lovely poem. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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gypsycaravan, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely woven poem with easy flow of rhyme. You give a clear image of a field of yellow flowers that has appeared seemingly out of nowhere. The narrator looks to find the creator of this beautiful sight and comes to the conclusion it has to come from someplace unearthly.
It is a beautiful picture. It inspired a wonderful poem.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Nicely woven poem with easy flow of rhyme. You give a clear image of a field of yellow flowers that has appeared seemingly out of nowhere. The narrator looks to find the creator of this beautiful sight and comes to the conclusion it has to come from someplace unearthly.
It is a beautiful picture. It inspired a wonderful poem.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Joan, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from mfowler
I guess the image saved us figuring it out. LOL.
I like this conundrum in a poem. A child's voice finds a yellow/golden coverlet, and a thought problem is setup. He explores his fantasy world and can't solve the mystery. I thought your offered solutions were charming, but I have a particular soft spot for:No monarch 'mongst the butterflies
had lent the gold that formed his crown. Great verse as always.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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I guess the image saved us figuring it out. LOL.
I like this conundrum in a poem. A child's voice finds a yellow/golden coverlet, and a thought problem is setup. He explores his fantasy world and can't solve the mystery. I thought your offered solutions were charming, but I have a particular soft spot for:No monarch 'mongst the butterflies
had lent the gold that formed his crown. Great verse as always.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, mfowler, for your thoughtful review. :-) Brooke
Comment from heyjude
Brooke, Great job on this rhyming quatrain. I can
see how this great photo inspired you. It is beautiful.
I know who made that golden coverlet. He created a lot
of beauty for us.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Brooke, Great job on this rhyming quatrain. I can
see how this great photo inspired you. It is beautiful.
I know who made that golden coverlet. He created a lot
of beauty for us.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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heyjude, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rosebramble
Beautiful flow of thoughts in this poem. This is charming with refreshing ideas of a golden flower. The picture matches perfectly with your poem.
Thanks for sharing:-)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Beautiful flow of thoughts in this poem. This is charming with refreshing ideas of a golden flower. The picture matches perfectly with your poem.
Thanks for sharing:-)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Rosebramble, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from chasennov
quatrains in abab rhyme 'A Golden Coverlet.' This is a most gorgeous poem you have created here. I love the rhythm and also the rhyming of this poem. Well done, Brooke.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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quatrains in abab rhyme 'A Golden Coverlet.' This is a most gorgeous poem you have created here. I love the rhythm and also the rhyming of this poem. Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you, chasennov, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome, Brooke.
